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Locations  (World)   (Desert)
MysticMoon's comment on 2012-03-01 11:51 PM

Good atmosphere, good description, and internally consistent. It's nice to see the occasional "truly alien" environment and this one is well done.


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Harvester of Eyes
NPCs  (Scenario Based)   (Religious)
MysticMoon's comment on 2010-12-19 02:30 PM

This has a lot of flavor and makes me wish I was running a Cthulhu-esque game. I like it, especially the dark god aspect.

I think it could work well as either a Koontz thriller or an episode of Buffy the Vampire Slayer.

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The Friends
Society/ Organizations  (Mystical)   (World Wide)
MysticMoon's comment on 2013-08-26 07:36 PM

I kept waiting for the twist where The Friends turn out to be psychopaths who gain the party's trust only to turn around and utterly betray them.

Maybe I've become a bit jaded... Could be I just need a Friend to restore my faith in humanity :p

I think I need to mull this one over. My mind wants it to have a deeper meaning. A secret society which controls the fate of the world through divination and minor acts of kindness, perhaps, although I'm still not giving up on my psychopath theory.

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The Tower of Light
Locations  (Fortification)   (Any)
MysticMoon's comment on 2011-05-30 10:55 AM

Very interesting. The thing that strikes me most about this is how clean it all is. Put someone in a little room, close the door, and wait for some harmless little moonlight. Afterwards, just get out the broom and clean up the innocuous pile of dust. A method of such brutality wrapped up in such a neat fashion says a lot about the type of tyrant who would use such a device and could inspire of number of linked adventures.

This puts me in mind of a combination guillotine (which was supposed to be a humane method of execution for its time) and some of the methods used to kill victims of the Holocaust.

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Temple of the Golden King and Silver Queen
Locations  (Establishment)   (Any)
MysticMoon's comment on 2011-03-25 05:47 PM
Only voted, as everything I would say has already been said. 5/5 Go to Comment
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (City/ Ruin)
MysticMoon's comment on 2010-12-08 01:51 PM

How wonderfully horrible! I think I will send my players after some bit of hidden lore that has already been gobbled up. See just how many hoops a Niyott can get them to jump through, knowing that a physical confrontation will only destroy what they seek.

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Lifeforms  (Third Kingdom)   (Underground)
MysticMoon's comment on 2011-03-16 09:52 PM


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Lifeforms  (Third Kingdom)   (Any)
MysticMoon's comment on 2011-03-16 08:39 PM

Excellent. These creatures would be helpful for introducing a healthy amount of chaos into a game at just the right moment.

And I love the "lemming grenades" bit.

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Hill Turtles
Lifeforms  (Third Kingdom)   (Plains)
MysticMoon's comment on 2011-03-16 10:09 PM

Another well-designed earth elemental.

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The Last Zombie
Plots  (Duty)   (Single-Storyline)
MysticMoon's comment on 2013-09-01 07:30 PM
I rather like the mysteriousness of it. The imagery is evocative. Go to Comment
The Zombie Strain
Articles  (Fiction)   (Gaming - Genre)
MysticMoon's comment on 2013-09-02 09:17 AM
This is excellent. I can see why it was a quest winner. The ease of spreading in concert with the slow onset of symptoms makes this especially frightening. Go to Comment
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Any)
MysticMoon's comment on 2013-09-01 07:32 PM
There are a lot of useful elements to this and the whole paints an interesting picture. Go to Comment
Twenty Zombie Encounters/Seeds
Plots  (Coincidence)   (Encounter)
MysticMoon's comment on 2013-09-01 07:14 PM
Some nicely creative ideas here. Go to Comment
Fire Flies
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Forest/ Jungle)
MysticMoon's comment on 2012-03-11 09:45 AM
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Locations  (World)   (Desert)
MysticMoon's comment on 2011-04-03 12:17 AM

Well written and useful.

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Battleleaf Armor
Items  (Armor)   (Combat)
MysticMoon's comment on 2011-03-28 08:16 AM

Considering the time and focus it takes to grow and prepare this armor, I imagine it only goes to the finest and most dedicated of warriors. Knowing this, I'm sure others give a healthy dose of respect to any elf they see wearing it.

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Relentless Kiss of Molten Rage
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Magical)
MysticMoon's comment on 2011-03-28 03:40 PM

Nice. I do enjoy elemental creatures and powers and this delivers, while also adding in characters that feel rage, loss, pride, and love.

My favorite part is the Fury Invoking Mantle: The wielder is not immune to this blast, and as such it is only ever used once. Then the sword gets a new bearer.

A sword that can vaporize its wielder in a suicide attack has crossed over into a new class of uber. :)

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The Serpent's Teeth
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Magical)
MysticMoon's comment on 2012-03-01 11:36 PM

This could make for an interesting recurring villain. A knife that continues to find and strengthen a succession of bad guys, with the players not realizing right away that it is the weapon which is the real enemy.

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30 Medical Texts
Items  (Books and Scrolls)   (Non-Magical)
MysticMoon's comment on 2012-03-05 08:19 PM

This is quite excellent. 5/5

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General Posting Advice
Articles  (Resource)   (Citadel Help)
MysticMoon's comment on 2012-06-27 02:47 PM
I heartily agree that content is king.

As for the rest, I am still trying to find the most effective approach for my own writing. I have sat down and written stuff from beginning to end without any attempt at organization. Some of those were received well and others weren't. I have tried doing bullet points and filling in the details but those never do well for me (I suspect that it creates an intellectual distance between me and my writing that shows through; writing code and writing subs are two very different things.) Lately, I've been doing an initial 400-600 word intro and then iteratively adding more to the end over the course of a few days. Then I go back and look for holes and do some minor tweaking and editing. I've found that if I don't finish something within a week, It'll never happen.

I think the journey to understanding how best to organize writing is an individual one that we all must travel down if we wish to improve. There are no simple formulas or easy steps. However, subs like this are helpful because they provide food for thought on this journey. Go to Comment
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