It is too long and Capn makes the main points above. I think that the summary is waaaay to long. I doubt there will be any changes made to this sub since it was submitted 4 years ago, and Skylark hasnt returned to the citadel in 3 years. Go to Comment
There seems to be a good character lurking under here. Aside from collecting souls, and being a consumate scholar/courtier we know nothing about Charles.
Tell us more about him, what he has invented, or a hint of some of his adventures. Perhaps he is akin to the flamboyant Baron von Munchhausen, clad in vivid clothing and spinning tales of adventures of old where he saved the Queen of Chianti in a flying contraption of his own design.
Back to the soul bottles, it is important to know more about his hobby here. Does he think it evil, or an act of posterity, a prison or a continuance of life after death? Who would know of this, does he have any enemies for it?
Vengeance is a dish best served cold. I really enjoyed the presentation, and the idea of a book of castles is a novel idea, one that could be the basis of a series of books on fortification, both from military and from fashionable directions. Antique architecture, hiding hidden walls, etc Go to Comment
I think rather than waste army after army in failed attempts to hunt down the barbarians, I think these enraged kings would do what Kings do best. Build.
Villages would in short time become fortified, staring with wooden palisades, but building with stone when they can afford it. The king, and the coffers of these kingdoms would be directed to building a defensive line of fortifications and watch towers, perhaps even going as far as the Chinese did and building a great wall against the northern riders.
Raiders would encounter armsmen, mercenaries and trained militias as well as fortifications in the process of being built. We humans are an industrial people, and lacking the protection of the forests, or the mountains, we make due with what we can. Go to Comment
I like this character, and the fact that is both detailed, and has some personal history as well as a goal.
I would also have to agree with the Cap'n. There are a few pesky spelling errors, and the giant paragraph could use a few breaks.
I do have one question, if he is bipedal, wouldn't a large counterbalancing tail be both cumbersome, and often in the way? I only bring up the point since the tail is an extension of the spine, and a bipedal creature has a vertical spine, forcing a large, and likely rigid tail (If it is used as a counterweight to the upper torso when moving on all fours) directly down.
I agree that he would be clumsy, especially with fine movement and such. Large items, such as weapons, or other things of that nature wouldn't be much of a problem. On the other hand, writing and handling items made of delicate glass, or paper are right out. Go to Comment
He is very angry, and bitter over the matter. If he were more of a thinking man, as opposed to a 'crude crusher' he could be psychotic or worse.
The inability to write doesn't mean much to someone who never writes, but loosing the ability to feel something smooth, or supple like skin would be unbearable. To this end, he spends almost every cent he earns on liquor, or on prostitutes. Go to Comment
Had the idea after watching the new Sinbad flick and seeing the island fish tow the ship. The movie isnt bad, just not as well exploited or well done as it could have been. Some of it looked like CGI before texture mapping. I would give it a 3/5, but would only recommend it to gamers, or fantasy enthusiasts. Go to Comment
Interesting plot, it spins the generic murder mystery with two pieces of outside danger, the other actual murderer, and the deteriorating status of the castle.
It could be made even more interesting if the murderer already knows about the deterioration of the castle, and was willing to damage the remaining supports to thwart the PC's, regardless of what happened to the inhabitants of the castle. For a bigger twist, it might be someone like a young noble, or respected member of community.
On the other hand, I would think that there would be warning signs of the castle's poor condition. The floor of the greathall, or another large room might be bowling in towards the center of the room as the weight of the floor increases without support. Other areas might be subsiding, or cracking as the structure settles.
Like the expression goes, the road to hell is paved with good intentions. The CivyWhizzards want to eliminate evil and dangerous magics, but like EchoMirage said, most people don't know how to mind their own business. Go to Comment