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Ruby Heart
Items  (Tools)   (Magical)
Roack's comment on 2012-02-10 08:11 PM


Great, functional transportation item. I wonder, though, if the ruby heart is magically stuck to the door, how does the user retrieve it? After closing the door, the heart could be thousands of miles away. That might make for some interesting twistiness.



I'm enamored of the first sentence. "The Ruby Heart is the fastest way to get home," is perfectly succicinct, and has that folksy fairy-tale ring to it that I love.


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Bucky Batteries
Items  (Other)   (Non-Magical)
Roack's comment on 2012-02-10 06:18 PM


You've managed to make the battery novel, not an easy task.



I could see them used as an auxilliary battery in starships, something equivalent to having a second battery in your car to power just the lights. Although, in the case of spacefaring, it would be better served as life support. The incredibly long lifespan would mean that even used-spaceship buyers wouldn't have to worry about replacing them.


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The Hemangini Flying Squirrel
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Mountains)
Roack's comment on 2012-02-04 09:15 AM


A great, humorous post, and a wonderful nuisance animal. The image of a squirrel, its eyes shimmering with hunger and teeth gleaming with the brightness of steel, gnawing away at someone's chainmail.


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Hemangini Tree
Lifeforms  (Flora)   (Any)
Roack's comment on 2012-02-04 09:10 AM


I like the idea of challenging yourself to do a post in 100 words, and you did so beautifully here. You've given us the perfect amount of information to want, and therefore create more.



I'm especially enamored of the idea that Dwarves hate the Hemangini. A religious taboo I'd think, a direct opposition to the convenience of the thing. Metal, after all, takes an intense amount of labor and man-hours to mine, and the process is notoriously lethal. If one can simply pluck a metal nut from a tree, what does that say about all the ancestors who languished and died in the mines? Are their souls no longer worth anything? Better to just destroy the plant.



It's also a wonderful explanaition of why especially hippy-dippy elves might be in possession of metal tools and weapons despite mines having a bad habit of killing or displacing life in the area.


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SCIV (Land Shark) population control vehicle
Items  (Transports)   (Combat)
Roack's comment on 2012-02-10 06:06 PM


A great post is detailed. A great post flows smoothly and is well-written. A great post is full of background, but easily lifted from its context and placed in a new setting. A great post has me crook-necked over my computer for the entire duration of my reading it, regardless of length. A great post gets a 5/5.



This is a great post.



The names immidiately made me think of Battletech, and then about half-way through, I realized I was reading a Battletech post. This is a great example of something that fits perfectly within a pre-existing setting.


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Oldu Corpses
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Any)
Roack's comment on 2007-11-20 07:13 PM
This is great! The undead are finally nice and creepy again. Go to Comment
The Dylori
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Any)
Roack's comment on 2007-09-02 06:10 PM
As always, Moon, you deliver a sub packed with every last bit of information you could want. Something I also found pleasing was the style in which you described them, physically, something to which I'm looking forward to in any upcoming posts you will produce. Go to Comment
The Uroghi
Lifeforms  (Third Kingdom)   (Underground)
Roack's comment on 2007-08-05 01:15 AM
Wow! That's a big sub!
You have a significant amount of typos and other spelling/grammatical errors, but otherwise, these are amazing beings. I'd also suggest condensing it a little, but that's not a terribly big deal.
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The opening narrative
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The Court of a Thousand and Nine Sorrows
Systems  (Divine/ Spirit)   (General)
Roack's comment on 2007-06-03 12:20 AM
First off: I love the name, more so than I usually love names, and I love names.
Second off: I second Pariah, purpose and agenda are neccesary, especially in the realms of intra-court politics (after all, there has to be a Sorrow of Ambition lurking around, trying to climb is way to the top of the demonic hierarchy.)
Third off: I just have to ask, is there a Sorrow of Sorrow? Go to Comment
Hisa, the Sorrow of Vengeance
NPCs  (Minor)   (Criminal/Espionage)
Roack's comment on 2007-06-02 01:06 AM
Pretty name!
Nice concept, but I think her appearance and mannerisms are a little sterotypical, but it is easily overlooked when you nottcie her mutism (I like that!) Her choice of companions is interesting, anyone else besides Dr. Vincent we'd like to hear about? I sure hope so. Go to Comment
The Oracle Edros
NPCs  (Minor)   (Mystical)
Roack's comment on 2007-04-14 01:08 AM
Crazy is ALWAYS good, though the most valuable thing in here is, beyond a shadow of a doubt, is inability to distinguish now and then. That could also make for some great moments if the PCs (or atleast one of them) could temporarily perceive the world as he does. The mental scars would never leave! Go to Comment
S.E.X.Y.
Lifeforms  (Unique)   (Any)
Roack's comment on 2007-05-24 01:13 AM
What? The They Might Be Giants song? Go to Comment
Chimcherae
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Desert)
Roack's comment on 2007-03-31 04:33 PM
Wow, released after almost a year of procrastination... Go to Comment
Chimcherae
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Desert)
Roack's comment on 2007-03-31 05:14 PM
Great questions, I'll get working on 'em! Go to Comment
Chimcherae
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Desert)
Roack's comment on 2008-03-31 12:23 AM
Well, there were. I had them written down and what not, long with the names of those who helped them happen. But then I lost the document. And I started redoing the setting, anyway, and the Chimcherae, lovably hatable as they are, were slightly merged with the Egoyo, but mostly left for dead. Go to Comment
Dwarven War Chariot
Items  (Transports)   (Combat)
Roack's comment on 2007-03-31 05:23 PM
I like this. Dwarves actually moving, anbd with good reason too! I'd like to hear a little bit more about typical crews, though, and I'm with Echo on it needing a little more something unique. Go to Comment
The One-Eyed, Red-Eyed Crow
Lifeforms  (Unique)   (Swamp)
Roack's comment on 2007-04-05 11:29 PM
Oh the Poetry! Oh the Evil! Oh the Muruality!
This deserves many an HoH! Perhaps it will even acheive Golden sub status! Perhaps I will stop using exclamation points!
Highlight of the sub: The crow lives not by power, but fear. Go to Comment
The One-Eyed, Red-Eyed Crow
Lifeforms  (Unique)   (Swamp)
Roack's comment on 2007-04-05 11:29 PM
Oops, forgot to vote! Go to Comment
Holokrine Holy Monastery
Locations  (Establishment)   (Mountains)
Roack's comment on 2007-01-09 03:40 PM
I love the size of this post, just right for reading and still packed full of MoonHunter brand detail. Go to Comment
Vaxatra
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Heroic)
Roack's comment on 2006-09-17 12:35 AM
Love it! Especially the description.
You might want to put a link to the Ouzquin Dremorix, though. Go to Comment
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