You worked hard on this I know. Your love for the knights is obvious and all the interesting details puts this over the top! The tiers were great and the different armor was a unique touch. That was my favorite. Well done!
I might be adding more comments as I re-read and fully digest the info. Go to Comment
Sorry haven't slept in days, otherwise I'd have a more intelligent comment. I will vote for now, and come back to this soon, to share some thoughts. I love it! It feels vividly real! I can SMELL the place! I also have a feeling Scras and/or Moon will say what I want to say here for me :D
This goes down as one of my favorite posts of yours all-time! The scope and verisimilitude is amazing. A subtle yet powerful treatise on history and religion par excellence! And it doesnt pound you over the head with a hammer. It flows smoothly.
I have no issues with the history and economics lesson. That I like. I just think that you wrote this too quickly maybe (the frequent use of parenthesis are a clue to that). Its just a bit dry, though again, I have no problem with hard-core realism! Go to Comment
great first submission Erfunden! I cant help but love these pink rubbery critters.
I enjoyed reading this entry. You have a talent for the "turn-of-the-phrase." Short, sweet, and chock full of detail. Go to Comment
Saril had a dream. To open a library in the windswept wastes of Naarish, so that the people of the many villages and towns spread over the hundreds of leagues of desert could discover the joys of his books. For a whole year he kept his library open, but alas, almost no one came.
That is when Saril came up with his new idea. If people didn't travel to read his books, he would travel to them! Saril closed his library, hired a team of twelve camels, loaded up the beasts with all of his books and proceeded to invent the first nomadic library.
Now children and adults alike, looked forward to hearing the bells of Saril's camels as he entered their villages, as he tirelessly traversed the deserts in a long circuitous route, visiting every village and town he came across, in turn. It came to pas that Saril's traveling library came to some fame, and that is how the folk of Naarish became literate.
A word of warning though. Naarish has only six thousand volumes. He deals with those that lose or steal his tomes quite "harshly", by bypassing the town or village which was responsible for losing one of his books for that calendar year.