Masterfully done! I could take this in many different directions if I used UU in a game, but the core idea of who this god is and what kind of priests and petitioners he would have comes through very clearly. Even without relying on cliches or archetypes. Go to Comment
I can imagine a companion item, or maybe a second use for this one, which reveals the presence of traps in a similar manner. With such a tool, a thief could do well, knowing what is worth going after and how to do so safely. Go to Comment
Sigma Blue Society/ Organizations (Criminal/Espionage)
This is a pretty good breakdown of what I was first introduced to as Aristotle's Incline with a good adaptation to gaming in particular. If I recall correctly, Aristotle came up with the basic 3 Act plot structure by analyzing the plays of the time.
I find that feedback very helpful. I'm not as worried about the vote as I am curious about what you thought worked vs what could be improved. To me a vote means that it was at least interesting enough to finish reading (I consider it a personal win if the reader didn't fall asleep while working through it ;). Detailed feedback, OTOH, helps me improve my writing overall. So thank you for that. Go to Comment