The pufferfish tactic is indeed a neat idea in a goblin-type. They remind me of bullywugs. And I'm glad this sub has the 'silly' freetext, because these guys must look ridiculous when expanded. I really can't see it scaring anyone. Even if they are 8-feet tall, it wouldnt only be because of torso and head expansion (An air sac wont may their neck or legs longer), and they would have to be almost as wide as they are tall. They might even get stuck in an alleyway for a while... Go to Comment

Here: http://www.strolen.com/guild/index.php/board,5.0.html
That is where we roleplay stuff like this.

But, Welcome to the Citadel. Check out some of the information around here to get an idea of what we are looking for in a submission. This ( http://www.strolen.com/roleplay.php ) is a good place to start.

Good luck, and have fun! Go to Comment

Great job, Guys. Love the take on the old Goblin Piss, though in my early groups is was either Orc Piss or Goblin Sweat, the idea is still lovely. Totally worth a 5 for this colorful 30 on a great topic. Go to Comment

Very nice. I hope I get a chance to use it some day. Go to Comment

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I added a bit of my Christmas inspiration from the WINTER quest. I hope you don't mind the intrusion but I think it fits. Go to Comment

Very cool... now where did I put my steam-powered cross-launcher and garlic powder... Go to Comment

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Very fun submission.

I think the programming methods with the "Ether Crystal Resonance Array" and "Ether-pods" was interesting, even if it felt somewhat above my head. I would love to see a submission all about these "Ether-pods" and what they can do with the "ECRA," because I'm not sure I'm entirely getting how they're suppose to work, and I think much has been left unsaid.

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Very nice, and appropriate for the coming season. I would like to know more about this language of the Atar though. What do the teaser phrases mean? Go to Comment

I think, stat wise, it wouldn't be too powerful with some flexible time limits on its use. It could be fun to make it a bit faulty, so the incoporeality could last maybe 1d4 minutes and 1d10 round (a round being 6 seconds, so a 10 would be another full minute). The history could indeed use a bit of broth to the beef, a good stew is well rounded (as is a good submission). But, still, not bad. Go to Comment

Solid. It just works for me. A must for any Steampunk setting with a winter. Go to Comment

I think I agree with Scras'. Without more information for why/how it exists theres no reason to use it. I'm not sure theres even that huge of a different between the weights and properties of gold and silver for it to make a big difference. Why not use silver? why not use gold? It makes an interesting flavor addition, but I don't really like it.

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First off: Welcome to Strolen's Citadel

Now, this isn't bad. It is clear and well-written with no obvious spelling errors to detract from the idea. So, that and the fact that the item is not a blatant rip-off of anything is good enough for a 2.

However, overall it needs work. For one, there should be a reason for it being a sword. Or a reason why a legendary Dwarven weapon would be a sword, and not an axe or a hammer. But, that's just a little flavor issue. Certainly not too big of a deal.

OK, now the key part. When creating a submission you need to think of adaptability and power. This is very powerful, and a legendary item, therefore not-so-easily used in someone's game. So it is bound to be voted lower. Then there is the "able to conjure columns of fire and emit fireballs ultimately destroying all in its way" statement. That is a problem. Combine that with the summoning of the Soul of Ragnarok, and you have an item that is just too powerful for an average game.

Lastly, I assume Ragnarok is a very powerful Dwarven spirit. But, i cant be sure since it only says he was a famed Dwarven craftsmith, we need more details on him.

Final note: I like the image this blade conjures in my mind, but i feel like you could go into more detail with the sub overall. Did I miss anything? Anyone? Go to Comment

That was a good read and was certainly helpful. I agree with Muro on all points, and would like to add that it was very well written and full of great advice to keep in mind whenever writing anything. Following these tips will not only make you look good to the players, it will actually make the campaign better. Go to Comment

He may have meant Diolauge, which I believe is suppose to be Dialogue. But... he did say second word... I thought it was a minor mistake, and hope no points were deducted for it. Go to Comment

Just to make another correction: When I said "He" I was referring to Valadaar, not you Silv. The comment was written to your reply to Val,, my intended message was: "He (Val) meant a different section of the title than the one you (Silv) thought."

It's good to sort out misunderstanding, regardless of how minor.

Still a great article.


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Maggot, they were written up some time ago. See Fate and Bloodmail. Go to Comment

I really enjoyed reading about Railus and the Circle of Blood, but now there's even more to look forward to. I think for these items to be at their best we need some more of the story. What happened when the apprentices tried to destroy Railus? I can't really guess because each scenario I think of brings more questions.

So, yes. Write-ups on Railus and Mordum would be most appreciated. Go to Comment

Yeah, I wasn't sure if it was very Steampunkish myself. But I plan on doing a sub about the steampunk uses for it, so I think I may redeem it. Go to Comment