Excellent. When it comes to this genre I think technical descriptions are a must. What is the point of such different technology/physics without them?

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Excellent. I agree with valadaar on all points.

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You can always edit the sub to include more detail or add them as idea scrolls at the end. I think the ideas you listed are intriguing and would be wonderful additions once fleshed out. Go to Comment

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A good combination of benefit and drawback with an intriguing history behind it.

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A nice item on its own, but I especially like how the various subs are being tied together. I look forward to more.

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Intriguing.

More?

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I read this as a sort of take on Alexander's solution to the Gordian Knot.

"Kindly stop with the bureaucratic runaround before I use this hammer to remove it permanently." Go to Comment

I love the benefit/drawback balance. I think it works very well. The only thing missing is the backstory.

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So many possibilities for sowing chaos and destruction with this :)

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I really like this. For some reason it makes me think of Roland from Stephen King's Gunslinger books. Go to Comment

A subtle foe that is difficult to detect and defeat.

I think their use as torture device and food is what makes it unique and intriguing, while also saying much about the Shalari.

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Nice one, Cheka. Good backstory and a nicely flawed item that provides good fodder for ideas.

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An excellent first sub. The back story really pulls me in. There's some good potential here for world-changing campaigns.

I look forward to seeing more of your ideas.

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I think this is a fairly common move for new users, and I'm pretty sure you haven't offended anyone here, especially being a new user.

From my own personal viewpoint, I want a sub to bring the content alive in my imagination. I want to be inspired, not just by the sub itself but by the world it paints. I can always create my own stats, but the ideas and how they are presented are key. When I'm reading a really cool back story or description and then come across game stats, I find it jarring. Kind of like looking at an interesting painting and then finding notes by the artist on what colors he used in his palette. It breaks the spell. Go to Comment

The physics may be suspect, but I like the coolness factor. A creative twist to an old weapon.

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This is an excellent starting point. I am also intrigued at the possibilities. Perhaps we should have some sort of metagaming tag for subs like this. (The programmer in me sees this and instantly thinks, "Cool, an ADT, gaming-style.")

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Ultimate power, a bit of madness, the risk of dying horribly... what's not to love about this.

I like the flavor that bleeds through. These aren't normal sorcerers who gather power through bound spirits. There is an entire ecosystem of ethereal creatures. It speaks to a larger, well-developed world, with enough similarities to standard fantasy to make it easy to grasp and enough uniqueness to set it apart.

Well done.

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