The set up with the other rings hinted at some other form of undead, but this was a nice twist. Maybe a little more indepth description on how it attacks the person's insecurities would be nice. Nice way to complete the set, now how about a submission on Railus and Mordum?
For some reason I can't vote, but I will once it allows me to. Go to Comment
Anything I could say has already been said. Some comments seem harsh and elitest, but I guess that is what happens when you ask people for their opinions. I think I will hold off on submitting anything for now, but I like your stuff I have read so far. Go to Comment
The frozen wastes stretch for miles around. Something waddles through the snow. It's a penguin: An emperor penguin. It waddles slowly, meandering toward the sea. The ranger freezes. "Stay very still," he warns. "Don't move at all." "What is it?" I ask, breathlessly. "It's the most dangerous creature in the whole Yahoo Tundra, and that penguin's about to kick its butt..." (Sorry, Epi! I couldn't resist!)