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Kingmaker
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Campaign Defining)
PoisonAlchemist's comment on 2013-03-25 01:51 AM
I rather enjoyed this idea, and wish it was better linked with its cousin swords and relevant backstory. Go to Comment
The Hand of Callous Justice
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
PoisonAlchemist's comment on 2011-12-10 11:57 PM


Author's Note: This submission is unfinished, as it should be linked to a number of other items in a homebrew campaign setting which does not exist on the site. Critique as you like. 


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The Hand of Callous Justice
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
PoisonAlchemist's comment on 2013-05-29 12:11 PM
I never considered the name important, but I understand the confusion.

Ever watch Warehouse 13? It's a show where people collect 'artifacts', things like Sylvia Plath's typewriter which makes you suicidal. No one blessed or cursed or enchanted the typewriter, it is the way it is because of who it belonged to and the emotions she felt. This is the sentencing hand of a man who let his own son die rather than compromise justice. Do you not think that is magic enough? Go to Comment
The Hand of Callous Justice
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
PoisonAlchemist's comment on 2013-05-29 10:13 PM
Meh, it's not my finest work I'll admit but no one seems interested in reading two-part epics and someone might get an idea or two.

Good point about going and digging up the hand. As yet it's unexplained because the Jixden article is unwritten (no excuse really) but for your curiosity I'll provide a cursory explanation:

Jixden is a place where death and mutilation beyond recognition in a back alley is common. As the torrential rains of the area wash bodies into "Tide Ends" families with missing loved ones needed some form of identification for brutalized and rotting corpses. As such a symbol based tattoo system was created and placed on the hand. Not only does it identify your faction affiliations (based on the alchemist who inscribed it) but if you have parents, siblings, children, and whether they are alive, dead, missing, unknown, etc. Because this often the only means of identifying a loved one after death the removal of the hand is considered beyond insult - it is the worst thing that can be done in Jixden culture and is reserved only for the worst of traitors or enemies.

Removing the judge's hand is the ultimate expression of this Jixden Family's triumph over Okada law. It's desecrating his corpse in a way that is uniquely of the people who defeated him in a show of power and ruthlessness that stakes their claim on the city. The general populace of Okada may not understand, but they're not the ones to whom that 'message' was addressed. Go to Comment
The Hand of Callous Justice
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
PoisonAlchemist's comment on 2013-03-20 09:50 PM
I heartily approve. Go to Comment
Wrathbringer
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Campaign Defining)
PoisonAlchemist's comment on 2013-03-25 01:59 AM
What I really like about this particular sword is that the sword itself is going insane which makes me wonder what will happen if it goes mad. Go to Comment
What hath Science Wrought?
Plots  (Discovery)   (Single-Storyline)
PoisonAlchemist's comment on 2012-01-31 11:48 PM
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Ether Ward
Items  (Tools)   (Non-Magical)
PoisonAlchemist's comment on 2011-09-12 04:51 PM


I quite like this idea because it is highly adaptable. If your game does not focus on Ether a similar setup could be made for any 'aura' of your choosing. What a perfect way to harken the arrival of the BBEG, chimes ringing furiously in a place absent of wind but with a darkening sky. They could also function like Tribbles + Kingons, which is to say if some ethereal/evil has posessed a human or is disguised they still react. They're just a really nice touch that can be added anywhere. 


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The Black Circus of Mortuel
Society/ Organizations  (Criminal/Espionage)   (Regional)
PoisonAlchemist's comment on 2011-09-11 03:54 PM


I am not going to vote yet, because this is so close to being a five but is missing one crucial thing to me. Motivation. What is the mission of the circus? Why does this god value laughter? Why does he have a group of laughing assassins? I feel like all of this could be explained if I just knew what the motivation of the cult or their god was. 


