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The Chosen
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Any)
Pariah's comment on 2012-04-05 03:20 PM
The Samahen themselves have never been explained, but facets of their society are explained in Samahen Armor and Samahhi; Sama's Word Go to Comment
The Devoted Children of Midnight
Society/ Organizations  (Religious)   (Local)
Pariah's comment on 2012-03-28 09:14 PM
The Hell of Primal Shadows
Locations  (World)   (Any)
Pariah's comment on 2012-03-22 01:50 PM


Alright, other than a certain non-standard contraction that distracted me for a bit, I like this.  The imagery is suitably dark and grotesque, though I do have a problem with one of the monsters; namely, the creatures are composed of shadow, yes?  Or at least that's what I got out of the intro, but the Wild Ones can survive the light because they're blind?  How does whether a creature made of shadow can see or not affect how well it can stand the light?  Now, the grasping arms of the octoshadow didn't really bother me, because I kinda figured they were being held together by the cephelapodian will of the beast, but the Wild Ones are just that, wild, untamed, without any real /will/ other than the will to eat...  



But that's just me, anyway, great sub :D


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Shay-Keded, The Cursed Kopesh
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Cursed)
Pariah's comment on 2012-03-18 10:14 PM


And it's stuff like this that remind me of why I love the flavor of the WH settings, it's a well crafted sub with a very good backstory.


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30 Genies
Lifeforms  (Ethereal)   (Any)
Pariah's comment on 2012-03-18 10:04 PM
Wipp
NPCs  (Minor)   (Domestic/ Craft)
Pariah's comment on 2012-03-07 05:16 PM


I like it!


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Common
Articles  (Setting Building)   (Gaming - In General)
Pariah's comment on 2012-03-07 12:56 PM
Update: Figured out how to get blockquotes to work right! :) Go to Comment
Common
Articles  (Setting Building)   (Gaming - In General)
Pariah's comment on 2012-03-18 10:03 PM
Yeah, I needed something that most English speakers would understand, I could've used basically any English dialect that carried with it some stigma, but Ebonics is one of the more studied due to race relations and what not. Also, it's nice having someone that's actually studied linguistics tell me that this is solid, I was just building off my experiences as an interpreter/language learner/philomath. Go to Comment
Paravella, The Builder
NPCs  (Mythic/ Historical)   (Domestic/ Craft)
Pariah's comment on 2012-03-06 09:46 PM


I'm going to start this out by saying that this is a solid sub, it checks off all of the right boxes: the humble origin, the call, the regret, the weird past adventure and potential enemy, and all that jazz; however, on finishing it I didn't really feel anything but "Meh" about her.  Unfortunately for the constructive criticism department I can't actually pinpoint exactly why I feel this way about it, so I'm leaving you with some plot hooks instead... :/



Potential Plot Hooks:

Haukagaron survived his jaunt to the nether realms, and succeeded in clawing his way out, now he's hunting for Paravella and she hires the PC's to either protect her from Undead Ninja Assassins, or she heard about his escape and hires the PC's to pre-emptively end him.



An old enemy of hers resurfaces, her dyes drove the Elven Artiste Laffsleafpink out of business and he's spent the past decades working on a dye that would put her to shame.  You can imagine how angry he was when he found that she had the gall to switch job fields before he could show her her rightful place.  So, like any logical humanoid, he hires a group of overpowered hitmen.

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A Treatise on the Styles of Casting
Systems  (Mystical)   (General)
Pariah's comment on 2012-03-06 10:36 PM


Only voted, yo.


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A Treatise on the Styles of Casting
Systems  (Mystical)   (General)
Pariah's comment on 2012-03-06 11:14 PM


Ritual Magic



Oftentimes found in tomes of forbidden magic, rituals (1) are the magic most favored by cultist the world over.  Long, complex, often requiring numerous participants and a sacrifice or two their effects can vary widely, from things as mundane as causing your neighbors crops to fail (2), to summoning Elder Evils from their slumber (3).  Of course magic like this, ancient spells out of books that have been copied by hand dozens, if not hundreds, of times are extremly dangerous to the casters and anyone in the immediate vicinity.  If the spell fails because the cultists were interrupted by a gaggle of adventurers, the spell will backfire, releasing all the pent up magical energies in a burst, the effect of this release is unpredictable (4).



