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The King's Issues with Ale...
Plots  (Crisis)   (Single-Storyline)
MysticMoon's comment on 2011-03-21 08:46 PM


I find the first paragraph a little confusing. I think it could benefit from more detail. If I understand correctly, the famed brewmaster was revealed to be the bastard son of the king. But, by who? His father, the king (and, if so, why did the king abdicate?) Or, his father, the one who raised him (and why would he be taken seriously?)



Aside from that, I like the piece overall. A fun, non-campaign-shattering quest. The kind  that I would like to throw at the players just to see how creative they can be in finding a solution. I would probably throw in a rabble-rouser who was going around and telling the commoners that the king was still brewing but the nobles were keeping it all to themselves. 'Cause who wouldn't want to riot if all the good ale was being horded by the rich? :P


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The King's Issues with Ale...
Plots  (Crisis)   (Single-Storyline)
MysticMoon's comment on 2011-03-24 04:14 PM
The beginning is much better. Thanks for clearing up my confusion. Go to Comment
The Mel Victus
Lifeforms  (Flora)   (Forest/ Jungle)
MysticMoon's comment on 2011-03-21 08:20 PM


I like how the plant is so incredibly powerful yet so limited in practical use. The history is creative and believable. There is enough loaded history behind the plant that any rediscovery will bring up past conflicts. I could see spawning a number of story arcs off of this one plant.



4.5/5.0, but only because of the spelling/grammar errors.


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The Tree of Bone
Lifeforms  (Unique)   (Mountains)
MysticMoon's comment on 2011-03-15 08:30 PM


"ewww", yes.



I am in awe of the quality of the prose. A whole lot more showing than telling, for sure.

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Bag of Doors
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
MysticMoon's comment on 2011-03-08 01:39 PM


I would totally love to see this used in a game.


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30 Grassy Mounds
Locations  (Ruins)   (Underground)
MysticMoon's comment on 2011-03-12 09:51 PM


Lots of potential ideas to mine here ;)



#30 sounds the most intriguing to me.


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30 Items From Fallen Empires
Items  (Equipment Listing)   (Magical)
MysticMoon's comment on 2011-02-28 09:38 PM


A nice array of items that reveal the culture they came from. I like the nasty surprises for players that just put on random items, like the gold torc.



And "Owlongwilyouphuck"? I'm lucky I wasn't drinking when I read that, or my keyboard would have been decorated.


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Zombies in the House!
Articles  (At Table)   (Gaming - Genre)
MysticMoon's comment on 2011-02-28 06:55 PM


Nice. I've found that I've become a fan of rules-lite games as I've gotten older and have to juggle around the rest of my life. On first glance the system seems good, although I'd have to play it to say for sure. The zombie aspect is good and gives it a strong focus.



And, I agree; clowns are creepy.


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A Cupid for Cornelius
Plots  (Hired)   (Side-Quest)
MysticMoon's comment on 2011-02-28 06:43 PM


A nice, fresh take on dragons in gaming. This is the kind of adventure that would really push the players to be creative (and the GM, too, as he works to keep things interesting.)


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Croc-a-Pult
Items  (Ranged Weapons)   (Combat)
MysticMoon's comment on 2011-02-25 08:29 AM
Aye! We have excellent grog in these parts. Though I fear it often leads to more silliness. Go to Comment
Croc-a-Pult
Items  (Ranged Weapons)   (Combat)
MysticMoon's comment on 2011-02-24 05:59 PM
I intended to but didn't see the option. If I understand the level system correctly, it is level 3 that lets me use established freetext. Go to Comment
Croc-a-Pult
Items  (Ranged Weapons)   (Combat)
MysticMoon's comment on 2011-02-24 11:48 PM
Update: Finally, level 3 :)

Adding "Silly" freetext. Go to Comment
Croc-a-Pult
Items  (Ranged Weapons)   (Combat)
MysticMoon's comment on 2011-02-25 12:29 PM
Honestly, there were a couple of ideas I left out when I wrote this because I didn't want to overdo the gag. There was the history of the pioneering war leader who invented the tactic and then there were special padded leather jerkins used to cushion their landing (which they were trained to quickly release).

Of course, I hadn't considered the efficacy of pissed off crocs :) Go to Comment
Croc-a-Pult
Items  (Ranged Weapons)   (Combat)
MysticMoon's comment on 2011-02-25 12:36 PM
I know I'm easily amused, but the image of a croc sailing through the air as a projectile just tickled my funny-bone and I had to run with it. Go to Comment
Croc-a-Pult
Items  (Ranged Weapons)   (Combat)
MysticMoon's comment on 2011-02-28 07:53 PM
Update: Incorporated the padded leather jerkins and the story of the intrepid warleader. Go to Comment
The Quest For Helen
Plots  (Hired)   (Single-Storyline)
MysticMoon's comment on 2011-02-24 12:17 PM


I like it.



I couldn't help but hear golem's voice from the old Rankin/Bass animated rendition of the Hobbit speaking the "time" riddle while I read it.



Getting the honey then flame jars in a row would be quite the shock. How diabolical.



My favorite quote: "Getting a foe to generally criticize Sallvian personal hygiene or cooking appears to be equally effective and is perhaps less difficult."



My favorite item is the Violent Sandals of Golan.


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Timmy the Tequila Worm Brand Tequila
Items  (Potion)   (Sentient)
MysticMoon's comment on 2011-02-23 07:17 PM


This is an excellent sub. I agree with EchoMirage and Silveressa (I would probably go with option "B" if I use this.)



This would be a great plot starter - freshly loaded with loot, the group's warrior buys the "best" liquor of the house, only to wake up the next morning in jail with no memory of the things he's being accused of.



The only other thing I would add is to make the sub more system-agnostic by rewording the parts about making a Will DC check and inflicting Constitution damage.


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Skrelleth Demons
Lifeforms  (Ethereal)   (Any)
MysticMoon's comment on 2011-02-22 03:45 PM
Ah, I see what you mean. I'll take another whack at it this evening. Go to Comment
Skrelleth Demons
Lifeforms  (Ethereal)   (Any)
MysticMoon's comment on 2011-02-22 11:10 PM
Update: I cleaned up the overall narrative. Hopefully it is clearer and less disjointed. I also deepened the motivations, included the demons in the main text, and added a couple of plot hooks. Go to Comment
Skrelleth Demons
Lifeforms  (Ethereal)   (Any)
MysticMoon's comment on 2011-02-23 07:37 PM
Of course, in reality, Sean was not actually wronged. My intent was to make him appear petty and miserable rather than someone to identify with. He would fully believe that he was the victim of a cruel injustice and that what happened to Kylara was in fact revenge.

I don't think that most individuals would be susceptible to the dreams and whispers of the Skrelleth because most people are able to get over themselves. But there are those who will go to no end of effort to blame other people for their own shortcomings and those are the people that inspired me to write this.

I can certainly see a variation of the Skrelleth making their mischief on a physical level, as you suggest. I had envisioned them being unable to directly touch things on the physical plane, which is why I went with a curse. Go to Comment
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