Cheka- I think this one is my favorite of your subs to date! what a concept! It reads like a great B horror movie from the seventies, (complete with political commentary)and I mean that in a GOOD WAY! I can picture the trailer. A young couple is down by the river bathing in the moonlight, all set to get busy, when suddenly.....
I would mention the thinly veiled dangers of industry and pollution angle too, but Scrasamax beat me to it.
So how much "damage" do you actually have to do to this thing to kill/dissolve it? and does it keep GROWING?
Iain- yessir, Baduk is Go! (in Korean). "Go", some say, is the most cerebral of the four "brain games" 1-Go 2-Shogi 3-Chess 4-Bridge
Unquis is a lifelong bachelor. His wife is his inn, and his kids are his staff.
Mourngrymn- you made my day! After my Cloak of Hor..Horr..Hor, oh whatever, I thought you gave up on me. :) ;)
Your Splinter comments are funny! He's based on my friend Ajay, who despite being of ideal health, looks like a skeleton with some skin stretched over him. I guess it's fast metabolism or something, and of course his overbearing wife, hehe. I love the jilted contestant idea too! Like Stephen King's "Thinner".
CAN SOMEONE HELP ME! Why does every apostrophe, quotation, or ellipsis appear as a QUESTION MARK??!! I'm not the most technically advanced individual, but I didn't do anything different on this one, than my other posts, and yet all these DARN ???????'s Go to Comment
ok, I could have added some clarification and more description. I thought the lightning bolt clasp might have done the trick :) but I guess not.
-Formerly, the cloak caused gooseflesh and uneasiness whenever the wearer was close to danger. Now it simply causes that sensation all the time.
-It's not that the goose bumps and such "cause" uneasiness. An overall feeling of nervousness and mild paranoia is felt as well, on top of the goose-bumps.
-Obviously people wouldn't go around calling it a "horripilation" cloak. I guess you can call it a "Gooseflesh Cloak" or something. I meant the name a little tongue-in-cheek, for exactly the reason you state. It seems such an OMINOUS word, I thought it would be funny. I guess that amused only me
-why would lightning affect it? Geez, I don't know. Why not? I don't have a scientific or detailed magical discourse on the subject.
- "Not sense danger until it passed or something along those lines." I actually like that suggestion a lot. Great alternative (probably better actually and funnier!)
- Nobody, thanks for "wooly-and-worn". Hope you don't mind.
In closing (and as Nobody mentions-thanks!) I didn't mean this to be a "world-changing" magic item, and didn't want it to be overly complicated. It's a quirky cloak, thats all. In hindsight, I should have made the entry as Yazzard the NPC.
*did some slight editing*
I DO appreciate your comments and suggestions, Mourngrymn. I guess I'll chalk this one up, to "you didn't like it" :) Go to Comment
"The only creature, that can be victorious on any battlefield, is the raven."
Best opening line of any submission I've seen to date!!
except maybe Captain Penguin's..."Return to me," she said, and as he died, he said: "I shall return".And though the years flew like sparrows from disturbed nest, he did return, year after year...! Go to Comment