The bows are interesting, but there is a certain wikipedia feel to each entry. Being Chinese mythology, the names aren't familiar, and it took me two tries to read through the entire submission (the first being on a mobile device, damned tiny screens).
I do have one question and it's simple, what do we do with these? I know the basic plot hooks for kick-ass-weapons, but these are drawn from mythology and history, and that makes them a little different from the typical fantasy weapons. What is Hou Yi's Sun Sinker? Is it a relic, is it an artifact, a divine crafted (deifacted) weapon?
Can I answer these questions myself? Of course. I want your interpretation, because you had the insight and interest in writing this. Go to Comment
I think the origin is beautiful, being an auspicious event caused by stone and snow spirits, rather than the works of a craftsman or mage. Chinese mythology has a much more natural and often times more beautiful underlying imagery to it compared to more sweat and toil western interpretations. Go to Comment
Quite a lot of history here, and much more of it revolves around Lie Bei rather than his swords. I think that the sword's power is a hoax makes them even better. Did the swords fly out of Cao Cao's hands from magic, or from the fact that Cao Cao thought them magic and the weapons of his mortal enemy surely would have sought out his blood.
Also, most unfortunate name ever: Cao Pi (Pronounce it Cow Pee or Cow Pie and it's a winner either way.)
I get a half Old School Dungeons and Dragons and half grimdark Game of Thrones vibe from this item, it's suitably complicated to be a wondrous item, and it's use is gruesome enough to land it a place of honor in a bloody dark setting. Reading it, I think the real power of the item might not be the spikes, but in the chains. being used to bind, constrict, sever limbs, asphyxiate victims, decapitate victims, and other horrible things that can only come from a brutal and violent imagination. Go to Comment
I enjoy seeing things I've written being used. I like the rings and how they were created, with their flaw concealed.
Running with the Vallermore setting, I can see something like a tomb of queens, each wearing one of the rings, until some foolish upstart tries to use more than one and basically ends up turning herself into a ringwraith/nazgul. Go to Comment
The Imbrians are like Ozymandias, their empire was great and their accomplishments were far beyond what can be conceived. But like Ozymandias, their dominion is dust and ashes. They turned void and barren planets into resorts and farmland, and then back into rubble and ghosts. Go to Comment
Let me try expressing the point I was trying to make: a feature length movie is the work of many highly paid, and not so highly paid people, from the writers, to the special effects people, to the actors and the ultimately the director, producing said feature length film compared to one person sitting at a keyboard.
On the occasion that I have written one of these reviews, it is because I already have an existing relationship with the material being presented. In the case of Godzilla, I watched the old Toho movies as a child. Despite being at the Citadel for more than a decade, there is nothing here that can compare to franchises that are older than most of us, and are a part of pop culture.
And considering your comment, I haven't and won't write any more of these. Go to Comment
I like the tone and presentation, and it has a very mythical magical feeling to it. Like Val says, the details of the bow itself do not matter, it could be nothing more than a plain bow from a fortuitous source or a mythic powered item of exceptional ability. Go to Comment
Feels a bit unfinished, but WIP as you said. A few things came to mind.
What do the aliens look like? Classic aliens, space dwarves, Marvin, the Martian? I don't know what color they are, and the description is very vague. I would request more details about their appearance.
What do their ships look like. What shape, what color, is their mode of propulsion visible, ala engine glow, or do they have reactionless drives? At first, the comet mistake is fine, they are a very long way from Earth's observation, and the things out in the solar system that can see them are likely old, having been launched years before.
Minor detail: the B3 controllers on Earth aren't going to be able to respond to what happens on Mars because there is a lag between Earth and Mars, the images the rover sends back are several minutes old by the time they are viewed, likewise, the signal telling the rover to move will take several minutes to arrive. Go to Comment