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Meridan
Plots  (Hired)   (Single-Storyline)
Scrasamax's comment on 2006-03-29 01:24 PM
protect the village from the greedy wizard... even Callista flockhart has more meat on her bones than this. Go to Comment
Glacier Mail
Items  (Armor)   (Magical)
Scrasamax's comment on 2006-03-29 01:11 PM
As I commented on the Frost Thorn, this item seems as much artistic as it does a functional magical item. Go to Comment
Frost Thorn
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Magical)
Scrasamax's comment on 2006-03-29 01:08 PM
While the wording (bracer vs. bracelet) can be a little nit-picky, I think this is a good item since it definately has an artistic value to it, rather than meandering over into rune etched, glowing sigils sort of thing. I would imagine that the Frost Thorn would be quite the eye-turner even when it wasnt a frozen weapon. Go to Comment
Celsia Frostblossom
NPCs  (Minor)   (Combative)
Scrasamax's comment on 2006-03-29 01:14 PM
Great character, motivation, backstory, the whole works. I like how she didnt start out looking for vengeance, or to increase her magical power, but simlpy went looking for the fairies on the glacier. I think she could also function as an anachronism since the glacial pace of her life has made her witness to many things that others wouldnt have noticed. I also like her name (Celsia, celsius) Go to Comment
Phoenix Talon
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Combat)
Scrasamax's comment on 2013-08-04 10:39 AM
I like the bit about the undead getting a second shot at what was taken from them Go to Comment
The Swords of Kanalith
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Combat)
Scrasamax's comment on 2006-04-10 03:06 PM
For the items themselves, I'd give this a generic 3, but the presentation was well done, and I really like both the backstory, and the names of the matched swords. Go to Comment
Tarquin
NPCs  (Major)   (Mystical)
Scrasamax's comment on 2006-01-10 11:19 PM
Voted most likely to become a liche by his graduating class, before he soul-devoured each of them. sometimes a sympathetic villian with understandable, human motives cannot compare with something that has become so divorced from human morality that it really no longer constitutes a human being. Go to Comment
Mask Cloak
Items  (Clothes)   (Magical)
Scrasamax's comment on 2012-09-24 11:40 PM
Ah, another original submission from the Old Citadel. My how our standards have changed since 2003.

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Circlet of Temporal Transmutation
Items  (Jewelry)   (Magical)
Scrasamax's comment on 2006-02-16 08:01 PM
Alright, the twinning factor is certainly interesting but there has to be some sort of limiting factor to prevent the ubiquitous assault by millions upon millions of temporally manipulated berzerker warriors.

The whole area should be handlted judiciously and misuse should invoke the legendary Wrath of the DM! Go to Comment
The Assassin's Scroll
Items  (Books and Scrolls)   (Magical)
Scrasamax's comment on 2013-08-04 10:42 AM
Reminds me of Death Note, in the concept of writing a persons name causing them to die. It does need some sort of backstory to go with it, a sort of where it came from an why it exists sort of thing.

How precise does the name have to be, is the full name required, or birth name, or can it work with just a first name and specific intent? Could a wizard or noble avoid this spell by having a secret true name and the public name they go by? Go to Comment
Boots of The Fowl
Items  (Clothes)   (Cursed)
Scrasamax's comment on 2007-06-21 08:12 AM
hahahahahahaha! Go to Comment
Dreamdweller
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Sentient)
Scrasamax's comment on 2006-03-29 01:05 PM
The idea is solid, and the story of Rhian is not bad, though his name is repeated too many times. I like the basic premise of the idea, though the powers are too game specific. They won't work very well in a setting that doesnt use weapon speed or other factors. Go to Comment
The Mystery of Far Tragin
Plots  (Hired)   (Multi-Storyline)
Scrasamax's comment on 2006-03-29 11:27 AM
More interesting could be the fact that the whole story was a wild yarn concocted by Verhast, and there were no frost giants, just superstition and an inhospital region. Go to Comment
Far Tragin
Locations  (Tundra/ Arctic)   (City)
Scrasamax's comment on 2006-03-29 11:26 AM
An interesting frontier community, and tied to the Mystery of Far Tragin, worthy of a read. Everything else seems to have been said. Go to Comment
Ring of Wit
Items  (Jewelry)   (Cursed)
Scrasamax's comment on 2006-05-31 10:30 AM
Neat item for punishing criminals, assassins and rogue mages. Their sentence could be a preset amount of time wearing the ring, though I can see the local law 'forgetting' to take the ring off of the fingers of convicts when their time is up. Go to Comment
Halëfas
Locations  (Country/ State)   (Forest/ Jungle)
Scrasamax's comment on 2008-05-05 08:52 AM
Ditto what CP said, generic militant elves.

On the other hand I do like posts like this for what they can be dissected for.

1. The trees were enchanted to produce white light day and night by Lord Valanair - Who was this Lord, is he still around, why did he magic the trees to glow? We already have a potential NPC, and an odd lifeform - the glowing trees.

2. The Flute of Vaxtar - what is it, what can it do, etc etc etc

3. Ellivanor, Meltifiace and Quelfinare - Three cities, three locations. Why is Ellivanor the largest? Are there any rivalries? What are the cities known for, if anything.

4. There is an army of seasoned elvish warriors supported by 240 rangers - Seasoned armies have seen combat and survived if not prevailed. Who have they fought, who are their enemies, what were their losses?

Unofortunelty I must give this submission a 1.5/5, other than spawning some interesting questions, it is still generic, vague, and alltogether too short. Go to Comment
The Understar
NPCs  (Mythic/ Historical)   (Mystical)
Scrasamax's comment on 2006-06-22 12:41 PM
Could use some cleaning up on the formatting side, but aside from that a staggeringly cool read. The names are pure Penguin, leading us off to ponder their meanings, my favorite being the Prince of the Endless Corridor. There is a very strong and resonate dichotomy between the Understar's calm demeanor, and the power of will that bound the nine monsters to the pearls and would unleash ruin upon the world. Go to Comment
Warhorn of the Forest Lords
Items  (Art and Music)   (Magical)
Scrasamax's comment on 2006-06-14 01:03 AM
Now this is a novel idea, though i think that the horn making a cloud is a bit...peculiar and I dont know how well the mechanics of that would work. Otherwise this is a class act idea! Go to Comment
Prankster Plant
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Forest/ Jungle)
Scrasamax's comment on 2013-08-04 10:46 AM
I Loled. Imagine the trouble an infestation of these plants could do in a village or city? Cue the silly music. Go to Comment
Urisk the Lonely
NPCs  (Scenario Based)   (Natural)
Scrasamax's comment on 2006-02-16 08:04 PM
i think that Urisk could be expanded upon and fleshed out into a good character. The libido of the satyrs is well known, but perhaps the exploits of a Bilbo Baggins-esque satyr who lives in a near chihuahua like state of fear but is driven by his own almost alien libido... interesting. Go to Comment
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