You worked hard on this I know. Your love for the knights is obvious and all the interesting details puts this over the top! The tiers were great and the different armor was a unique touch. That was my favorite. Well done!
I might be adding more comments as I re-read and fully digest the info. Go to Comment
Sorry haven't slept in days, otherwise I'd have a more intelligent comment. I will vote for now, and come back to this soon, to share some thoughts. I love it! It feels vividly real! I can SMELL the place! I also have a feeling Scras and/or Moon will say what I want to say here for me :D
This goes down as one of my favorite posts of yours all-time! The scope and verisimilitude is amazing. A subtle yet powerful treatise on history and religion par excellence! And it doesnt pound you over the head with a hammer. It flows smoothly.
I have no issues with the history and economics lesson. That I like. I just think that you wrote this too quickly maybe (the frequent use of parenthesis are a clue to that). Its just a bit dry, though again, I have no problem with hard-core realism! Go to Comment
great first submission Erfunden! I cant help but love these pink rubbery critters.
I enjoyed reading this entry. You have a talent for the "turn-of-the-phrase." Short, sweet, and chock full of detail. Go to Comment