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Prince Michael
NPCs  (Scenario Based)   (Travelers)
Scrasamax's comment on 2004-09-02 11:05 AM
The resemblance to Hamlet increases, I approve. Adding the melancholy streak to a normally optimistic, and upbeat noble is a nice touch. He is well set, there is but for fate to interven her hand and upset his life completely.

The expression, iSome men are born to greatness, others have it thrust upon them,/i comes to mind. The Peasant Prince may find himself in need of assistance when his cousin decides that the prince needs to turn up dead, or a league of lords decides to make the prince their titular figurehead, opposing the counsin, but at the same time, staying on their leash.

Either way, the DM inside of me says it is time for the Prince's sabbatical to come to an end. I like the flavor.

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Book of Fury
Items  (Books and Scrolls)   (Heroic)
Scrasamax's comment on 2004-08-25 08:06 PM
It has style, it has personality, this is a worthwhile addition to any vampire game, or any other game as flair. As always, well done. Kudos.

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Melkesjokolyde
Items  (Potion)   (Villanous)
Scrasamax's comment on 2004-08-24 10:34 PM
It can be a hard life for a fledgling servant of evil, with all of those goody-goody heros running about, all hot a bothered to find a villian to smash up.

I think this would also be a cool potion to use as an assassination poison. The milk chocolate flavor is a really nice touch.

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Thrar Stones
Items  (Jewelry)   (Magical)
Scrasamax's comment on 2004-08-24 10:30 PM
This is a really impressive idea. I would think,and this is just my extrapolation of the idea, is that the trees would only grow in areas of a certain magical nature, such as the confluence on ley lines, or other sites of power. Even better in a low magic setting as the trees would be both rare, and hard to find.

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Thrar Stones
Items  (Jewelry)   (Magical)
Scrasamax's comment on 2006-01-31 10:01 PM
Should not be lost... Go to Comment
Honor Among Thieves
Plots  (Duty)   (Single-Storyline)
Scrasamax's comment on 2004-08-23 05:12 PM
Along with the ring itself, this is a great plot. It has all of the attributes I look for (interesting hook, personal detail, well written, and plot hooks) as well as not being monsterous in size.

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Seal of Thieves
Items  (Jewelry)   (Magical)
Scrasamax's comment on 2004-08-23 05:09 PM
Applause all around, a very nice magic item with one of the best back stories I have read. Very nice.

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Burrito Benzanito
NPCs  (Minor)   (Combative)
Scrasamax's comment on 2004-08-22 04:11 AM
Burrito means Little Donkey, I believe. Actually. Great character, stupid name.

could have been a 5, but is instead a 4

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Grunderkin
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Combat)
Scrasamax's comment on 2004-08-19 06:31 AM
The back story is certainly well done, and kudos on the names, I like them. The Unseen Killer power seems out of odds with the rest of the weapon, being widely visable and brandished frequently. I think perhaps it's sheath could have this magical property such as the sheath of Excaliber prevented it's owner from being slain in battle.

Ought to start a thread on magic sheaths for swords mundane and otherwise.

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First Blood
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Combat)
Scrasamax's comment on 2004-08-19 06:33 AM
I like this one alot, especially the fact that no enchantment lasts very long. Excellently done.

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Hagrida Belcare
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Combat)
Scrasamax's comment on 2004-08-18 11:17 AM
I usually dont like magic weapons, but this was well done, well done indeed.

I would like to see game hooks, and maybe some dancing girls. Then it would be perfect. Until then...

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Timtom Flyboy Butterfoot's Flying Machine
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
Scrasamax's comment on 2004-08-16 06:35 PM
Wheeeeeeeeeeee! I've got a flying machine. Those rascally gnomes.

This could be priceless if the flying machine flew about on jets of beer instead of water.

I would like to see more machines and contraptions built by someone other than a gnome. Very nice introduction with the outraged letter. Gotta give a point for that, and a point for making me smile with a gnomish invention.

