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The Isle of Crustaciano
Locations  (Water)   (City)
Scrasamax's comment on 2004-08-07 06:37 AM
This is certainly an interesting setting. I would have given it a higher rating, but I would like to know more about Crustaciano as a character other than being a large crab-like entity.

I do also have a few questions for you to consider. Since the island is mud and silt, what keeps it from being eroded away by the action of the ocean. This might also be what makes the island have a viable port, since a viable port will need to offer respite and protection from storms and rough seas.

I imagined the palaces and shops having an organic look to them, as if they grew out of the mud made of gleaming gold and jewels. I could also see two foot long shrimp like creatures that saw to the daily maintainence and cleaning of the island. The more I think about it, the more I put the animals associated with a reef into the island, a half-moray sherrif, loyal to Crustaciano of course. An octopod creature as a rival, since octopus eat crabs and such.

Just my two cents
3/5 Go to Comment
Mytrian, The Wise
NPCs  (Campaign)   (Mystical)
Scrasamax's comment on 2012-09-01 09:52 AM
Just be like Gandalf. Go to Comment
Abdelfettah's Escape
Plots  (Nature)   (Single-Storyline)
Scrasamax's comment on 2006-05-31 09:58 AM
This is a very well written plot, and I like the genuine and honest motive of the merchant as compared to the much more common fraud, greed, or trickery that is all too common among merchants these gaming days. When in doubt, follow the camels they know where water is. Go to Comment
Rangerwood
Locations  (Forest/ Jungle)   (Country/ State)
Scrasamax's comment on 2006-06-04 10:32 AM
Several unique locations, a solid amount of history, some enigmas and an evil copse of trees. How often has the all ranger/druid game been played? Not enough If you ask me. I also like the protection of the trees as the rangers think any of them might be a surviving scion as opposed to being hug the trees love the trees trees are out friends sorts. Go to Comment
The Desert Temple...
Locations  (Desert)   (Ruins)
Scrasamax's comment on 2007-07-02 08:05 AM
This is certainly an eerie location, one that could set alot of characters and players on edge. Surely something terrible and evil happened hear, a demon, a horror from beyond, the entire place could be infested with ghosts, it wouldnt matter. They wouldnt stay long, they wouldnt wait for me to spring the trap on them. But in this case there would be no trap, the place is simply empty now, but it's magic and enchantments remain. Go to Comment
Keep Silence
Locations  (Ruins)   (Any)
Scrasamax's comment on 2007-07-02 08:01 AM
I echo Zylithian's comment, I love the way this post comes across as a rumor in a back tavern, and without so much as a single bit of description I can imagine Keep Silence in all of it's crumbling splendor. Nicely done, though I would put some spaces between the various speakers lines to make it easier to read. Go to Comment
Tarsir Celebalda
NPCs  (Major)   (Combative)
Scrasamax's comment on 2007-11-08 02:43 AM
How in the world did this submission garner such a high score being derived from Tolkien's work without being utterly ripped on for using so much of Tolkien's work? Go to Comment
Akibara
Plots  (Duty)   (Single-Storyline)
Scrasamax's comment on 2006-05-31 09:54 AM
I like the prophet, the cursed sword and the Madness of the king. This could come around again, with the PCs seeing the second coming of the mystic bearing peace and a sword. Can they react in time to keep their homeland from being blasted? I wonder about the mystic himself, and would like to see more about him and his apocalypic gifts. Go to Comment
Umbral Clot
Items  (Materials)   (Non-Magical)
Scrasamax's comment on 2006-06-14 12:54 AM
It is the very lubricant that allows the shadow realm its ease of movement, slipping and sliding between all of those other dimensions and planes. Devilish stuff! Go to Comment
Sasha the Fox
NPCs  (Minor)   (Criminal/Espionage)
Scrasamax's comment on 2007-07-02 08:11 AM
An old sub from the v1.0 citadel, I love the idea of the Pirate's daughter. I can see the lustful and energetic PC and associated player's look of surprise when they discovered that the bonny lass they were giving a good roll to was the daughter of the infamous Pirate Lord Captain Phillen d'Blanc. Go to Comment
Randolphina the Mighty
NPCs  (Extras)   (Combative)
Scrasamax's comment on 2006-04-30 10:44 PM
Definately cracked, and the stroke of lightning could have really invested her with phantasmal memories dredged together from childhood stories, or might have even carried the dissembodied essence of Porthos the Electromancer! Or she could be as cracked as her shield. People hit by lightning really are a bit off...things just dont click the way that they should. Go to Comment
Xoct's Sauce
Items  (Other)   (Non-Magical)
Scrasamax's comment on 2006-03-17 04:20 PM
Next on Iron Chef Armorica, the secret ingredient - Xoct's Sauce.

