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Turtle Lotus
Lifeforms  (Flora)   (Water)
Roack's comment on 2012-02-10 05:06 PM
Update: Last missing paragraph rewritten. It might be a little choppy, but I just wanted it to be up there for now. I apologize to all the other recent activity that I'm pushing off the Recent Activity Bar in the main page. Go to Comment
Green Sleeves
Items  (SpaceShips)   (Non-Magical)
Roack's comment on 2012-02-10 05:50 PM

I'm guessing that these are ment to harvest energy from a star, placed somewhere in the orbit of a planet, or perhaps arranged in a dyson sphere around the star itself, but this isn't made very clear. I see a lot of interesting science, I'm especially intrigued by the phospholipid discs. I wonder why manufactured cells would be more efficient than their biological analogues. Hopefully that's something we'll see expanded in the future.

I think there's a strong, innovative idea here, but right now it looks more like just that, an idea, rather than a post. Perhaps this is just too technical of a subject to encompass in a 100-word post. There's some awesome hard sci-fi here, it's just waiting to happen.

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Green Sleeves
Items  (SpaceShips)   (Non-Magical)
Roack's comment on 2012-02-15 08:44 PM

After editing, this is lot more streamlined and coherent of an idea. It's clearer what the sleeves are for and how they are used, but enough room is left for the imagination. Revoted.

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Ruby Heart
Items  (Tools)   (Magical)
Roack's comment on 2012-02-10 08:11 PM

Great, functional transportation item. I wonder, though, if the ruby heart is magically stuck to the door, how does the user retrieve it? After closing the door, the heart could be thousands of miles away. That might make for some interesting twistiness.

I'm enamored of the first sentence. "The Ruby Heart is the fastest way to get home," is perfectly succicinct, and has that folksy fairy-tale ring to it that I love.

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Bucky Batteries
Items  (Other)   (Non-Magical)
Roack's comment on 2012-02-10 06:18 PM

You've managed to make the battery novel, not an easy task.

I could see them used as an auxilliary battery in starships, something equivalent to having a second battery in your car to power just the lights. Although, in the case of spacefaring, it would be better served as life support. The incredibly long lifespan would mean that even used-spaceship buyers wouldn't have to worry about replacing them.

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The Hemangini Flying Squirrel
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Mountains)
Roack's comment on 2012-02-04 09:15 AM

A great, humorous post, and a wonderful nuisance animal. The image of a squirrel, its eyes shimmering with hunger and teeth gleaming with the brightness of steel, gnawing away at someone's chainmail.

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Hemangini Tree
Lifeforms  (Flora)   (Any)
Roack's comment on 2012-02-04 09:10 AM

I like the idea of challenging yourself to do a post in 100 words, and you did so beautifully here. You've given us the perfect amount of information to want, and therefore create more.

I'm especially enamored of the idea that Dwarves hate the Hemangini. A religious taboo I'd think, a direct opposition to the convenience of the thing. Metal, after all, takes an intense amount of labor and man-hours to mine, and the process is notoriously lethal. If one can simply pluck a metal nut from a tree, what does that say about all the ancestors who languished and died in the mines? Are their souls no longer worth anything? Better to just destroy the plant.

It's also a wonderful explanaition of why especially hippy-dippy elves might be in possession of metal tools and weapons despite mines having a bad habit of killing or displacing life in the area.

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SCIV (Land Shark) population control vehicle
Items  (Transports)   (Combat)
Roack's comment on 2012-02-10 06:06 PM

A great post is detailed. A great post flows smoothly and is well-written. A great post is full of background, but easily lifted from its context and placed in a new setting. A great post has me crook-necked over my computer for the entire duration of my reading it, regardless of length. A great post gets a 5/5.

This is a great post.

The names immidiately made me think of Battletech, and then about half-way through, I realized I was reading a Battletech post. This is a great example of something that fits perfectly within a pre-existing setting.

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Oldu Corpses
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Any)
Roack's comment on 2007-11-20 07:13 PM
This is great! The undead are finally nice and creepy again. Go to Comment
The Dylori
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Any)
Roack's comment on 2007-09-02 06:10 PM
As always, Moon, you deliver a sub packed with every last bit of information you could want. Something I also found pleasing was the style in which you described them, physically, something to which I'm looking forward to in any upcoming posts you will produce. Go to Comment
The Uroghi
Lifeforms  (Third Kingdom)   (Underground)
Roack's comment on 2007-08-05 01:15 AM
Wow! That's a big sub!
You have a significant amount of typos and other spelling/grammatical errors, but otherwise, these are amazing beings. I'd also suggest condensing it a little, but that's not a terribly big deal.
The opening narrative
The physical description Go to Comment
The Court of a Thousand and Nine Sorrows
Systems  (Divine/ Spirit)   (General)
Roack's comment on 2007-06-03 12:20 AM
First off: I love the name, more so than I usually love names, and I love names.
Second off: I second Pariah, purpose and agenda are neccesary, especially in the realms of intra-court politics (after all, there has to be a Sorrow of Ambition lurking around, trying to climb is way to the top of the demonic hierarchy.)
Third off: I just have to ask, is there a Sorrow of Sorrow? Go to Comment
Hisa, the Sorrow of Vengeance
NPCs  (Minor)   (Criminal/Espionage)
Roack's comment on 2007-06-02 01:06 AM
Pretty name!
Nice concept, but I think her appearance and mannerisms are a little sterotypical, but it is easily overlooked when you nottcie her mutism (I like that!) Her choice of companions is interesting, anyone else besides Dr. Vincent we'd like to hear about? I sure hope so. Go to Comment
The Oracle Edros
NPCs  (Minor)   (Mystical)
Roack's comment on 2007-04-14 01:08 AM
Crazy is ALWAYS good, though the most valuable thing in here is, beyond a shadow of a doubt, is inability to distinguish now and then. That could also make for some great moments if the PCs (or atleast one of them) could temporarily perceive the world as he does. The mental scars would never leave! Go to Comment
Lifeforms  (Unique)   (Any)
Roack's comment on 2007-05-24 01:13 AM
What? The They Might Be Giants song? Go to Comment
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Desert)
Roack's comment on 2007-03-31 04:33 PM
Wow, released after almost a year of procrastination... Go to Comment
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Desert)
Roack's comment on 2007-03-31 05:14 PM
Great questions, I'll get working on 'em! Go to Comment
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Desert)
Roack's comment on 2008-03-31 12:23 AM
Well, there were. I had them written down and what not, long with the names of those who helped them happen. But then I lost the document. And I started redoing the setting, anyway, and the Chimcherae, lovably hatable as they are, were slightly merged with the Egoyo, but mostly left for dead. Go to Comment
Dwarven War Chariot
Items  (Transports)   (Combat)
Roack's comment on 2007-03-31 05:23 PM
I like this. Dwarves actually moving, anbd with good reason too! I'd like to hear a little bit more about typical crews, though, and I'm with Echo on it needing a little more something unique. Go to Comment
The One-Eyed, Red-Eyed Crow
Lifeforms  (Unique)   (Swamp)
Roack's comment on 2007-04-05 11:29 PM
Oh the Poetry! Oh the Evil! Oh the Muruality!
This deserves many an HoH! Perhaps it will even acheive Golden sub status! Perhaps I will stop using exclamation points!
Highlight of the sub: The crow lives not by power, but fear. Go to Comment
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