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Chum Bucket
Items  (Wand/Staff/ Arcane)   (Magical)
Redgre's comment on 2009-12-27 06:45 AM
Interesting object, strange history, and unique powers. I take it the demon essence in the bucket wasn't it's mind if it behaves like a dog. Where did the other fragments go? What happens if the bucket get's near the other essence fragments? Just curious. Good submission. Go to Comment
Gravyman
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Any)
Redgre's comment on 2009-12-21 03:55 PM
Update: Just added the credit Go to Comment
Gravyman
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Any)
Redgre's comment on 2009-12-21 04:08 PM
Update: Small grammatical change, I sadly didn't catch on my first proof reads. Go to Comment
Gravyman
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Any)
Redgre's comment on 2009-12-22 11:51 PM
Thank you, MoonHunter & Murometz for your feedback. I really appreciate it. I would like to take a stab at answering MoonHunter's question(s). When getting into building an apocalyptic undead army, there is always costs, tactics, availability, and many other concerns. If you fail to diversify your army you are bound to run into trouble. For example, giant sized zombies are great at gate crashing and breaking a shield wall, but if outnumbered by smaller units, it tends to get overwhelmed. Another way of looking at it is damage per second (per hex perhaps). If a maximum of 5 or 6 zombies can engage a single human sized opponent, then with a Gravyman that number is effectively higher. One last thing to consider is priests or clerics turn ability. Their "anti-undead specialization" does need to be countered for effective world domination. The Gravyman can offer a solution. Hope that helps. Go to Comment
Gravyman
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Any)
Redgre's comment on 2010-04-20 05:24 PM
Update: Added: Author's note, Marshland potion to the list, and corrected grammatical/spelling issues raised by dark_dragon. Also I modified the summary. Go to Comment
Atissi Worms
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Any)
Redgre's comment on 2009-12-19 10:32 PM
Vaguely reminiscent of Star Trek, the Wrath of Khan, another next generation episode, and an old X-files episode "the Ice Worms". Obviously these aren't garden variety zombies and are under the pressures of starvation, dehydration, and all physical limitations of the host. Such an insanely vicious parasite could certainly wipe out small towns of common villagers in no time.

I think you might want to introduce a weakness to help keep the zombies in check... such as a hatred of sunlight or something of that caliber.

A possible plot hook to go along with the Atissi, could consist of some dark person with animal control powers... who discovers he can control an Atissi zombie by controlling the, I guess it would be, the "dominant" brain worm. It would be easier for such a villian to create a zombie army than a necromancer, as Cheka explains. One final twist, have a queen for each colony of such worms, and have the zombies act a little more coordinated and intelligently when they are close to the queen. Nicely done. Go to Comment
Wangadi Fruit
Lifeforms  (Flora)   (Desert)
Redgre's comment on 2009-12-18 02:48 AM
Great idea! I always like "typical" or "everyday" items in a fantasy setting that are different enough to give the game real spice. I could see someone deliberately starving one of these trees with the intent of growing "grenades" for warfare or perhaps the more subtle assassination. Perhaps as a magical ingredient to a potion that has to be harvested in just the right way as to keep it from exploding. Another interesting idea/plot hook might come from an angry/evil dryad who lives in such a tree. Nice. Go to Comment
Magehunter Blonde
NPCs  (Major)   (Combative)
Redgre's comment on 2009-12-18 03:23 AM
I echo what axlerowes said to start. In short, if he's one cool dude, what makes him cool besides his clothes? Clothes are not enough.

More on his special equipment might be nice. You've mentioned the motorcycle, the mage seeking missles, the mana-sapping grenades, and the blood-infusion gun, all serving to destroy mages. What about other threats? What about protection from spells? What about dealing with mage summoned creatures and constructs? I would also assume most mage-types have buddies. If you are in the shadowrun world (I immediately thought you were talking Rifts when I started reading your submission) wouldn't it also stand to reason that the mage also carries technology that needs to be surpassed to be a good mage hunter. These a just thoughts on further development of your idea.

Also can he shapechange back (and forth) into a dragon at will? If so does he only retain human form to keep the locals happy? Why not do his hunting in natural form? Just wondering.

It seems to me technology always becomes the enemy to magic in the end. Good stuff. Go to Comment
Ghost Lantern
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
Redgre's comment on 2009-12-18 03:45 AM
This is a very good submission. My only complaint would be that there are so many other skull lanterns yet to be made. This feels like a teaser.

Another lantern might control one particular ghost and the wielder can use (or force the ghost to use) a "fear" power over anyone who sees the lantern. Thereby keeping your "rituals of the night" undisturbed. Make a mistake, such as breaking the lantern, and the ghost goes medieval on the wielder.

Another lantern might summon a specific ghost and force them to answer a number of questions.

Another lantern might act as a "turn" ability on all undead who see it. But if the candle goes out the wielder is now the number one target of all undead in the time zone.

