The name of the place is almost as long as the submission LoL. I'm here all week folks, I just fly into town and boy are my arms tired!
Okay, now that that is out of my system, I rather like Pinesdeep... it draws the elements of the city cairns, the hearth stones, and the home trees together to give an example of a slightly non-standard elf community. Go to Comment
I like some of the visuals here, the jade tombs are interesting, and I think you should do a sub on the Ten-Masters that ply Acqua's seas. Also like the cremation tower and the wailing of the bereaved. Go to Comment
On a side note, I recently learned that salt is used in making bricks, it is a prime ingredient in making a glaze for fired clay bricks that weather-proofs them. This way the interior bricks can be single fired clay which would last about 30 years before degrading, and the outer layers can be this salt glazed twice fired brick that lasts three to four times as long.
A far more pleasant play on the salt mines, with their slaves dying of thist, crusted with a fortune worth of salt on their emaciated bodies. Go to Comment
Now this is an innovative idea, undead working in a sort of symbiotic relationship. The wights get their fill of whatever they gain from killing criminals, and the locals are protected from said criminals. This could be a five-sword submission if it had more detail, like more detail on the wights themselves, are they simple shadows, or the ghostly imprint of the kings of antiquity? What defines a criminal to a wight? Would a petty thief or someone who fudged on their taxes be hunted and killed the same as a bloody-handed murderer? Go to Comment
Now I like Bridgedale, it has a sense of vitality to it. The use of riverstones in construction probably started off due to pragmaticism, but once you have a style in place, dropping cut and faced stone just looks terrible. I can almost smell the river in this place, and I can imagine that with half flooded streets and such, that finding a theive's den or a murderhole of wererats would be simply...sweet. Go to Comment
...and for a trinket, a local guide will pole the visitors through the flooded areas, pointing out the slowly sinking wonders of the ancient city, hoping for another handout. Such majesty fallen into disrepair. Perhaps the hope of the restoration of glory is all that keeps the locals going from day to day. Go to Comment
Two goons - I thinks that our little snitch needs to talk a little walk...with the worms.
Certainly interesting, and a unique setting. Would there be a way for the locals to discover some material that is resistant to the corrosive effects of the soil? Houses sitting on glass pontoons might be weird, but it would be an interesting application of Toynbee. Go to Comment
A canny wizard might take up the notion to put the Rod of Arcane power inside a brass screen, a Farraday cage (not 100% on the details there, saw it on Mythbusters) to insulate the rod from lightning strikes. Otherwise a very interesting item. Go to Comment
Very well done. I like the pseudo-Venetian history and setting, as well as some of the less mundane aspects such as the Canals of the Dead, the Sunken Quarter, and the Convent. Might have to make a character... Go to Comment
Nice use of a dragon in a not-eating-the-princess manner. I like the idea and outline of the city, as well as the description of the local law enforcement. I am curious to know who is in charge, a noble, a council, a guildmaster, etc. Go to Comment
How active is this volcano one mile away? If it is a cinder cone like the Cascades of the western US, one mile is sitting at the very foot of the cone itself, and that is certainly to close for comfort. I'd move the town a little bit further from the volcano and possible drain the sewers into a volcanic vent, rather than the mount of the volcano itself. Otherwise this is a very unique post. In can imagine that the stone-cutters guild is very powerful in the city. Go to Comment
Certainly a novel idea, but I do image that wearing a pear of metal boots would be very uncomfortable. Wearing a pair of steel-toed shoes is a pain in the rear as it is. I like the electrical weakness of the boots, especially the part of drawing in naturally occuring lightning. Worthless for a thief, with all the crashing and booming. Go to Comment
There is no take, without give, and there really shouldn't be 'I spend magic points to regain health'. I think a morally gray item like this is great. Use it to kill the evil minions, sacrifice the wounded enemy to it to ensure the survival of the heroes. Go to Comment
I absolutely love the name, and the fact that it was not automatically palmed off onto the mechanically minded gnomes. (Shakes fist at gnomes). The idea seems fairly well fleshed out, and has a plausible backstory. Even Dufgar (who is never described) seems easy for me to imagine. (A young dwarf not yet grown into his beard)
Now for the axe. There are several grammatical and capitalization flaws that need to be ironed out, but nothing that inspires the wrath of the average reader.
Good luck with this, I don't how others will respond to the normally non-magic using dwarves having a magical tunneling machine. Go to Comment
Well written, and sound. This is the kind of post that does make me wish I ha dthought of that. I think that the King acting like a silly maid was my favorite of the potential uses of the clasp. The religious origin of the clasps also neatly sidesteps the cliche 'A wizard made it'