The conversation is key to this sub I think! (everything in italics). It makes it come alive. This is hard for me to judge for some reason. Its a great story about a basic bank/loansharking outfit, but I guess that's the idea here. So let me just say I enjoyed reading it. The details, obvious effort, and connection with Kings Paupers put it over the top for the extra 1/2 sword
I like the Templar-esque, deposit money here, withdraw money someplace else angle. And I really like the name Tam Josgar. It just fits! Not crazy about the other names however. Go to Comment
"Thats the key. How do you describe how a fantasy financial bank/ extortion ring comes to existance?"
IMHO, thats NOT the key. A bank is a bank is a bank. The sub has the necessary verisimilitude and backstory. I think the *key* is adding nuance, idiosynchrasies, texture and detail, both applicable and tangential(!). Its fantasy. Add something fantastic that makes it unique, without ruining the original concept. Again, this is just IMHO. Go to Comment
The Knotworker is a retired guildmaster, who's true name once instilled fear in merchants and travellers far and wide. His infamous career ended when he was cursed by the priests of Tupu the Metal-Mind, after the Knotworker brazenly attempted to rob the treasury of the Smiths' god. Now, the Knotworker is a living pretzel. A man of misshapen and twisted limbs. Unable to work his trade, constantly in pain, and sadly, no longer able to command respect from subordinates, the Knotworker has found a new niche. He is the giver of advice and answerer of queries. His booth is empty and featureless. The Knotworker is the Dear Abby of the Black Market. Thieves from all walks of life, stop here to ask the Knotworker questions. Any question...from the best way to pick a particular lock, to shipping lanes schedules, to the whereabouts of some specific item, the Knotworker is well-respected and sought out often, for he has truly become a font of all information, treasured by thieves. The Knotworker will answer any question to your satisfaction, or he'll return your coin! But its a gold coin per question, so dont waste his time.
Whats not to like. These are useful items. Love the Giant Tiger-Riders of Praxis! Deserving of their own seperate entry! Nice details (spooling knot design, different from shamanistic magic, etc) Go to Comment
Manfred- I always enjoy your reviews. You don't just comment on any given piece per se. You immediately expand the submission in your mind and start "taking it places" Bravo! It made me edit the entry in order to provide one more vague and nebulous plot hook. Go to Comment
I discovered Awanggis in one of my old, ratty campaign notebooks. Some of you may like it, others may say I should have kept it in the notebook. :) Either way, I couldn't help myself. A bit of a (hopefully subtle) nod to HP Lovecraft I guess. Go to Comment