The names, the setting, the tragedy and the Understar´s monologue... Love it all! Sure, it has some rough edges, but the basic idea itself is just staggering. This deserves to be seen! /David Go to Comment
The idea itself is a good one, the Dhole could be the focus of an entire campaign... some destuctive sorecerer wants to awaken the ancient threat to help bring about the end of the world? Its a bit munchkin, sure, but sometimes a new twist on the überpowerful monster can be fun.. It´s not up to the usual high standards of the Cap´ns works, but not as bad as its made out to be.. I could work with this..
And of course, we can use it as a lesson that even the best among us can have a bad day..:-)
Edit: I do like the idea of a all-powerful devourer slumbering deep beneath the earth, perhaps to be awakened at the end of Creation. Yep, I like that...
AutoMedon – A mechanical poet of renown not for his vast catalog of poetry, but for his complete lack of anything written or spoken, having had no output in his programmed profession. His creator is unknown or at least unaccredited, and there are those in great number in the artistic world who wonder and marvel at his inability to produce poetry, crediting that flaw to his creator who is unknown or at least un-credited. There is also a small faction of scholars who believe that when he finally, finally speaks, it will be the most beautiful or sorrowful verse ever spoke or will ever be spoken. Whether his creator is among either group or dead is unknown. AutoMedon sits alone under a tin roofed enclosure, upon a stone chair, with his gaze off in the distant as if thinking.
“It’s strange to look at this mechanical man and think what thoughts are working through its’ workings or even if the damn thing is” – Aralis of Qurim, poet and pottery salesman