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Lazarus Lightward
NPCs  (Major)   (Religious)
Murometz's comment on 2013-06-07 01:50 PM
A worthy Occult Guild leader! Great progression and character arc.

"One with the devil" was fun reading, with him carving symbols into his own chest to outwit the demon.

I also really like this spell... "able to cast a crimson haze in the sky which bathes the land a bloody red in a two kilometre radius. Any abilities associated with the moon or moonlight are nullified while under this haze. This includes the Lycanthrope curse."

Powerful, yet somehow subtle, and reminds me of "old sorcery." Go to Comment
Claremont Biomodification
Lifeforms  (Ethereal)   (Desert)
Murometz's comment on 2013-06-07 02:41 PM
What val said. Except my fave is Andre Go to Comment
The Dragon And Its Nine Offsprings
Systems  (Knowledge/Lore)   (Specific)
Murometz's comment on 2013-06-18 09:57 PM
Anything with a Chinese folklore vibe *and* bizarre, mismatched animal hybrids, I'm going to like! I wish there was more. Go to Comment
Crawling Giants
Plots  (Crisis)   (Single-Storyline)
Murometz's comment on 2013-06-07 02:04 PM
This is the kind of "weird" i like. I don't need semi-scientific explanations on why they crawl or have every question on their existence explained. The unanswered questions is what gives them that "alien" feel and makes them intriguing to use. This has a somewhat chthonic vibe to it too, as if these giants are a nod to titans cast out and entombed by the "gods" eons ago...

mangle worms are great, crawlstones is a nice detail, and this line--- "In the strange half-seconds before he is fully awake, his eyes will form within their sockets, like an activated CRT monitor that must laboriously conjure up an electric image. The pupils will be tangled skeins of ice"----is great.

the only thing that bothered me for some reason as I read this, were the humorous tidbits (three carts of casserole, pissing them off, etc...) That stuff distracted a bit from the "alienness".

Anyway, i'm going to use them somehow! Go to Comment
Specialized Fungus Cultures
Plots  (Crisis)   (Single-Storyline)
Murometz's comment on 2013-06-07 02:11 PM
Very nice. Splendidly detailed fungi! i can never get enough of these types of subs. And good "weaving", as usual! Go to Comment
Dreams-of-beauty Minotaur Bard
Plots  (Crisis)   (Single-Storyline)
Murometz's comment on 2013-05-31 10:15 AM
Nicely done. Very much like how you used pertinent info from the Falhathian Minotaur culture to describe her current dynamic. Of course I can't help but "feel" for her, hoping she finds that fleeting love interest. And finally, at the risk of sounding overly-simplistic, Minotaur bards are fun to contemplate. Go to Comment
Valus Longflower
NPCs  (Crisis)   (Single-Storyline)
Murometz's comment on 2013-05-30 03:28 PM
Interesting fellow. I like the dynamic of his evolving personality and outlook. Go to Comment
The Helmet Of BEES!
Items  (Armor)   (Magical)
Murometz's comment on 2013-05-29 01:18 PM
PoisonAlchemist said exactly what I was thinking after reading this. So, what she said!

I had a helm similar to this one in one old campaign. Angry bees would erupt from inside the helmet whenever the character wearing it was struck on the head(helm) in combat. The bees would swarm toward any adversary, while the wearer would experience migraines...

Anyway, your version is better. Quirky, silly but serious, and has that great old-fashioned magic item vibe. Go to Comment
Skittering Steel
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Underground)
Murometz's comment on 2013-05-27 11:24 AM
Quite flavorful, and I would also like to see the expansion. Just wondering aloud, but wouldn't iron be more appropriate as opposed to "worked" steel? Anyhoo, these critters capture the imagination! Go to Comment
Items  (Crisis)   (Single-Storyline)
Murometz's comment on 2013-05-26 10:22 AM
Only voted Go to Comment
Items  (Crisis)   (Single-Storyline)
Murometz's comment on 2013-05-27 11:47 AM
yeah, i don't know. When you have to actually crimp/squeeze sentences, leaving out words to fit a 100 words, without getting the point across, it makes me wonder whats the point of a 100-word sub. Write a stub or idea seed. Go to Comment
Ife And Eath Governors Of Existence
Plots  (Crisis)   (Single-Storyline)
Murometz's comment on 2013-05-23 01:16 PM
Love the "voice" on this piece! I almost feel as if I'm reading a treatise by some Victorian-era Darwin type, who is either about to "off himself" or be hunted down by beings-man-was-not-meant-to-interact-with.

