Reminds me of Jedi. I can see axle's point in replacing age ranges with something more character-oriented, but I kind of like that approach...
Besides, if GoT has taught us anything its that kids are dangerous :) So much so in fact that I wouldn't mind playing a puberty-experiencing, angst-ridden, wide-eyed, adventure-hungry 13-14 year old Weilder prodigy, or use one as an NPC, who the PCs will most likely underestimate.
I'm curious as to the spellings. Weilder and Waren are spelled this way purposely, yes?
And since I think this is your first sub, let me give you my patented, "Welcome, Chaoticwaffle!". Good first sub! Go to Comment
The Corpsemaker's "cry" adds a nice shiver and the worm is suitably gruesome for my tastes. I couldn't help but to also think of the vile and disturbing movie, "Centipede" as I read the creature's description.
I agree with Shadoweagle and Strolen, the tale is interesting and full of dwarven psychology and a "can-do" bearded spirit and is the meat of the sub. However, I do find the idea of a dwarven subway and magnetism, stimulating to ponder as well!
The fact that this is not "slanted" toward an automatic steampunk-ish vibe, instead sticking to "fantasy", is also quite interesting!
There was an ooold Dungeon Magazine(tm) adventure involving something similar (dwarven train system) with a load of dwarven politics thrown in. This reminds me of that in a good way!! Go to Comment
Well, I think this is a really detailed description of a crown/ring/staff/*item*/etc of undead control. The voice of the misery-stricken narrator certainly adds to the pervasively gruesome atmosphere.
The most interesting part is the ambiguous 'soul-binding' between the undead and the sacrificed child. This 'unknown and untested' link is fascinating because it can potentially be used to "interfere" with the control by the main-crown wearer.
Imagine an undead almost completely controlled by a necromancer, yet at the same time, invaded by the thoughts and intelligence(?) of a child.
In this sentence, you need to add, "to believe" after "leads me"...
<i>The fact that he has given me these items and they are far from perfect
leads me that these crowns will be for a dark and nefarious purpose
hence the need for them to be vile</i> Go to Comment
Hi, I'm Muro, and I love vile and disturbing undead thingies.
Group: Hi Muro. Don't be afraid to share your feelings here...tell us of your recent progress.
Me: Well, I've been trying hard. Real hard. Yesterday i almost wrote out a bile-dripping, brain-sucking, amniotic fluid-producing creature. Then I caught myself, and read a book on Unicorns and the fairy elves who ride them instead. Every day is a battle.
As I started reading this, I kept thinking, well, its your basic illusion spell, but then it veers towards greatness and uniqueness! Really weird and really cool idea. Will use this somehow...somewhere. Go to Comment
The tale does draw you in, well written, making her quite memorable. Zombirth, as Forganthus calls it....this is a new concept for me as far as undead begetting, and I Iove it. Deliciously gruesome! Go to Comment