This goes down as one of my favorite posts of yours all-time! The scope and verisimilitude is amazing. A subtle yet powerful treatise on history and religion par excellence! And it doesnt pound you over the head with a hammer. It flows smoothly.
I have no issues with the history and economics lesson. That I like. I just think that you wrote this too quickly maybe (the frequent use of parenthesis are a clue to that). Its just a bit dry, though again, I have no problem with hard-core realism! Go to Comment
great first submission Erfunden! I cant help but love these pink rubbery critters.
I enjoyed reading this entry. You have a talent for the "turn-of-the-phrase." Short, sweet, and chock full of detail. Go to Comment
I would add some more tidbits, like a Ma-O cult for example, and a maybe a little darker backstory, but thats just me. It seems it could be drawn out into a slightly longer more detailed sub. I like the overall concept quite a bit however! Go to Comment
Scras- I kind of thought it was blaise when we spoke about it earlier, but then you went and introduced cigarretes, for what I believe, (Moon will tell me if I'm wrong) the first time in the annals of pseudo-medieval fantasy city lore, or at least Strolens annals. GGGGgggreat!
sorry- Its St. Patty's day and I'm mildly trashed :D and I can use a Zettelette Go to Comment
Next time you're contemplating a horse variation, but don't want to get too dramatic, how about a Zorse? An offspring of a zebra stallion and horse mare. In nature they are infertile, but in a fantasy world, not necessarily. They are also known to be extremely cantankerous.
"It soon became apparent that zorses are not the most easiest of the equine family to get along with." -- Trainer Pat Parelli, on working with zorses