Icky-poo! I don't like or play necromancers, but for those that do, this would be a useful spell. Sure, it needs to be updated for the magical and rule system being used, but that is true of any of the subs, which is one of the site's strengths.
Sorry, I just don't see MoonHunter's comments as vindictive, Axlerowes. MH was just pointing things out that, in her (or his, we need a gender-neutral pronoun, since we don't know the gender of the poster!) opinion, needed to be addressed. Likewise, in her opinion, the writing was stilted. That was her opinion, I didn't really notice it, but it is all grist for the writer's mill. If a significant number complain, perhaps you should try to do something about it. Remember, the writer's goal is to suck the reader into his world, not the reader's goal to be sucked in. If it isn't working, it is the writer's responsibility to fix it. You will never be able to catch all the readers, but a good writer tries to. (End of Creative Writing teacher's rant!)
Anyway, a useful sub. 3/5
A good beginning but I agree with Scras and Pieh, it feels unfinished. It is an interesting bit of color, but without some other in-game use, it is unlikely to be included in any campaign. Some ideas about it's unique use or some other reasons to add it to a campaign would really help.
".vs the abbreviation of verses." I don't think you mean 'verses', that is a component of a poem, which is divided into verses. You mean 'versus'. However, that is nitpicking. The article is very useful to the art of good writing, whether it be an adventure plot or a book. Thanks, Silveressa.