I think that the story is superb, the stuff that makes for good in game myths, this young girl could later go on to great things, etc etc and I could pronounce all of the names in the post. In that, it would be easy to change the names to something else to integrate this tale, and the attached boots into almost any game setting. Go to Comment
This would be a fine post without Mes, the dangers of winter travel, moving a caravan through deep snow, and dealing with the predators that haunt the white wastes. Mes himself seems completely 1 dimensional, and I thik actually detracts from the piece as a whole. Go to Comment
The first comment that comes to mind is what would happen if the cloak was put on a dead body? Would that be enough to instigate the magic, or would it just be a magic cloak on a cadaver? Short and sweet too. Go to Comment
While the wording (bracer vs. bracelet) can be a little nit-picky, I think this is a good item since it definately has an artistic value to it, rather than meandering over into rune etched, glowing sigils sort of thing. I would imagine that the Frost Thorn would be quite the eye-turner even when it wasnt a frozen weapon. Go to Comment
Great character, motivation, backstory, the whole works. I like how she didnt start out looking for vengeance, or to increase her magical power, but simlpy went looking for the fairies on the glacier. I think she could also function as an anachronism since the glacial pace of her life has made her witness to many things that others wouldnt have noticed. I also like her name (Celsia, celsius) Go to Comment
Voted most likely to become a liche by his graduating class, before he soul-devoured each of them. sometimes a sympathetic villian with understandable, human motives cannot compare with something that has become so divorced from human morality that it really no longer constitutes a human being. Go to Comment
Alright, the twinning factor is certainly interesting but there has to be some sort of limiting factor to prevent the ubiquitous assault by millions upon millions of temporally manipulated berzerker warriors.
The whole area should be handlted judiciously and misuse should invoke the legendary Wrath of the DM! Go to Comment
Reminds me of Death Note, in the concept of writing a persons name causing them to die. It does need some sort of backstory to go with it, a sort of where it came from an why it exists sort of thing.
How precise does the name have to be, is the full name required, or birth name, or can it work with just a first name and specific intent? Could a wizard or noble avoid this spell by having a secret true name and the public name they go by? Go to Comment
The idea is solid, and the story of Rhian is not bad, though his name is repeated too many times. I like the basic premise of the idea, though the powers are too game specific. They won't work very well in a setting that doesnt use weapon speed or other factors. Go to Comment