Another lantern might act as a trap for a spirit. Someone who unknowingly touches the skull is instantly spit out of their body and the waiting nearby spirit is granted immediate possession of said body. The new person is stuck in a limbo waiting for someone else to touch the skull.

Anyway, I think I'll shut up now. I could go on for a while. You get the idea. Good submission. Go to Comment
Crumenorix
Items  (Clothes)   (Magical)
Redgre's comment on 2009-11-20 09:02 AM
I like the Crumenorix. It's a mystic's 'tool of the trade' from alchemy all the way to wizardry. It would also make sense to think of a Reaper collected souls in one of these, possibly adding an interesting subquest to getting someone resurrected. Just a question about the "Wee Folk" section... If it is a mutual relationship, how does using a Crumenorix benefit the wee folk? I mean having a place to hide, sleep, or 'zone out' is handy but not extremely important to wee folk (that is, wee folk with no depression problems. It just might be the ticket for one who is suicidal and looking for a place to go numb:)). Is there another benefit that you were thinking of that somehow didn't get put in or fully explained? Again, I liked this submission, and although it seems like every fantasy witch I've ever heard of, must use one of these, it was nice to see explained the way you did. Great stuff. Go to Comment
The Brave People
Society/ Organizations  (Ethnic/Cultural)   (Regional)
Redgre's comment on 2009-11-20 08:10 AM
Only voted Go to Comment
Accomodations in a Box
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
Redgre's comment on 2009-11-18 12:33 PM
Thank you for the comments. FYI I only presented it in a salesman type way for fun and to see if I could sell it to you as authors or DMs. Yes, I would think an object like this would be very rare and if it were on sale I would suspect something pretty bad to come of it (i.e. a dumping feature similar to the damning sack by valadaar). I think that utility magic is always underrated and perhaps the power level of this item is too high. Go to Comment
30 Queens
NPCs  (Major)   (Political)
Redgre's comment on 2009-11-18 12:14 PM
Up to 29 leaders with their quirks and 1 insane child. Good Stuff Go to Comment
Blood Cloak
Items  (Armor)   (Magical)
Redgre's comment on 2009-11-17 02:50 PM
Just so I don't mess this up again in the future... What was wrong with the stats? Thanks. Go to Comment
Blood Cloak
Items  (Armor)   (Magical)
Redgre's comment on 2011-02-25 11:52 PM
Obviously, feel free to tailor to your uses. Here's what I had in mind: When it's fully charged, the wearer looks like they just went for a bath in a river of blood. As it looses charges, the points of impact are 'dried' and become the original brown color. So yes, I agree with your statement that the wearer of a slightly charged blood cloak would look like a crazed murderer with just a few splatters. If the wearer receives a cut, his own blood makes a big red spot on the cloak at the point of the hit just like blood would spread in normal clothes.

Thanks for the comment. After all these years you wonder if anyone looks at your old submissions anymore. Go to Comment
Relentless Kiss of Molten Rage
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Magical)
Redgre's comment on 2010-01-14 08:25 AM
Very, very nice. Like the weapon, like the story, and I like how it all ends. Golf clap. Go to Comment
Ghamiq
Items  (Potion)   (Magical)
Redgre's comment on 2013-04-19 08:36 PM
Altogether a good idea. A little more detail would be helpful. For example, is it expensive? Is it plentiful? Why does it shred/damage the mind? How does it change the magic as it's created? Can one magic user tell that another is dosed? How does the drug effect a psionic? Can prolonged exposure produce permanent night vision/light sensitivity? Just a few thoughts on how this could be developed further. Go to Comment
Ratri, Goddess of the Night
Society/ Organizations  (Religious)   (World Wide)
Redgre's comment on 2011-08-07 07:13 PM


Wow, well done.  I think there's more detail than I would use but hey, more is merrier.  Great sub!


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The Seven-Fold Flame
Systems  (Mystical)   (General)
Redgre's comment on 2009-12-25 08:23 PM
I am very impressed by this submission. I've been mulling over the essence, motivations, abilities, genesis, and the future of fire aligned creatures and magic users for a long time. I always burned it down to a simple tool to conquer. Thanks to this submission, I see more directions to take it than ever before. I thank you. If there is anymore you have on this subject... I am all ears. Go to Comment
Printer's Devils
Lifeforms  (Unique)   (City/ Ruin)
Redgre's comment on 2011-04-19 04:39 PM


Interesting.  Just a few comments, I'd like to make.  First, I take it the perfect ink whether used or not will vanish when they die/return to hell.  That in itself could be a lever for another deal.  Second, I think that one of these critters would make an excellent hell's attorney type of a character.   Third, it seems odd to me that the souls of the dead children (and Mephistori) are somehow in the devil's bodies.  Does that mean that the devils wanted to return to their respective families?  Like I said interesting.  I have a use for this.


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