As always, Moon, you deliver a sub packed with every last bit of information you could want. Something I also found pleasing was the style in which you described them, physically, something to which I'm looking forward to in any upcoming posts you will produce. Go to Comment
The Uroghi Lifeforms (Third Kingdom)
Wow! That's a big sub!
You have a significant amount of typos and other spelling/grammatical errors, but otherwise, these are amazing beings. I'd also suggest condensing it a little, but that's not a terribly big deal.
The opening narrative
The physical description Go to Comment
First off: I love the name, more so than I usually love names, and I love names.
Second off: I second Pariah, purpose and agenda are neccesary, especially in the realms of intra-court politics (after all, there has to be a Sorrow of Ambition lurking around, trying to climb is way to the top of the demonic hierarchy.)
Third off: I just have to ask, is there a Sorrow of Sorrow? Go to Comment
Nice concept, but I think her appearance and mannerisms are a little sterotypical, but it is easily overlooked when you nottcie her mutism (I like that!) Her choice of companions is interesting, anyone else besides Dr. Vincent we'd like to hear about? I sure hope so. Go to Comment
Crazy is ALWAYS good, though the most valuable thing in here is, beyond a shadow of a doubt, is inability to distinguish now and then. That could also make for some great moments if the PCs (or atleast one of them) could temporarily perceive the world as he does. The mental scars would never leave! Go to Comment
Well, there were. I had them written down and what not, long with the names of those who helped them happen. But then I lost the document. And I started redoing the setting, anyway, and the Chimcherae, lovably hatable as they are, were slightly merged with the Egoyo, but mostly left for dead. Go to Comment
I like this. Dwarves actually moving, anbd with good reason too! I'd like to hear a little bit more about typical crews, though, and I'm with Echo on it needing a little more something unique. Go to Comment
Oh the Poetry! Oh the Evil! Oh the Muruality!
This deserves many an HoH! Perhaps it will even acheive Golden sub status! Perhaps I will stop using exclamation points!
Highlight of the sub: The crow lives not by power, but fear. Go to Comment