Its short, and there are no major writing flaws such as bad spacing, or alot of misspelled words. I would like it better if there was more detail, possibly about the innitself, perhaps the style of clothing of the building itself seeming out of date with more regular inns. I am also curious to know what caused it to become a ghostly wandering inn in the first place.
A swirling hole in the sky, a swirling halo of bruised light showing in unnatural shades of nebulous purple and bilious green and gaseous burning blue. The center is darkness, nay, it is the very absence of light. The Eye stares forth, an eye ready to blink... /Lovecraft
Stout Lagerale, your stereotypical frothing at the mouth drunken dwarven berzerker. He came from a clan of beer brewers and he ran around with a thing called a tankard-axe, a pole-arm with a tankard with a blade handle mounted on the end of it. In true old school fashion, the tankard unscrewed so he could toss one back before getting into a bare knuckle brawl. Stout lived a moderately long life before meeting his untimely demise at the gaze of a medusa.
1. I would make the assumption that the basic spells of necromancy were originally created by Mastere, with (pulls out PHB for Matan) with spells like Soul bind, Create Greater Undead, and Finger of Death being the equivalent of signature spells. She was the basic founder of necromancy in my setting and the current repetoir of spells are either hers (Animate dead) or were built on her work. Finding a book of special spells, her custom grimoire would be something that the Church would work very hard to make sure didnt happen!
2. Mastere came from no book, only my demented imagination. I have a picture that I call Mastere and when the gallery is working I will post it. (not my artwork) Go to Comment
I like the idea, a healing imbued sword though I myself would make one change, if a mortal wound is inflicted on someone with the sword, they can still die. The regeneration should require a living host, so no bodies are going to grow new heads if they are decapitated with the sword. Despite the limb growing back, getting it chopped off in the first place is still going to hurt like who knows what! I would limit how many times this power could be used, perhaps something like once a day, or 3 times a week or something like that to keep it from becoming an arms factory har har! Go to Comment
Big fan of Starcraft, and this is a good write-up of the Protoss. The only thing that I would add would be the Xel'Naga and their quest to find perfection of Form, which they achieved in the Protoss, as each creature is so immune to age, disease, and such. As a side note, the Xel'Naga would later experiement with the Zerg race and the quest for the Perfection of Essence, creating the assimilating organic horror of the Zerg Swarms who would later devour the Xel'Naga themselves. Go to Comment
No story, barely an item, and the grammar was horrible.
round blade blade?
I know this review is harsh, and I want to say something constructive, something to encourage you to try again, or to even redo this submission. I dont know what to say along those lines other than dont give up! Go to Comment
The Courge is a staple crop of Falhath. The plant is a low lying perenial that produces a large round squash that ranges from a tan to a deep orange color. The fruit has a rather sweet nutty flavor and the seeds are roasted over a fire as a snackable treat. The thick rind is the main food of the plant, being chopped into cubes and added to stews much like potatoes would be. The Courge serves in similar potatoe roles, being chopped into hash, fried in fat, and even being mashed and distilled into a stout sweet liquor.
Courge is a main ingredient with onions and peppers in Falhathian stir-fry, a popular form of street cooking. Once the veggies and sometimes mixture of goat meat or poultry is cooked, it is stuffed into a wooden bowl and eaten with chopsticks. Go to Comment
The Ruhig Pepper
Easily recognized by its waxy white color, the ruhig is a pepper found only growing near the border of the Great Woses. The pepper is known for its fiery flavor that is reminiscent of peanuts and that eating the pepper raw can cause temporary paralysis of the vocal chords, rendering the eater mute for a short time. If cooked this property is lost.
Ruhigs have become a sort of weapon in certain circles, with actors and actresses loosing their voices before a critical performance, or with magi who loose the ability to use magic if they cannot speak. Mages know the ruhig plant as Magebane. Go to Comment
A popular food, nix as it is called for short is a large seeded grain not unlike corn, though with a much harder casing. This seed is generally treated in a bath of lime juice, or lye mixture to soften it before washing and cooking. The kernels are plump and a pale beige color after boiling and are added to local soups such as lozolo.
Nix is also ground into a rough but rather filling pottage that is served as a breakfast item, often with a piece or two of goat sausage. More innovative cooks have added peppers, sweet spices, and other oddities to the pottage to liven up an old country dish.
Lastly, nixtamal kernals can be fried in hot oil to produce hard crunchy kernals that are a popular snacking treat. After being fried and while they are still hot the kernals are liberally sprinkled with spices, or other flavorings. Go to Comment
The high magic Old World was brought to an end by the abuse of magic, and when it ended, many magical things ceased too be. almost every homonculus that was active at the end was undone, its animating magical force unraveled. For the century that followed the end of the Old World, known as the Twilight, magic was unpredicatable and was just as likely to blow up in a magis face as it was to fail. It also followed that there was a social and cultural backlash against magic, and the trappings of it. Go to Comment
Tausend, which hasnt been posted yet, was basically named after the fact that the military grounds comprised of one thousand acres. One name stuck, the other didnt. There is a place in my town called Depot Hill, even though the Depot is thirty years gone.
Dreifach, yes three-fold, because Three-Layer (Dreischicht) and Three-tier (Dreireihe) lacked that certain sound that I was looking for.
In the naming process I due use several language translation books. I think it adds a sense of foreign-ness to the setting without digressing into the hodge-podge of silly names that often plagues Fantasy. (Drizzt, Arrkrash, Vexenxar, etc) Go to Comment
The multiple-worlds theory of cosmology allows room for every religion's Heaven and Hell and other planes to coexist, with the similar planes of all the sapient beings of all the worlds in all the galaxies...How often do the wires get crossed, as it were, leaving your paladin in a Hell for hedonistic lizards, for example.