1 Often called Incantations or Circle Magic

2 Rituals of this nature are best cast near midnight on the night of the new moon

3 Determing the best day to cast spells of this nature regularly involves long and complex math, and there's often only one opportunity to summon any particular Elder Evil during the average mortal's lifetime, the next time the stars are likely to be aligned correctly to attempt such a casting is actually Dec 21, 2012.  Luckily enough for evil cultist, there are a plethora of Elder Evils.

4 Possible side effect include but are not limited to: Drymouth, dizzy spells, periodic tunnel vision, sudden adult death syndrom, wandering elbow, reddening of the hair, sudden urge to leave the room, heart attack, nostalgia, waxy build-up, sprocketing of the clavicle, sudden onset psychosis, and muscle cramps. A sudden fear of everything may occur, rarely resulting in fainting. Symptoms of grapheme-color synaesthesia have been reported.  Other side effects include severe aging, liver failure, skin failure, facial cancer, arthritis of the fingers, knees and jaw, the growth of additional eyes, male pregnancy, anal bleeding, the sudden loss of all bone tissue, extra-oral tooth growth, retina detachment, DNA detachment, tentacles, and leg stiffness.  Do not take part in Ritual Castings if you are or may become pregnant.

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30 Flies
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Any)
Pariah's comment on 2012-03-06 11:39 PM


Soldier Flies >:)



Well done and amusing in all the right places.


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Gateshatter
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Magical)
Pariah's comment on 2012-03-07 07:28 PM


I was kinda imagining the weilder just setting down on the obstructive bureaucrat's desk and having it creak under the weight.  Anyway, great sub.


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Laughter of the Fallen
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Cursed)
Pariah's comment on 2011-10-31 11:30 AM


>:D



...that is all...



Okay, maybe not, I really like it, it's funny and happy and insane and did I mention happy? I'M SO HAPPY NOW!!! EVER SINCE I FOUND MY BEAUTIFUL DAGGER I'VE NEVER BEEN HAPPIER, EVEN IF THEY WON'T STOP LAUGHING, I'M STILL HAPPY!!!!!! >:D


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Hammer of the Dark
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Magical)
Pariah's comment on 2011-10-31 11:26 AM


It's a good idea, well written, and I will agree that using a hammer instead of the more traditional sword is a good idea.


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Character Background
Systems  (Technical/ Mechanical)   (General)
Pariah's comment on 2006-09-03 05:09 PM
Great Job Mourn. Go to Comment
The Firstborn - The Untold War
Lifeforms  (Third Kingdom)   (Other)
Pariah's comment on 2011-04-16 09:01 AM


I too can't wait to see more of this grandiose new world you're populating.  Great job with this one, and glad to see you've renounced your vow of lurkitude. :D


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The Becoming
NPCs  (Major)   (Mystical)
Pariah's comment on 2010-12-19 12:36 PM


I like it, it's equal parts SCP and The King in Yellow.


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Harvester of Eyes
NPCs  (Scenario Based)   (Religious)
Pariah's comment on 2010-12-22 11:21 PM
Only voted Go to Comment
NAS Autopsy Report 14
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Water)
Pariah's comment on 2010-12-19 12:50 PM
Seeing as tanks are generally anti-tank weapons, a traditional tank round probably would just pass through, though getting hit with a round with a diameter of 18" travelling faster than the speed of sound would generally count as a bad day for anything, but if it hit off of center of mass and just took out a couple of limbs, then yes, the elib probably would survive. That being said, they do have anti-personnel tank rounds, which is basically just a canister of grape shot that explodes a little bit out of the barrel, and while I've never actually seen one in action, reading about what grape shot did to people in the US Civil War, I will say that it would probably more than kill one of these things, especially if it was fired into a drain that one was hiding in.

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