The Corpsemaker's "cry" adds a nice shiver and the worm is suitably gruesome for my tastes. I couldn't help but to also think of the vile and disturbing movie, "Centipede" as I read the creature's description.
Wow. Novel! For some reason my first thought upon reading this was, Doomsday Seed Vault meets Mr. Miyagi meets ancient telepathic relic meets, well meets one other thing or other :)
So many ways to go with these! The plot-hooks multiply in my brain. Go to Comment
I agree with Shadoweagle and Strolen, the tale is interesting and full of dwarven psychology and a "can-do" bearded spirit and is the meat of the sub. However, I do find the idea of a dwarven subway and magnetism, stimulating to ponder as well!
The fact that this is not "slanted" toward an automatic steampunk-ish vibe, instead sticking to "fantasy", is also quite interesting!
There was an ooold Dungeon Magazine(tm) adventure involving something similar (dwarven train system) with a load of dwarven politics thrown in. This reminds me of that in a good way!! Go to Comment
Well, I think this is a really detailed description of a crown/ring/staff/*item*/etc of undead control. The voice of the misery-stricken narrator certainly adds to the pervasively gruesome atmosphere.
The most interesting part is the ambiguous 'soul-binding' between the undead and the sacrificed child. This 'unknown and untested' link is fascinating because it can potentially be used to "interfere" with the control by the main-crown wearer.
Imagine an undead almost completely controlled by a necromancer, yet at the same time, invaded by the thoughts and intelligence(?) of a child.
In this sentence, you need to add, "to believe" after "leads me"...
<i>The fact that he has given me these items and they are far from perfect
leads me that these crowns will be for a dark and nefarious purpose
hence the need for them to be vile</i> Go to Comment
Hi, I'm Muro, and I love vile and disturbing undead thingies.
Group: Hi Muro. Don't be afraid to share your feelings here...tell us of your recent progress.
Me: Well, I've been trying hard. Real hard. Yesterday i almost wrote out a bile-dripping, brain-sucking, amniotic fluid-producing creature. Then I caught myself, and read a book on Unicorns and the fairy elves who ride them instead. Every day is a battle.
As I started reading this, I kept thinking, well, its your basic illusion spell, but then it veers towards greatness and uniqueness! Really weird and really cool idea. Will use this somehow...somewhere. Go to Comment
The tale does draw you in, well written, making her quite memorable. Zombirth, as Forganthus calls it....this is a new concept for me as far as undead begetting, and I Iove it. Deliciously gruesome! Go to Comment
It takes the mind of a dragon to comprehend carving off a section of your own hide and painstakingly crafting the bits into a magical artifact.
I really like that line, because dragons *should be* inscrutable as Dozus says.
So what is Old Fox's grand purpose? I want to know. Also, how many suits would you say exist? I ask because each time the dragon skins himself a bit more?
And that begs the question, does dragon hide (scales) grow back?
Something about this idea stimulates me.
Welcome to the Citadel! Unless you're not new, in which case, just "hi" :) Go to Comment
From a fantasy perspective i like it, because its exotic...and alcohol.
But it nags at me as a lover of said alcohol. Camel humps are filled with fat for the most part, not liquid. So instead of taking out the water, it would involve scooping out fat. And fermenting grapes with bits of meat and fat clinging to the hump's walls, is not only downright disgusting (ANY culture would agree ) but it messes with the fermentation process itself.
But I like it from a fantasy perspective! :-) Go to Comment
Yes, and I can list a few more from around the world that are even more horrifying----coffee shat out by civets in SE Asia, boar rectums and anal canals, barely grilled over ash in various parts of Africa, and so on----but my point was, you can't ferment wine in fat.
The stomach-churning aspects don't bother me a bit :) Go to Comment
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But Mmm-mm good!! I mean i need these 2 primers with me at all times.
I'm not smart enough to come up with points of contention. Groovy!! Go to Comment