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Fena, the Demon Goddess
NPCs  (Mythic/ Historical)   (Religious)
MysticMoon's comment on 2013-09-03 05:13 AM
Update: A lot more detail has been added. Go to Comment
Fena, the Demon Goddess
NPCs  (Mythic/ Historical)   (Religious)
MysticMoon's comment on 2013-09-03 10:23 AM
Thank you for taking the time to reread this. Go to Comment
Fena, the Demon Goddess
NPCs  (Mythic/ Historical)   (Religious)
MysticMoon's comment on 2013-09-03 02:48 PM
Glad you liked the updates. Go to Comment
Ahkti: The Great Ancestor
Society/ Organizations  (Religious)   (Trans World)
MysticMoon's comment on 2013-08-24 10:00 PM

Good point about the light details. I wrote this up as part of my 8-in-8 challenge, meaning I had less than a day to work on it. So it wasn't intentional so much as the consequence of a lack of time to fully flesh it out.

With the changing cultures and beliefs in Ahkti/Aktagarti over time, it would be difficult to present a singular set of official dogma. It is something to ponder, however, and I may add at least an overview of some of these variations in the future.

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The Shield of St. John
Items  (Armor)   (Non-Magical)
MysticMoon's comment on 2013-08-24 10:37 PM

This seems like good flavor for the setting. I don't know if I'd use it directly; it's possible to make a Macguffin out of it, but I don't know that I would. I'd be more likely to make the location, or the road to it, a setting for conflict involving the two dominant religions.

Of course, I could certainly see Trianarianists attempting to destroy such a tangible symbol of the dead prophet.

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Randy's Janitorial Services
Society/ Organizations  (Criminal/Espionage)   (World Wide)
MysticMoon's comment on 2013-08-15 08:14 AM
Clever. I would probably change the true purpose from evil organization to watchdog for alien or extradimensional influences, but that's just me. Go to Comment
Dark Mantle of D'Geen
Items  (Clothes)   (Magical)
MysticMoon's comment on 2013-08-14 09:31 AM
I would make this item a central part of a campaign arc. It would be a very effective way to set the darkness of the tone and really motivate heroic PCs to action, especially if they can track down the creator of these mantles. Go to Comment
Dark Mantle of D'Geen
Items  (Clothes)   (Magical)
MysticMoon's comment on 2013-08-15 07:25 AM
Being the sadistic bastard that I am, I'd rather drag it out with a slow reveal. Let the PCs face a few of these undead before they learn how the mantle is created. Once it sinks in to them just how many infants have been sacrificed, and how oblivious they have been to the whole thing, they should be nice and motivated. Especially if they come across the discarded remains when trying to track down the culprit. Even better when they know that the longer they take, the more infants that will be sacrificed. Go to Comment
The Prophet John
NPCs  (Mythic/ Historical)   (Religious)
MysticMoon's comment on 2013-08-14 09:48 AM
I have mixed feelings on this.

On the one hand, how could I not like a religion of the Moon :)

On the other, I agree with the blandness that others pointed out. It seems like this could be so much more. However, the prophet seems more like a cardboard cutout than a real person. He must have had charisma or piety or something in order to affect so many people, so why not show it? I'm not really drawn into the conflict between the two religions and thus don't actually feel moved by his assassination. Of course I could use that conflict in a game and maybe reference the followers of John but I want to be a little lazy and have you show me how I should make my players care.

I'm Ok with the mysterious past; that could actually work for you if done right. IMO, it just needs more work. Go to Comment
The Prophet John
NPCs  (Mythic/ Historical)   (Religious)
MysticMoon's comment on 2013-08-24 10:29 PM

On reading this updated version I am upping my vote. The background made the character more real to me. His hidden skills in sorcery and necromancy, used as a tool in his battle for supremacy of his religion over the other, also speaks to the nature of the faithful in your world.

However, I do agree with the points made by valadaar. Saying "1 in 10" sounds like the simple mechanics of a die roll, which pulls me out of the story. I really like the idea of John in turmoil over being possessed by a spirit which both helps him and controls him.

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Organic Memory Core
Items  (Other)   (Cursed)
MysticMoon's comment on 2013-08-14 10:02 AM
This is just awesome and seems like a natural outgrowth of the kind of content caching that goes on today with a nicely disturbing twist. Akamai in the Cosmic Era indeed.

I have to say, if you ever put together your Cosmic Era content and produced a set of gaming books from it, I would buy the hell out of them. Go to Comment
Systems  (Divine/ Spirit)   (Specific)
MysticMoon's comment on 2013-08-24 10:17 PM

This is pretty cool in my book. A lunar religion? How could I not like it? :)

Since the waxing moon is associated with generally positive things and the waning moon with generally negative things, are there any associated beliefs regarding the evening and the morning? (Since the waxing moon is more visible in the early evening and the waning moon moreso in the late morning.)

Are there differences in how the moon phases are perceived during the different seasons? For instance, would the new moon in winter be seen as a strong time for Mortes since the harsh weather likely means more deaths?

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The Books of the Holders update
Locations  (Establishment)   (Other)
MysticMoon's comment on 2013-08-16 09:30 AM
You can always change it to "in progress" until it can be deleted. That way there won't be any confusion on where to vote. Go to Comment
The Books of the Holders
Locations  (Establishment)   (Other)
MysticMoon's comment on 2013-08-16 09:29 AM
So many ways to use this... I love it. Go to Comment
Raven Feather Wand
Items  (Wand/Staff/ Arcane)   (Magical)
MysticMoon's comment on 2013-08-14 03:15 PM
As others have said, the details are what make this work. I especially like the description of how the wand was formed.

This would make a good item for facing off with the Big Bad as the PCs would need to locate the wand and prep it for the final confrontation. Go to Comment
Dorgen's Hammer
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Sentient)
MysticMoon's comment on 2013-09-21 03:25 PM

I don't have much to add beyond what others have said. I like the mushroom handle; it's a nice touch. Also the delayed buildup. The names are a nice departure from the usual.

The stats are fairly meaningless to me, although I can mostly extrapolate out their meaning. Some fluff text for description would have been a nice addition.

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The Crossroads
Locations  (Area)   (Any)
MysticMoon's comment on 2013-08-16 12:36 PM
I also like the mysterious aspect of it. It's the kind of thing that lets me smile knowingly (and a bit evilly) as my players try to discern what is going on. Go to Comment
Whitebone Book hunt
Plots  (Hired)   (Side-Quest)
MysticMoon's comment on 2013-09-02 09:21 AM
Ties in nicely with the others. Go to Comment
The Whitebone Tomes
Items  (Books and Scrolls)   (Sentient)
MysticMoon's comment on 2013-09-02 09:19 AM
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That Which is Forgotten
Articles  (Fiction)   (Gaming - In General)
MysticMoon's comment on 2010-12-28 07:55 AM


I agree with Silveressa about the professional level quality of the piece.

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