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Girsh
Lifeforms  (Unique)   (Plains)
PoisonAlchemist's comment on 2011-09-08 02:13 PM


Another top-notch submission. I love how all of your animals seem pausable and well tailored to their environment. The plot hooks seem a little on the thin side, but I'm still glad they're there. Thanks so much for posting the picture as well, most of your submissions are so clear I don't need one, but this creature is particularly complex looking. 


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Blydwyn potion
Items  (Potion)   (Combat)
PoisonAlchemist's comment on 2011-09-08 02:18 PM


A very thorough potion, you should create a submission that is a list of your wonderfully detailed alchemical ingredients. A great war-time potion like morphine. 


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Executioner
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Cursed)
PoisonAlchemist's comment on 2011-08-08 04:38 PM


I concur with Infested Jerk. Print it out on a sheet of paper and read it aloud to yourself or better yet have a friend read it to you. 



This item does not seem cursed, typically a cursed item has some sort of detrimental effect on the wielder.



Is Damon Lord a person, or do you mean Deamon? 


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The Soul
Lifeforms  (Ethereal)   (Any)
PoisonAlchemist's comment on 2011-09-05 03:46 PM


Interesting, the soul is both good and bad, and immortality is impossible if you have a concience. 


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The Door of Heaven
Dungeons  (Underground)   (Traps)
PoisonAlchemist's comment on 2011-09-02 12:35 PM


This is a very nice and simple low level complication, with so many ways of it being overcome you don't have to worry too much about whether your players are carrying a grappling hook or not. At higher levels it tends to lose its usefulness when magic-solves-everything kicks in. I think it lacks an added layer of challenge though. I'll post some ideas on the scroll. 


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The Door of Heaven
Dungeons  (Underground)   (Traps)
PoisonAlchemist's comment on 2011-09-02 12:47 PM


Additional complications to increase difficulty and/or lethality without too much effort on the builder's part:




  • The floor is covered in Grease (or ice). 


  • The floor is covered in Grease, then set on fire. 


  • The floor is covered in Grease, set on fire, and produces noxious fumes.


  • There is a very strong wind coming from the direction of the door. 


  • A strong magnet makes the climb impossible in armor.


  • The Door of Heaven is an illusion to buy time for the guards. The real door is hidden at the base of the ledge. (Who wants to climb that ledge every day anyways?)


  • A lever at one end of the corridor opens the door, which shuts after a short amount of time. 


  • The walls are covered in a poisonous fungus that should not be touched. 


  • Any archers or foes up the slope get bonuses to attack and damage for having the high ground. 


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Oka
NPCs  (Scenario Based)   (Mercantile)
PoisonAlchemist's comment on 2011-09-02 12:29 PM


Cute, detailed, practical and a nice fleshing out to the 30 submission. 


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Religion
Systems  (Knowledge/Lore)   (Defining)
PoisonAlchemist's comment on 2011-09-01 12:37 PM


I think the main thing lacking in this piece is clarity. I am unsure if I am reading several books, or if I am Ridinian. Each individual story is interesting and well written. I would also advise changing the title to "Religion in your world name here" to stave off confusion. 


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Fully Articulated Powered Carapace Armor
Items  (Armor)   (Combat)
PoisonAlchemist's comment on 2011-09-01 04:11 AM


A very good and complete writeup of an uncommon piece of equipment. Does the Kellerhadrin Plant fiber ever wear out or degrade? I'm sure the suits are broken far before then, but it seems a releveant qestion. If the plants are still alive when they are used you might even have to water your armor. 


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The Ark
Society/ Organizations  (Political)   (Area)
PoisonAlchemist's comment on 2011-09-01 04:02 AM


Wow. I have only read this and the Biv (it might be nice if you used inline links) but I already have a very very clear picture of your world. Good work. 


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The Ark
Society/ Organizations  (Political)   (Area)
PoisonAlchemist's comment on 2011-09-01 04:02 AM


Wow. I have only read this and the Biv (it might be nice if you used inline links) but I already have a very very clear picture of your world. Good work. 


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