I like it! But I'm still confused how if an arm is chopped off, the fingers come back first, then the hand, then the arm. Shouldnt that be the other way around, or does the shoulder stump sprout wriggling fingers?
What I like about the sword is the many interesting plot hooks that it provokes, as Manfred mentioned. A lot can be done with this blade. Nice concept Cheka! Go to Comment
Francois Rabelais ala Scrasamax. Its beautiful! I wish we had more subs like this! What a fun place and wonderfully skewed satire! Is there a twin city nearby with a whole other crew of crazies? Go to Comment
I have NO CLUE what Starcraft is or was, but the post is sublime! Delicious details, but you know what?...I could have used even more detail with such an interesting race and world, not being familiar with its scope. Well done Moon!
Interesting crew. Like Spartans meets Samurais meets the early
Gnostics (The Logos) meets the Moonhunter.
The ideas are great, just a little rough around the edges with the overall explanations and presentation. I like the ritual suicide bit a lot, and the last paragraph on spirits and ghosts. Nice! Go to Comment
Thats not nice Cheka...mvcr4 is new and just actually asked for advice on how to improve.
mvcr4, you need to put some more effort into this character. Ok...lots more! The history, the personality, motivations, etc...I do like the flesh chunks missing from his arm. :D
You have something here, but its VERY little. He's a mercenary, he is an elf raised by dwarves. Thats good. Go back and fill out his whole story. If you want to PM me, I'd be glad to help.
take a look at some NPC posts by others, you'll see what I mean. And as per your request on main chat, post something in forum section, as far as what you need help with, and everyone will try to aid you. Go to Comment
Black Vinegar is unique to the famous Dwarven chefs of Degroz-Dag. It is made under the supervision of specialized dwarves who's soul purpose is the vinegar's quality control and keeping the process a secret. Black vinegar is made when the darkest dwarven meads go sour. Large amounts of sugar and other secret ingredients are added and the final product is akin to the long-aged syrupy, viscous balsamics of our world. Made properly, it requires at least ten years of aging in treated oaken barrels, away from any light sources or heat.
Black Vinegar, or Ooxsus as the dwarves call it, is then bottled and exported, as well as used by the dwarves themselves as a flavor addition to their meaty and hearty recipes. It is never used in the cooking process due to its extremely concentrated and piquant flavor, but as a final accent in the form of several gooey drops right before the meal is served. With its sharp, pungent smell and deep, smokey, muti-layered flavor, it is a favorite at all Dwarven marriage feasts.
The humans have taken to making imitation Ooxsus, but this comes out more sour and less thick than the dwarven original. This pleases the enterprising dwarves, since it just allows them to charge even more for their Ooxsus. Go to Comment
Also called "pale-yellow witch" by alchemists, this mineral is known to possess a peculiar attribute. When found, a Yupiorite will appear the palest yellow. Rather than crystalline in structure, Yupiorite occurs in weird, smooth, ovaline shapes, as if already carved by skilled hands to serve as ring or necklace ornaments. Yupiorite somehow detects and reacts to mood. When the wearer of the gem is content, calm, and happy, the stone will remain the palest yellow. As the person gets more excited, angry, or otherwise stimulated, the mineral will darken progressively to a dark corn-yellow in color. Why the gem reacts this way to sentient mood swings, is still debated by gemologists and alchemists alike.
It is said that the Elven Halls of Vala-Aluduwy are resplendent with wall-sized mirrors of pure Yupiorite, showing plainly and ironically, the emotions of everyone present, despite the Elven love of restraint and stoicism.
"Cave-grass" or "cave-pine" is a deep forest green in color, rare and often mistaken for other minerals, though otherwise mundane. Crystals form into tiny, ultra-thin, needle-like clusters by the hundreds of thousands, creating vast dark green bursts and structures, resembling evergreen conifers, if viewed by any sort of light. Despite its ephemeral shape, Aragdulose is only second to a diamond in hardness.
Dwarves are said to keep these mineral "trees" in their homes, putting them up during festive family holidays, leaving presents beneath them, for kin to open.