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Plots  (Crisis)   (Single-Storyline)
Nobody's comment on 2006-01-12 10:52 AM
No joke. Based on the Hall of Honor nominations, I would have to say that this submission was the standard of perfection long before it became a Golden submission.

But it's so good.

I mean, It could get better with some more detail oriented touches, but it would only be turning a five into a six if it did. And there isn't a six.

Anyway, congratulations on all this great success. Don't let it go to your head Go to Comment
The Music box of Mordalin
Items  (Home/ Personal)   (Villanous)
Nobody's comment on 2005-10-27 04:06 PM
I think that this item is bloody brilliant. This is the most inspiring thing that I have seen for a long long time. I want to use it right now. Wait a second, I think I will.

Extremely useful as a powerful weapon for evil, but look at what cost. Evil mages might be able to destroy half of the world with this item, only to go insane and lose every gain.

And its so creepy. I would have the notes seem to linger just a bit too long if I were the GM, but aside from that, its perfect, and I agree with echo mirage that it gets extra bonus points for being a unique item.

Good Plot+ Excellent Item + Excellent feel= 5/5 Go to Comment
Glil Battery
Items  (Other)   (Non-Magical)
Nobody's comment on 2006-12-13 08:55 AM
I think that you need to answer some of the basic questions.
Sight, sound, smell, touch, taste. Design, purpose, adaptation.

Let me ask you a series of questions to consider.

Sight- What does it look like. Not just the fruit, but the entire tree.

Sound- Espescially for an electrical tree, are there any unique sounds that it makes.

Smell- While smell is usually related to flowers, anything can have a unique smell. Does this one?

Touch- What kind of bark does the tree have, smooth or rough. Does the fruit have little hairs on them like a peach, or maybe the fruit has a hard outer layer like a mango.

Taste- What does the fruit taste like. Sweet, sour, bitter, salty...what? If it is like a battery, then it would be highly acidic, and therefore sour, but the electrical charge might be held differently.

Design- What makes the tree work. When and where does the electrical charge build up in the tree or fruit? Does it need an unusual soil to do so? What about climate, and conditions?

Purpose- The purpose of every species is survival, and the breeding of the species. A single fruit requires huge amount of recources for a tree to produce all the sugar in them. Those fruits are usually grown so that animals will eat the fruits and carry off the seeds to other locations to spread. Why would an electrical charge help the tree produce other offspring? At the very least, why wouldn't an electrical charge hurt.

Adaptation- Bark is an adaptation to the surrounding conditions. Bugs and animals that are harmful to a tree must be stopped. Every tree has defenses against it's environment. Certainly an electrical charge might be that, but then, larger critters would never eat it.


All in all, I want to see this submission thought out. If you can't explain why a tree like this might form, then I don't think it has been thought out enough.

2.0- Idea's there, needs some work. Go to Comment
Winter's Bounty
Items  (Transports)   (Heroic)
Nobody's comment on 2005-12-06 01:01 AM
I really like this. I really like the way that danger mixes with outstanding speed and durability. The crew for this ship would be considered the best in the world, renown for their cuning and Daring alike. They would also be the best paid in the world, since the ship's fast speed would make for very good bussiness.

Plus, the ship would start getting contracts to send important messages long distances through pirated waters. Go to Comment
Map of Ithar
Items  (Other)   (Sentient)
Nobody's comment on 2006-02-28 03:07 PM
Well, I usually try to stay far away from any Items that use divination to good effect, however, you did say that the map could be ambiguous.

Plus, the map could think that the PC's really need some patience (instead of the sword of death that they keep asking about) and send them to a really big library. This trick would allow a GM to easily avoid letting the players find anything anywhere. The Map could decide to change it's mind at any time for any reason.

All in all, I like it. And I give it a plus .5 for taking a stupid thing like Dora the Explorer, and making it into something cool like this. Go to Comment
Sadist Dagger
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Villanous)
Nobody's comment on 2006-02-24 02:35 PM
This item is really good. A bit short I think, but really good.

Maybe go into a little as to why they got married at all, and anything else that would be interesting.

I would give it a 5, but it is a little short for a post deserving of a five, so I give it a 4.5. On the Edge of Greatness! Go to Comment
The Box That Cannot Be Opened
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
Nobody's comment on 2006-02-28 02:45 PM
Yeah, I love this thing. Go to Comment
Bra of Holding
Items  (Clothes)   (Magical)
Nobody's comment on 2006-02-15 01:40 PM
I can just see a lady at a party pulling out a longsword from that thing.

Obviously, this is not an Idea that should be voted highly. It is just a sort of neat thing to have.

I give you points off for tailoring it to a system. Go to Comment
Setup
Plots  (Duty)   (Single-Storyline)
Nobody's comment on 2006-02-24 02:42 PM
What I really like about this plot is that not only is it fun, with good twists, and a very nice ironic streak, but it just says Good Ole Fashioned Roleplaying that brings out that sense of nostalgia.

I like it a lot Go to Comment
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