Strolen\s Citadel content. 
The Great White Dragon
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Mountains)
Ramhir's comment on 2010-10-08 02:44 PM


Like sverigesson said, the writing style needs a lot of improvement. It took me a few moments to realize that the dragon's layer was where he lived, his lair. And what are 'eyes of poise'? Some of his style may have been deliberate, but it doesn't add anything for me.



An OK sub, but it does need some more work to be usable.

Go to Comment
Demon Legion Ranks
Systems  (Combat/ Warfare)   (Defining)
Ramhir's comment on 2010-11-12 09:19 AM


You've really put a lot of work and imagination into this sub, but it would only be useful in an Armageddon-type campaign, where the most the heroes can hope to do is delay the final battle, because they sure as hell can't stop it.



As Mike says, a vast world, but of very limited utility for most campaigns.

Go to Comment
Limberlost
Dungeons  (Forest/ Jungle)   (Ecology)
Ramhir's comment on 2011-01-10 08:02 PM


Limberlost is a fantastic sub and will have a place in my campaign soonest. An entire scenario-in- a-box! My first 5; thanks, Scras!


Go to Comment
The Western Woods
Locations  (Area)   (Forest/ Jungle)
Ramhir's comment on 2011-01-10 06:37 PM


Unlike you, Muro, I do like the fae. They are a large part of my campaign, and it is *nice* to have this forest to drop into my world. Thanks, Ria!


Go to Comment
A Night's Rest
Locations  (Establishment)   (Any)
Ramhir's comment on 2010-12-16 10:54 AM


Very good sub, similar in many ways to my The Inn of the Wild Geese, but enough different not to overlap.

Go to Comment
The Adamant Chef
Items  (Other)   (Non-Magical)
Ramhir's comment on 2011-03-06 03:59 PM


A good way to give depth to a campaign. Thanks.


Go to Comment
30 Barkeepers
NPCs  (Extras)   (Mercantile)
Ramhir's comment on 2010-12-15 11:06 AM


A good, useful sub. I'll print it out and use it in my campaign. Scras, when are you going to post the 30 Bar Wenches and the 30 Children? :-)


Go to Comment
Gesthari
Lifeforms  (Third Kingdom)   (Water)
Ramhir's comment on 2010-11-03 06:30 PM


I like them. Wind-borne jellyfish feeding on lightning and hunting more corporeal beings to carry and feed their young. Well done. 4/5 


Go to Comment
ShadowKin
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Any)
Ramhir's comment on 2011-01-12 12:57 PM


An interesting concept.


Go to Comment
Blade Hands
Items  (Equipment Listing)   (Magical)
Ramhir's comment on 2010-10-22 08:55 PM


I like it. A good use of magic to peacebond weapons. I would think that a thriving industry would spring up making them.


Go to Comment
HomeTrees
Locations  (Other)   (Forest/ Jungle)
Ramhir's comment on 2010-09-24 08:18 PM
Beautiful and useful for detailing Elvenholme. I particularly liked Anshenestardaywadaden and Bayaallatalstonescha. Perhaps some info on what the houses/huts are like? Go to Comment
Inn Ye' Go
Locations  (Establishment)   (Any)
Ramhir's comment on 2010-09-28 01:42 PM
Very good. I liked it a lot. Plenty of places for my players to interact with. It certainly goes into my campaign world. Go to Comment
Harrotaur
Lifeforms  (Third Kingdom)   (Other)
Ramhir's comment on 2011-01-10 06:25 PM


A rather fearful breed of demon. Not much use in my campaign, but would be very useful in some campaigns I've been in. I like the explanation for their medusa-like abilities.


Go to Comment
How to be a better critic!
Articles  (Rules and Advice)   (Players)
Ramhir's comment on 2011-01-25 10:30 AM


I agree completely, ScorpionJinks. And even more completely with Wulfhere. Some of the earlier critiques would have shriveled me up completely. Thanks to both of you.


Go to Comment
play: Bad Example Dissection
Items  (Armor)   (Heroic)
Ramhir's comment on 2011-02-08 08:14 PM


{Gah! At least mine weren't *that* bad!}



Thirty minutes of perusal of the submissions in the Citadel should give anyone an idea of how to write up a sub that is better than this one. The subber couldn't have given it any sort of effort. Even my high school creative writing students would have done a better job than this. Thanks, Scras, for showing us a truely awful sub.


Go to Comment
The Zombie
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Any)
Ramhir's comment on 2010-11-01 07:37 PM


Very good! I'll put it in my campaign, although I will change the name so I won't have to redo the undead I've already got. Perhaps Deathwalkers, or something like that. Thanks, CP. 4/5


Go to Comment
A Dash of Salt
Articles  (Resource)   (Gaming - In General)
Ramhir's comment on 2011-01-28 09:32 PM


Fascinating read! Rat on a Stick; I like that, MoonHunter.


Go to Comment
The Poison Eaters Tribe
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Forest/ Jungle)
Ramhir's comment on 2011-01-29 07:29 PM


I like them. They would work very well in the Limberlost sub by Scrasamax, which I am planning to work up for my campaign. Thanks, CP.


Go to Comment
NPCs out of History
NPCs  (Campaign)   (Knowledge/Lore)
Ramhir's comment on 2010-12-06 11:32 AM


Lots of people did lots of work for this thread, but I'm not sure how useful it would be on a campaign basis. It seems that by the time I've restructured an entry to fit my campaign, I'd have been better off to have made it up from scratch. Much of it would, I guess, depend on how familiar the personage was to both the GM and the players.


Go to Comment
Unique Magic Items
Systems  (Mystical)   (Defining)
Ramhir's comment on 2010-12-30 02:21 PM


As MoonHunter said, another interesting magical system.


Go to Comment
Total Comments:
204

Join Now!!




Fatal error: Call to undefined function top_menu() in /home/strolen/public_html/lockmor/application/views/citadel/vfooter.php on line 2