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Murometz's comment on 2014-03-05 09:56 PM
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Murometz's comment on 2014-03-05 10:41 PM
I liked this. I read this on a phone in bed, and I still can't believe I made it to the end (quick funny story, came to what I thought was "the end" but then saw it was only Part I lol). This has a lot of human nature true-isms in it, and explores free will, self-loathing, faith and pride, ably. Had some powerful emotional tugs as well, with the children and all that.

Memorable takeaways were:

1. the way this society and world is slowly but surely painted
2. rescuing Diures from the fire, with a feeling of "superiority" over him.

Not much for rpg-ness here, aside from the window onto this particular world, but a well written expose of one man's roiling thoughts and doubts!

I'm also amazed your usual assortment of typos are mostly missing. Kudos. Go to Comment
30 Arrows
Items  (Ranged Weapons)   (Combat)
Murometz's comment on 2014-03-04 08:56 PM
Hmm, i put forth Frog-Crotch Arrow for # 30.

Of course any archer PC reading this would probably want a half-dozen of each in the ol' quiver. Go to Comment
My Last Crop of Humans
NPCs  (Mythic/ Historical)   (Domestic/ Craft)
Murometz's comment on 2014-03-04 11:42 AM
Echo? Are there missing comments in this post? Go to Comment
My Last Crop of Humans
NPCs  (Mythic/ Historical)   (Domestic/ Craft)
Murometz's comment on 2014-03-04 04:44 PM


Well, i enjoyed this greatly! It's funny, pseudo-deep, and a little disturbing. Create and Destroy! Abrupt end seemed perfect to me.



I can see why Sil and knowman want to know more though...the ending begs for more!



And yet, that's my takeaway. The reader decides why everything is clear to it now. The computer doesn't know jack shit.

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Dr Agamemnon Spengler
NPCs  (Scenario Based)   (Technical)
Murometz's comment on 2014-02-26 10:16 AM
Just wow. This was a joy to read. What a fitting tribute! And of course perfectly entwined into the Cosmic Era. Go to Comment
Dr Agamemnon Spengler
NPCs  (Scenario Based)   (Technical)
Murometz's comment on 2014-03-04 06:06 PM


Harold Ramis says...."take an HoH!"



Edit: umm, in 4 days.

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Lescelina the Witch Queen
NPCs  (Scenario Based)   (Religious)
Murometz's comment on 2014-03-01 12:25 PM
Very well written as others have said, from her appearance to her ritual, to her throne room and everything in between is nicely described allowing for immediate, well-rendered visuals. I enjoyed the style of writing..."tooth and tail, water and smoke, task and burden, walls and net, torch and light"...very nice!

She's so well-rendered that you can either use the mythos and society she is enveloped in, or plop her down in any given campaign with minimal prep. Go to Comment
7 Things About Criticism
Articles  (Humor/ Editorial)   (Citadel Help)
Murometz's comment on 2014-02-26 10:12 AM
Well-worded. Helpful. Gives one something to think about before typing out a comment. Go to Comment
Nuverl - Dwarven god of the sea
NPCs  (Mythic/ Historical)   (Religious)
Murometz's comment on 2014-03-04 09:02 PM
You had me from..."A dwarf's fear of the ocean is not baseless."

A demonic turtle Dwarven sea deity. Sign me up! The empty-shell hell is poignant. I thought the notes were a nice touch, but my favorite part is the last few paragraphs where we get the juicy info!

Good one!

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30 Judges
NPCs  (Scenario Based)   (Political)
Murometz's comment on 2014-02-25 08:07 PM
Solid! And there is no "Itchy" judge, yay! :)

Nice archetypes here. Go to Comment
The Brotherhood of the Land of Nod
Society/ Organizations  (Criminal/Espionage)   (Area)
Murometz's comment on 2014-02-21 12:56 PM
This one is awesome i think! So many fascinating conceptual ideas here, meshed together quite nicely! Go to Comment
The Town of Inexplicable Babies
Locations  (City)   (Any)
Murometz's comment on 2014-02-11 02:56 PM
Quirky, I like it! And the explanations (if needed) can range from the silly to the sinister and everything in between. Go to Comment
The Town of Inexplicable Babies
Locations  (City)   (Any)
Murometz's comment on 2014-02-11 08:48 PM
Where ya been, axle? It's all about the idea. Go to Comment
National Corporatism
Systems  (Mercantile)   (Defining)
Murometz's comment on 2014-02-09 11:47 AM
Milton Friedman would approve. Go to Comment
The Blackwings
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Any)
Murometz's comment on 2014-02-06 06:01 PM
Good race. I like how you explore their "crow-ness" in both physical and societal ways. They seem like proper bird-people; cruel, domineering, utilitarian, slavers, etc...

The Dark Crystal inspiration shines through.

I would just add that the text is slightly choppy in places and there are a few peculiar phrasings. Other than that good stuff!

This section ends on a comma...was there more?

"Their deities reflect the desires of their race, with gods of Dominance, The Eggstealer, " Go to Comment
The Blackwings
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Any)
Murometz's comment on 2014-02-07 10:35 AM
Only voted Go to Comment
Trash Golem
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Any)
Murometz's comment on 2014-02-05 02:45 PM
iiiinteresting, I shall revisit this after work with some thoughts. (And delete this comment for another) Go to Comment
Trash Golem
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (Any)
Murometz's comment on 2014-02-05 07:49 PM
Dozus ask good questions (I had a few of the same ilk), and val is right, this is ready for consumption!

I love all unorthodox and bizarre golems, so this works. The twist being the particular items that make up the golem. That sounds like the fun part to dream up.

I also feel the urge to mention that trash and garbage seem to be two different things. When I saw the title i imagined "garbage", you know, of the icky, organic variety, and immediately imagined the Valley of Hinnom and giant stinking masses of rotting, burning refuse, but this seems to be actual "trash" or clutter/junk even. I find that interesting. Go to Comment
15/30 Bards
NPCs  (Minor)   (Artistic/Performance)
Murometz's comment on 2008-02-05 10:07 PM
'Fado' style bard

'Griot' style bard Go to Comment
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