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Humanchild, the Waif from Fae
NPCs  (Minor)   (Artistic/Performance)
Pieh's comment on 2011-01-17 04:34 PM


Not a bad submission, but I'm not really sure how I would use it. I like the denied touch aspect that Axle commented on, but I wish the powers she had were given a background as Fae gifts.


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Chiros: Savage Messiah
NPCs  (Major)   (Religious)
Pieh's comment on 2011-02-07 04:53 PM


Very nice. I think it is well fleshed out and even makes sense, I can't wait to hear more about this campaign. Also: Great imagery, as Muro said, and as Dossta said, it was a bit surprising. Not what I expected, but certainly enjoyable.


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The Lost Flute of Jasloff
Items  (Art and Music)   (Magical)
Pieh's comment on 2010-12-20 11:35 PM


Very nice. I have always enjoyed ideas revolving around the gifts of fey creatures and this one is very atmospheric, well detailed, and fun. My favorite part is the paragraph about the hands it has passed through. Great first submission, a very nice take on a traditional Bard's instrument.


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Spear-Sucker
Items  (Armor)   (Combat)
Pieh's comment on 2010-12-18 04:08 PM
I was imagining the Skkanden as having typical Dwarven features (the beards, the girth, the fondness of strong alcohol) but being a bit taller, with more upper body strength and less sturdy/stumpy legs and definitely more savage. They would focus on stonecraft over metalwork to an almost primitive extent.

I see these two clans as having very little metal in their mountains, yet fighting over a cache of various magical/god blessed stone materials. Or maybe they only have access to precious metals not suitable for war.

The Murdholm would use wooden spears and arrows, possibly with a type of well woven wooden basket-like shield.

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The Becoming
NPCs  (Major)   (Mystical)
Pieh's comment on 2010-12-07 02:54 PM


That was damn crepy. I don't think I will ever look at fried chicken the same way again.



Good work, Scras. It conjures impressive mental images of a thin teenager, sitting the back of a dark movie theatre, smells kind of like sewage and fried chicken, just going to town on a big ol' bucket of Mr. Chicken's Special Recipe. The Monster portion of him, the giant 6-legged gator thing is a bit hard to imagine. But, that's just all the more freaky. Good work.


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Kain-1
NPCs  (Scenario Based)   (Combative)
Pieh's comment on 2010-11-29 03:11 PM


That was a fun read. I love the idea of a 'blind' immune system, and I echo Echo's (lol) first line. The character seems quite singular in concept, but the execution brings a ton of depth to Kain-1. I'm not a huge fan of the genre, but I have really enjoyed your Starkin submissions. They aren't something I can readily use, but I do enjoy reading them. Good work.


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30+ Dwarven Gifts
Items  (Other)   (Heroic)
Pieh's comment on 2010-11-29 03:34 PM


Some of these are really very good. Others are quite lack-luster. The Pet Rock and A Funny Tome, especially, appeal to my sense of humor.



"Hey, Hrangwulf, why is the sky blue?"



"I don't know, Dorgin, why?"



"Because it doesn't live underground! Ha! Ha!"

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30 Prophecies
Articles  (Resource)   (Game Mastering)
Pieh's comment on 2010-11-22 09:48 PM


When upon the blood-given star a babe is birthed, the hundred skies will fall in shatters trappings. Leaves of green and envy will crash into the forgiven sun, and the Hydra-King sees all that he has lost when redemption is wasted through fearful filth.


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30 Prophecies
Articles  (Resource)   (Game Mastering)
Pieh's comment on 2010-11-22 09:48 PM


Cool idea. I hope to add a few to this.


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30 Prophecies
Articles  (Resource)   (Game Mastering)
Pieh's comment on 2010-11-22 10:19 PM


In the year of sour grapes, a city will tumble and turn upon the gears of an abomination. At the final click, the seer will be given new eyes and peace begins to burn anew.


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30 Prophecies
Articles  (Resource)   (Game Mastering)
Pieh's comment on 2010-11-22 10:21 PM


This is an interesting poem I wrote using every word in a Magnetic Poetry kit once each. It was written at a place called the Timber-White Lodge, and is therefor known as the Timberwhite Requiem - Enjoy:



Here I make Symbols only Angels could Investigate.