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The Sinking Ring of Ku Pum
Items  (Jewelry)   (Magical)
Scrasamax's comment on 2004-08-16 07:41 AM
everything Shadoweagle said, but with an extra point for the back story of summoning, especially shattering the glass to summon the spirit of the earth.

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Faye Delivour
NPCs  (Major)   (Combative)
Scrasamax's comment on 2004-08-16 07:48 AM
Faye?

Callista Miala Moonshadow, and all you name the vengeance seeking elven warrior-princess Faye? My grandmothers name is Faye. She has a good description, and her abilities seem to rather on the heavy side.

She wants revenge for the death of her family, admirable. But aside from that information, we know nothing about her as a person. No individual quirks, likes or dislikes, measurements. What makes her different from the other magic using elven princesses out there in the ether of fantasy? Go to Comment
Knockers Dirty Clothes Place
Locations  (Establishment)   (Any)
Scrasamax's comment on 2004-08-16 06:26 AM
Why would goblins move into a human city? I can think of one very good reason for that, assuming humans can deal with other races living in their cities.

The goblins would be given a status like immigrant workers, they would pick up the lowest jobs. They would haul away waste, dig the graves, and run the hard manual labor jobs. They would also live in the most cramped, and least sanitary portions of the city. Compared to their normal lives (IE in service to evil overlords) this is a huge improvement as no one will be spontaneously killed because the boss had a bad day. Cramped and unsanitary conditions are better than huge communal warrens and holes in the ground. Living in a human city also means that the goblins benefit from shared defence.

Humans relegate the jobs they dont want to the goblins, who are not physically imposing, and easy to accept, especailly in a menail role. The goblins become part of the city, not particulary trusted, and there will certainly be discrimination, and segregation against the goblins. The goblins would still pay taxes, and be held to the same law as everyone else, if a much more strict version.

Every large human city could have a Goblin Quarter where the goblins live and work, and have their own inner community. Goblin markets, goblin restaurants, goblin homes, and merchants who peddle goblin wares.

Depending on the society of the human city, the goblins could be treated like property, or animals, or they could be afforded the full rights and privelages of a full citizen (unlikely in my opinion) Go to Comment
Knockers Dirty Clothes Place
Locations  (Establishment)   (Any)
Scrasamax's comment on 2007-09-06 02:37 PM
I remember this idea being spawned in the old chatroom with Shadoweagle and several other Citadellians, hence the strangness of the last paragraph. As for computer games, the last game I bought for my computer was some Command and Conquer multi-game set. I dont play too many games on the computer, and those I do tend to be RTS games.

My thought? Goblins just sorta fit into the cleaners job. Go to Comment
Knockers Dirty Clothes Place
Locations  (Establishment)   (Any)
Scrasamax's comment on 2007-09-07 02:22 AM
Woot! I got the dibs on laundry-mat goblins! Go to Comment
Darken Glade
Locations  (Regional)   (Forest/ Jungle)
Scrasamax's comment on 2004-08-12 08:55 AM
I have to agree with Moon, this entry is long, almost painfully so. There is good detail and no lacking of plot hooks or other developed ideas. The spacing is disruptive, and with the length, keeps this from being a 5.

To shorten the post, you could make sure not to repeat yourself, as you did in regards to the properties of silver, and iron unpon the fay.

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Castle Seamus
Locations  (Fortification)   (Water)
Scrasamax's comment on 2004-08-12 08:58 AM
Ditto, Cap'n.

There might have been something with tails as symbols of status, but otherwise, bland.

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Heart of Ice
Locations  (Tundra/ Arctic)   (Ruins)
Scrasamax's comment on 2004-08-09 04:36 PM
interesting, but I would like to know more about the people who built a fortress out of ice in the middle of a bleak wasteland. Why are there only ghosts left, what sort of knowledge could they impart?

What sort of remains can be found inside the ice keep, or is there naught but ice and cold left, no remnant of bodies, clothing, or the day to day tools of existance?

Not a bad effort.
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