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The Timed Golem
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Any)
Pieh's comment on 2007-10-09 09:33 PM
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The Timed Golem
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Any)
Pieh's comment on 2011-04-21 07:21 PM


I remember this one! Viva la Freetext Fiesta!


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Asphalt Golem
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Any)
Pieh's comment on 2007-10-09 07:53 PM
This hurts. I really don't need more golems. Unique constructs? Maybe. But this is a bad idea done well. You provided a bit of a twist on normal golems with the asphalt throwing attack and the Helm of the Tar-Pits. Overall, this is not bad. Just... more golems make me feel icky. Go to Comment
Asphalt Golem
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Any)
Pieh's comment on 2007-10-09 08:04 PM
DAMN YOU, FREETEXT FIESTA!
Couldn't you have at least made it a Massage-giving Golem? Go to Comment
Asphalt Golem
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Any)
Pieh's comment on 2007-10-09 09:38 PM
Well, I think if you let the lil ones created by the Helm to walk for a while they might leave paved paths... I'm not sure if that was the intention or not, but thats what it made me think of. Go to Comment
Copper Mantis
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
Pieh's comment on 2007-10-08 08:08 PM
The 6ft tall fighting mantis that grows out of a token is cool. But.. It's basically a generic summoning token. It's been done with many other creatures with many other uses besides fighting. It's a good solid idea with a good back story though. So.. 3 for the idea and uniqueness of the mantis and +1 for the background. So: 4. Go to Comment
Tongue of Demons
Items  (Ranged Weapons)   (Magical)
Pieh's comment on 2007-10-07 04:32 PM
Railus, just so you know... Next time you run a game: It is my Quest to find Cedir, kill him, and take the whip for my own! I will do everything within my power to acquire this whip and use it to be the best murderer ever. Wooohoo! So be prepared with stats and such for this Cedir fellow. *Pieh prays to Double G that he wont be killed by this whip, ever...* I do hope to bond it to myself. Wait! Better yet: Can I be Cedir? And create the whip myself? And then go on a rampage and kill all the good guys? Just a thought... >:-D Go to Comment
Tongue of Demons
Items  (Ranged Weapons)   (Magical)
Pieh's comment on 2007-10-07 06:55 PM
I thought it seemed fairly obvious that the items in question were unique... Especially this one. And recently realizing I was already the victim of this item once; I must say it is powerful in the wrong hands (Cedir's hands). and it could make an interesting quest to figure out how to stop this crazy assassin. Go to Comment
Bargorl, The Ringmaster
NPCs  (Campaign)   (Mystical)
Pieh's comment on 2007-10-07 05:38 PM
I like it, reminds me of something I can't quite remember... maybe a Goosebumps book I read in the days of old. Carnival of Terror? Horror? Evil? I can't remember, but this is a good write-up. Keep 'em coming and don't get discouraged. Go to Comment
Staff of the Swarm
Items  (Wand/Staff/ Arcane)   (Magical)
Pieh's comment on 2007-10-05 08:31 PM
"FOR THE SWARM!"
I like this idea. A Godly gift that will not serve the evil. And.. INSECTS! Its powers seem a little limited for a Godly gift, but it works and makes sense. What God of Good doesn't want its followers to make their own way in the world? I'm not sure what else to say about it other than: Good Job! I especially like the Pied Piper idea. I can imagine some not-so-good PC using the staff to draw the insects away and being chased out of town by them. Ha-HA! GG! Go to Comment
Fate
Items  (Jewelry)   (Cursed)
Pieh's comment on 2007-10-03 11:57 PM
Cool, a Banshee. Didn't see that coming! I really like this trio and can't wait for Agony. Yay! Keep these ideas coming, I know you have them all in there you just need to speed up their output. YOU CAN DOO IIT! Go to Comment
Drop of Blood in the Bucket
Dungeons  (Underground)   (Rooms/ Halls)
Pieh's comment on 2010-11-14 09:00 AM


Great twist. The writing was a big shaky and the second skeletons from ceiling puzzle does require you to bust a very large amount of skulls. I get a very video game vibe from this. It doesn't feel like your typical fantasy adventure, it's more like something you would find with a certain mask on. Not bad at all. I might have to use it in some form or another.


