This goes down as one of my favorite posts of yours all-time! The scope and verisimilitude is amazing. A subtle yet powerful treatise on history and religion par excellence! And it doesnt pound you over the head with a hammer. It flows smoothly.
I have no issues with the history and economics lesson. That I like. I just think that you wrote this too quickly maybe (the frequent use of parenthesis are a clue to that). Its just a bit dry, though again, I have no problem with hard-core realism! Go to Comment
great first submission Erfunden! I cant help but love these pink rubbery critters.
I enjoyed reading this entry. You have a talent for the "turn-of-the-phrase." Short, sweet, and chock full of detail. Go to Comment
I would add some more tidbits, like a Ma-O cult for example, and a maybe a little darker backstory, but thats just me. It seems it could be drawn out into a slightly longer more detailed sub. I like the overall concept quite a bit however! Go to Comment