I think the plot hooks are where this creature shines, the fact that they leave people who have been consumed with hatred and evil as simpletons creates a moal dilemma. I love the little backstory about "the devil who just wasn't evil enough" but wish it was linked to some other posts so I knew more about this badass woman that tore his mind asunder.
There is something in particular that bugs me (haha... ha.) Im not sure how the mites work, but I think that might be better explained by why they exist. Is time itself made up of little insects? Are they parasites on time? I'm just having issues wrapping my mind around why they are what they are and why they do what they do.
I'm not sure what to feel about this submission. I like that it has several histories and several plots (one of which I like, but putting players in a save or die situation tends to make them unhappy and frustrated). I like the description and the setup alone would make for an interesting mage tower or other building. I just feel like there is something missing from it, like it's a bit too blank to be fully realized.
I also understand why axlerowes may be upset, but isn't part of a truly great submission how acessable it is? If even a handfull of people feel they are left wanting something that doesn't make a submission bad, but it's certainly going to keep it from getting a 5.
Plot 1: A mysterious bout of venerial diseases has suddenly come to plague a city. Spreadding like wildfire and un-talked about by the community. A faulty manufacturer of the panties could be to blame.
Plot 2: Some pervert has been stealing into the chambers of lords and ladies and sniffing their panties! Finding the criminal reveals he has been able to reverse-engineer the panties to give up blood, which he uses for more sinister necromantic purposes like creating hollow children.
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Plot 3: The rivers of a far away town begin to run red with blood, destroying crops, causing disease, and fouling the water for drinking. This happens to coincide with a certian fad in panties several miles away. All the blood had to go somewhere, how can you convince the wealthy people of a far away town to care about this hamlet?