"He is very short, only 5'5," but wait, in the middle ages wouldn't that be tall, because of the whole poor nutrietion and all of that?
"black ring chainmail that is almost lightless." In this case, what is lightless, does it not reflect light, or is it really heavy?
"To survive, Azriel joined a thieves guild and learned his trade there." "...for no one liked the Drow and a Drow Assassin surely did make people mad" Now, since he's in human lands apperently, why hasn't he been killd yet? If a lone orc child wandered into a city he would be killed by some wandering adventurer within seconds. You said yourself that noone liked the drow. Go to Comment
It's simple really. He tripped and landed on the drow matrons toes, on his back. So instead of just killing him for trespassing they are torturing him for looking up the High Mother's skirts. Go to Comment
A downside to the not seeing shadows would be that the thief/assassin wouldn't be able to see his own shadow. Now if he doused every light in his way tha wouldn't be so bad, but if he didn't, and he cast a shadow the guards would know he was there and he would have to leave, quickly. Good weapon, good reason to exist.
What exactly is an "unknow?" We're they those funky glitch critters in the original Pokemon games? Catch one and it'd multiple you items by a bagillion and a half? Always remembered using them to get myself a party of lvl 145 mewtwos. Heh, memories...
The idea of being cursed by a particularly angry duck does amuse me, but it lacks something. A backstory is my biggest gripe, well it is about my only one. It's not the final anti-climatic ending that matters, it's the fight right before it that will live on in memory.
Anyway 3, for solid. Go to Comment
"it is recommended to learn to spell before you criticise."
Aright Barbarian Horde. Along the lines of your above statement, learn to CAPITALIZE before you criticise. We don't ask for perfect spelling or grammer, but we request that you at least attempt to capitalize/puntuate properly. And while it may be true that everyone plagiarises, we still have the offenses of system specific, very minimal character development, being brought back to life (repetedly), and generally sounding like on of my PCs made it. Go to Comment
My two cents on the Axe stealing conspiracy is this, if you're selling mundane axes in a obviously magical world, you're not really turning a profit, I mean, you might be able to get enough money to buy a room at a cheap inn, but other than that... Go to Comment