There is Color which Art must know.



I see the Wild Miasma or every electric purple, blue, white, green and black approach my studio from breaking smoke.



Ask the young ink to paint an old passion. Give it this dust and create a concrete masterpiece in soft, surreal, harmony.



Then, try to chisel your glorious monument we always would imagine.



A shimmering Shard of Neo-Joy as never observed in Life or Death.



Come, weld wood, and sculpt our water.



No canvas can capture my bold silhouette: an absurd Impression, but best for rhythm.



Say, See, think, and hear as deep form composes above original grace.



Picture who said, "Demand glass metal." and let harmony be at that.






7/20/04


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Horng Poh-Buh, The Bloodiest Cloth
Lifeforms  (Ethereal)   (Any)
Pieh's comment on 2010-11-22 09:25 PM
Update: Inspired while looking at words in my English-to-Chinese dictionary. The names are romanized chinese: Red (Horng) Rag (Poh Buh) and Steel (Tou) Poison (Dwu). Enjoy! Go to Comment
Horng Poh-Buh, The Bloodiest Cloth
Lifeforms  (Ethereal)   (Any)
Pieh's comment on 2010-11-23 07:52 AM
For a simple description: I imagine it as the black eye floating above a downward pointed, cruel looking, blade. Surrounded with shreds and lengths of different types of bloody, tattered clothing and bandages with the blade swinging like a pendulum as it moves. Hope that helps. Go to Comment
Horng Poh-Buh, The Bloodiest Cloth
Lifeforms  (Ethereal)   (Any)
Pieh's comment on 2010-11-29 02:57 PM
Good one, Mourn. That is pretty much the image that was running through my mind as I wrote this. A swordsman left on the field of battle, holding innards in his hand, trying not to call out the name of Horng Poh-Buh that seems to come all too easily to his lips. Take some exp for that one. Go to Comment
The Golden Pool
Locations  (Other)   (Forest/ Jungle)
Pieh's comment on 2010-11-22 10:17 AM


That's nifty. I like it. It's short and concise, giving all the details I need to use it. Very solid execution and idea. Nothing really fancy, but I think it's original. Good work.


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The Golden Pool
Locations  (Other)   (Forest/ Jungle)
Pieh's comment on 2010-11-22 01:40 PM
Not only is that a good idea, but it might even make sense. The Midas touch could crush you, pushing all of the air out of your body and condensing it to a smaller form before finally turning to gold. Or you could just get horribly thin-looking statues... Either way, I do like this sub. Go to Comment
Sonorous Aquaticus: The Beasts of Thunder Reef
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Water)
Pieh's comment on 2010-11-22 10:07 AM


Thundershell Periwinkle -



A small sea snail that grows a sound-emitting shell. The shell acts like a minor Thunderstone. it makes very little noise, but it considered a novelty edible when eaten raw, as the slug inside the shell makes an appealing low roll of thunder as it is sucked from the shell.


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Sonorous Aquaticus: The Beasts of Thunder Reef
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Water)
Pieh's comment on 2010-11-22 01:22 PM
To be honest, I'm not all that sure either. I have grown up in a north-eastern US fishing village, and as such have a fair bit of knowledge about boating and some marine life, but don't know much about coral reefs, which I imagine Thunder Reef to be. I see them as a gathering place for aquatic animals to make homes and feed. Picture yellow and pink coral, of the sea sponge-like variety, growing near rocks and maybe a few shipwrecks. The idea was mostly for sea creatures with sonic properties, the reef was a loose idea to combine them. But, i was originally picturing it as existing as a barrier, to naturally protect from ships, as part of a remote island's ecosystem. I hope that helps a little. Go to Comment
Sonorous Aquaticus: The Beasts of Thunder Reef
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Water)
Pieh's comment on 2010-11-22 02:21 PM
You've got a deal. Go to Comment
Denizens of the Chill Squall
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Tundra/ Arctic)
Pieh's comment on 2010-11-22 08:59 AM


I really didn't like the spider explanation, but it works. I love the idea of skulls floating in a blizzard, and, as Echo said "Eating people and scaring puppies."



Good work, and I also really liked the intro story. I didn't find it hard to read and it did more for my than the details of a spider larvae.


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