I want to vote this high because it's so damn original, but my brain hurts. I feel I'm missing something (everything?), and yet it's so intriguing! Will read through again tomorrow, and return to comment/vote. Go to Comment
I feel there's some part of the tale we're missing here involving Saul, Gabriel and Selmy. Other than that, interesting example of possession.
And fascinating use of Scras' Bone Stitcher in a genre-bending way!
Good luck to your players. Saul sounds like he's now ready to kick some ass. Go to Comment
Hey Ted, just realized you may want to throw in some dates, or at least 1 date :) Just remembered this is from your 1640's campaign. Might help the readers having an idea of time/place/genre. Go to Comment
There's a decent idea here, hiding within the manic presentation. A madman's post-mortem ramblings captured in a tome by his deranged followers via the dark arts. Paraguay and Mossad are nice touches that give this some verisimilitude.
Some bits are sloppy though, and the "101 white males" feels contrived and rushed.
Anyhoo, this would make for a interesting little modern-day (or post WWII-era) rp. Go to Comment
Like val, I like anything that reeks of past ages and things ancient-beyond-ancient. The image of half-buried simian sphinxes is a nice touch. I guess I'd add some stuff info about interacting with PCs and such, but otherwise, good stuff! Go to Comment
Can I say, I feel bad for her? Which is a good thing. A somewhat tragic powerful presence, messed up in head, and a damn interesting character for a novel. I imagine you can go many ways with her...good, bad, other. The 27 pounds of brain and suspended viscera is a jolting image.
I'm going to have to look up what the heck an Ender Wiggin is now. Go to Comment