Intriguing, esoteric and somewhat vague, which i like. To echo Gossamer, the mystery of Eath's tiring is a fascinating one. Go to Comment
The Forgotten Brand
Plots  (Crisis)   (Encounter)
Murometz's comment on 2013-05-18 02:35 PM
Nice hook!! Go to Comment
Dwarven Sapper
Plots  (Crisis)   (Single-Storyline)
Murometz's comment on 2013-05-15 02:14 PM
Dwarven Sappers. This topic is way too interesting and full of potential for an oekaki (:p)

Really liked the exploration of sapping of the non-literal sense. I assumed this would deal with tunnels, digging, special equipment (Sapper Flies?), and castles sinking into the earth, but this is more from a pov of general sabotage and sneakiness.

Well done. Like the designations (firebug, rabble-rouser, etc) and some of the details (skinny and beardless).

Just wish there was more of "mechanics and engineering of a dwarven sappers' siege" type stuff Go to Comment
30 Symbols for Various Societies or Shop Signs
Systems  (Artistic/Performance)   (General)
Murometz's comment on 2013-05-17 11:59 PM
Ok, i get how these work after a re-read. Will add 2 or 5 tomorrow!! Go to Comment
30 Symbols for Various Societies or Shop Signs
Systems  (Artistic/Performance)   (General)
Murometz's comment on 2013-05-18 12:22 AM
Locations  (City)   (Desert)
Murometz's comment on 2014-01-19 12:49 PM

Great one indeed! At last, the fabled City of Glass reveals its many secrets! Forganthus' question is an interesting one. Was that addressed in another sub?

(id vote--high!--but woke up with 0 votes for some reason today)

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Locations  (Establishment)   (Any)
Murometz's comment on 2013-05-15 03:16 PM
Interesting! Pokemon ball meets Scras' Cosmic Era, was my main takeaway. Really like the sample pets! Weird and memorable. + .5 for all the samples. Go to Comment
Locations  (Establishment)   (Any)
Murometz's comment on 2013-05-17 02:33 PM
as Cheka might say..."I want one!" Go to Comment
Locations  (Establishment)   (Any)
Murometz's comment on 2013-05-17 03:36 PM
11) Buruvian Shellcrackers

T’adshi’gazmu, as they are known in the far-flung galaxy where they originate, resemble sea-scorpions, anywhere from six to eight inches in length, but are not aquatic by nature. Unusual creatures comprised almost entirely of chitin, with numerous appendages, feelers, antennae, prodders, and pincers, they are not a good choice for those wanting emotionally satisfying interactions with their pets. Their claim to fame is the astonishing, prehensile strength of their pincer grips. If they can grasp an object, they can crush it like kindling, up to and including titanium steel or even harder materials! Originally, these critters were used by the highly unpleasant Buruvi race for crushing and opening the bizarre, stone-hard shells of the mollusk-like creatures of their home world. Over the centuries Shellcrackers have found their way inside the PetDex cubes, and are now prized by owners for their ability to destroy *anything* they can get their pincers around (approximately something 1.5 inches in diameter or smaller) once taken out of their cube. Creatures of little intelligence (thankfully), great care must be taken when letting “loose” the Shellcrackers, as one Captain Kurkus Three-Finger can attest to, for example. Starship engineers have also been documented using Shellcrackers to snap cables and wiring in emergency situations.

They require little “care”, as they feed on invisible particles, found in almost any given environment, and seem perfectly content to simply crush and break, any object put in front of them. There are rumors of giant Shellcrackers somewhere out there in the vastness of space, and tales of these creatures ripping through starships as if through aluminum foil, but thankfully those have not found their way into PetDex cubes…as of yet.
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