Looks like the challenger is going to open with a light fennel, sunflowerseed and mandarin orange salad with a dressing of vinagrette and Xoct's Sauce. Oh my, that's fifty GP a bottle, and he's already used two!

Looks like he is going for a Xoct smoked ham, using a mixture of cloves, honey, and Xoct's sauce for a glaze. Using the dragonite chips in the smoker is a great way to smoke food fast. Oh, I agree!

Oh, looks like the Iron Chef is retaliating with a Xoct brulee, notice how he scorches the top of the brulee before adding the schnozzberries. Now that is a master's touch.

But he better be ready, looks like the challenger has added a mixtuire of honey water, cream, and XS to the elemental bowl of ice, looks like hes going to be making blue ice cream and decorating it with a sprig of Misteria blossom, how pretty!

3.5 but +.5 for the Iron Chef play by play this inspired Go to Comment
Jin Kalib's Boots of Shadow Walking
Items  (Clothes)   (Magical)
Scrasamax's comment on 2007-08-31 11:25 PM
...he went to Alaxsxaq Go to Comment
The Hellcoat
Items  (Clothes)   (Magical)
Scrasamax's comment on 2006-02-16 07:58 PM
A small tangent into the demented world of the good Captain... refreshing in light of the many would be cloaks of mystery and intrigue Go to Comment
Powder Keg
Plots  (Duty)   (Multi-Storyline)
Scrasamax's comment on 2006-05-31 09:51 AM
This could stand some paragraphing. While following the typical courtly intrigue, this plot benefits from the weight of the outcome, the fate of two kingdoms. Go to Comment
Aasimov
NPCs  (Major)   (Combative)
Scrasamax's comment on 2004-08-28 07:06 AM
Hmmm...flamboyant is certainly apt. I am curious as to how a person would go about wearing armor over a great coat. That seems to be rather contradictory.

People this colorful (orange eyes, purple and red coat, and a purple? sword) are generally either color blind, or playing at the fool.

More detail about the sword would be nice, as purple steel doesnt pop up every day. Why did the jealous mage blast the King into a fire elemental, wouldnt it have been easier to turn the slave girl into a toad, or a she-orc, or some other fate?

2/5 Go to Comment
The Crystal Sphere of the Throne
Items  (Other)   (Sentient)
Scrasamax's comment on 2006-05-31 10:19 AM
Being a regular Vampire player, I do have a soft spot for millenia old conservative manipulators. Go to Comment
Eastern Rabbit's Staff of Doom
Items  (Wand/Staff/ Arcane)   (Magical)
Scrasamax's comment on 2006-10-13 02:43 AM
I love the absurdity of it all! Go to Comment
The Balgrian Uprising of Midwessel
Plots  (Duty)   (Single-Storyline)
Scrasamax's comment on 2006-05-31 09:48 AM
The Balgrians sound like hippies who got tired of being oppressed by the man...man. Rousingly written for the beginings of a civil upheaval and civil war. Go to Comment
Bra of Holding
Items  (Clothes)   (Magical)
Scrasamax's comment on 2004-10-19 10:13 PM
This is a rather novel item, I must comment. It is also rather fitting as I do know a few ladies who on occassion use their bras to carry small items they dont want messed with. For the most part this is emergenct money for cab fare and such, but the concept is still the same.

One interesting fact is that the bra in its modern form is a relatively new invention, back in them there days, the common thing was the corset, which shoved those puppies right up for everyone to see. Check out a Renaissance festival for an eyefull.

As for the porno, porno music rocks! Okay, it really really sucks, like worse than the elevator music on the Weather Channel, but it is like pornos with plots, no one cares. Go to Comment
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