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Bloodmail
Items  (Jewelry)   (Cursed)
Pieh's comment on 2007-09-25 11:58 PM
Ill withhold my vote untill you fix some of the typos, like i know its suppose to have dots before "a vampire" at the end. And it says "worn.)rnThe" in the second to last paragraph. But it looks solid and its a good idea. I understand you were tried, having been up since 4am before writing this. So I'm sure it will slide by. I don't know quite what to say, I don't usually comment on items like this, but I'm making an exception for you Railus. I know you have tons of ideas in that head of yours now submit some more! w00t! Go to Comment
Bloodmail
Items  (Jewelry)   (Cursed)
Pieh's comment on 2007-09-26 07:19 PM
Constitution is hardly a d20 term, it simply means your stat or ability governing health. Which i think can be understood in most systems. I think this is a good idea, and deserves more than a 3. I'm giving it a 4. I'm not sure what you play Val, but try to remember that we do accept people of all roleplaying backgrounds, don't be a 20 hater. But I agree that the focus should have been more on the vampire making rather than the chainmail (I think that's what you were trying to say). Go to Comment
Bloodmail
Items  (Jewelry)   (Cursed)
Pieh's comment on 2007-09-27 09:04 AM
I think it's ok for this item to seem a little overpowered since there are only 3 in existance and it can turn you into a vampire. Just a thought... Go to Comment
Bloodmail
Items  (Jewelry)   (Cursed)
Pieh's comment on 2007-10-03 11:14 PM
I like the update, it's much better now. Not that it was bad to begin with. Let's have the other 2 Rings. Then a Plot! and some NPCs! Yay! Go to Comment
The Broken-Winged Ambassadors
NPCs  (Major)   (Political)
Pieh's comment on 2012-04-15 06:42 AM


The Broken-Wing Ambassadors, the Four Ambassadors of Man, represent Mind, Body, Spirit and Void. They are one set of The Divine Concepts, a special caste of immortals meant to be physical representations of The Grande Scheme of Things.



Aten'gai is The Mind. The pommel of his dasuj features a pink gem said to be the origin of all ideas. He is quiet and calm, always calculating and exploring logical patterns of thought. When he speaks, it is with purpose and clarity to define something or thouroughly explain an idea. He is also an excellent liar, being skilled at understanding what will make someone believe him.



Rapp'Lu is The Body. The pommel of his dasuj features a red gem said to be unbreakable under any circumstances. It may also be disaterous if broken. He is a being of action and straightforwardness. Gesturing and "talking with his hands" are common and he will try to solve most problems physically.



Ouru'Ha is The Spirit. The pommel of his dasuj is a purple gem said to evoke all emotions in the world. He is a being of passion. He understands emotions and acts upon them. Often rash and unpredictable, he is often viewed as crazy.



Mox is The Void. He carries no dasuj. He is always unseen. He says nothing and in no way affects anything. He does not exist. Mox is the most important Ambassador, for he brings peace from immortality.



The Ambassadors' Plans:



The Broken Wing Ambassadors, the Three Existors of Man and Their Uncalled Brother, plan to create The Void known to them as Mox. The Ambassadors will become Four and they will be at peace. No longer forced to represent the Materials of Man, they can happily cease to exist as will Every Thing.



The Path they follow to achieve this goal is three-fold.



Aten'gai seeks to make every Man question his intelligence, to instill self-doubt in his patterns of thought, make him a follower of those he considers smarter than he (Which would ideally be everyone).



Rapp'Lu seeks to make every Man doubt his body, to fear it may fail or is not up to any tasks. They should allow a better Man to do the jobs of the body.



Ouru'Ha seeks to make every Man weak of spirit. They must cast aside emotions, for they make a Man do unwanted things. Control is to be desired, so remove the soul.



Mox seeks to exist. When The Void exists nothing exists.



 


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The Broken-Winged Ambassadors
NPCs  (Major)   (Political)
Pieh's comment on 2012-04-15 06:46 AM


I like this one. Great little sprig of inspiration. I think I took it in a completely different direction, but now I have ideas of writing up some Laws of The Divine Concepts and making more of them.


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Dwarven Beard Golem
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Underground)
Pieh's comment on 2007-09-15 10:38 PM
Very Cool, I love dwarves! I need to post some new Dwarven items. This is great, I love the idea of a big crazy Dwarven Chewbacca-Golem. I have a pretty full beard myself and could see shaving it to mourn the loss of a loved one. Especially if it would help guard their tomb. This is a very cool creature and very Dwarven in a good way. I love it. Go to Comment
D'athri
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Tundra/ Arctic)
Pieh's comment on 2011-04-06 10:34 PM


Not a bad minor alien race. It certainly has uses, and I liked the bit about "the better food cart."


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