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Monks of the Bearded Moon
Society/ Organizations  (Mystical)   (Regional)
Murometz's comment on 2014-01-20 09:39 PM

It's great. Evocative and full of stimulating imagery (some kind of image/pic would be pretty sweet with this one actually!), particularly the chin-scarred (or whatever it may be) Moon itself. And the ritual of wax-and-wane shaving is awesome! The moss gathering is good too.

Plothooks 3, 4, 5 are great!! 1 and 2 are unnecessary, I think. We read that they are healers and knowledge gatherers. Those seem ubiquitous.

I really like this! If i would add any tiny thing, it would be maybe one extra little weirdness or mystery about the moon/entity or the order, but that's nitpicking, nice work here!

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Standard Issue Escape Goat, EXTREME
Items  (Other)   (Combat)
Murometz's comment on 2014-01-17 12:14 PM
I want one. Go to Comment
Standard Issue Escape Goat, EXTREME
Items  (Other)   (Combat)
Murometz's comment on 2014-01-18 12:32 PM
I don't think there is anything wrong with Gossamer's comments.

Oh and I'm fixing Isen't for you in the tagline, can't stare at it any more, sorry :P Go to Comment
Articles  (Resource)   (Gaming - Genre)
Murometz's comment on 2014-01-16 11:15 AM

I really enjoyed reading this one! Smells of post-modern real-politik.

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Standard Issue Escape Goat
Items  (Other)   (Combat)
Murometz's comment on 2014-01-16 11:39 AM
Maybe if it was a bat-winged, carnivorous goat, i could see it.

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The Belts of Parkour
Items  (Clothes)   (Magical)
Murometz's comment on 2014-01-15 05:36 PM
Aside from a smidgeon of typos, (go/gone mulbury/mulberry) these are marvelous!

Now these can explain a lot of kung-fu movies, wherein our hero, after kicking lots of butt inside the evil dojo's courtyard, merely leaps up and over the (30' or so) wall to escape. Sometimes, the bad guys leap after him. I guess they stole a few belts.

I'm mixed on the belts negative effects on normal physical skills. Seems slightly un-monkish to focus on a magical belt so much as to have to train a lot just to eliminate the negative effects thereof. On the other hand, it's a nice way to limit the belts in game.

I love these more from a thieves-in-big-city angle, where rogues are literally parkour-ing about, amidst the rooftops. Great visual, that.

Anyway, simple, very useful, great idea!

You seem ready to play a kung-fu cinema rp! :-) Go to Comment
River Horses
Lifeforms  (Ethereal)   (Water)
Murometz's comment on 2014-01-14 12:08 AM

It started off as...classic Hippocampi meets rushing, foamy, wave-horses from LotR. Best take-away from the first part was--to stop is to die. That was nice.

But the Abilities and Weaknesses gets to all the good stuff and some original bits, especially the--messages across great distances!

They are indeed flavorful, well-rendered creatures, though I've come across their ilk quite a few times. Still good though!

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Moon Beard
NPCs  (Major)   (Artistic/Performance)
Murometz's comment on 2014-01-13 10:54 PM

Keith Moon the adventurer! nice. John Bonham too I suppose.

I ocd'd on his love of potions for a while. Can see him having a resistence to not only poisons but most magical potions. Needs to chug 3 healing to get effect of 1, giant-growth barely stretches him a few inches, polymorph affects an arm and leg only, etc...

His quirky companions sound fun too. Who?

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Moon Beard
NPCs  (Major)   (Artistic/Performance)
Murometz's comment on 2014-01-13 10:58 PM
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Concordare Iram,
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Any)
Murometz's comment on 2014-01-10 11:52 PM

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I found myself pausing early on, at them sprouting different body parts of elves, dwarves, gnomes, orcs, etc...

I had to think about that, and I think like it a lot! That's a weird yet somehow fitting lifeform for a fantasy world. Mongrelmen on steroids.

More to come and vote! Oh and puberty is tough for them, geez! :-)

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Robber Squirrels
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Forest/ Jungle)
Murometz's comment on 2014-01-06 02:09 PM

I echo Strolen, the idea of thieving squirrels trained to snatch stuff is a great one that I can run with. I'd probably push them towards a darker vibe somehow as well. Perhaps there are (silly or not) legends of a fantastic treasure hoard somewhere in the forest, belonging to the black squirrels. Things stolen and piled up after many many years of thievery. Finding it is nigh impossible. And though the hoard is huge, it has only things a squirrel can carry. A mountain of trinkets!!

I also get a vision of an "annual" unfortunate event in some town on the forest's bawn. Once a year a swarm of hundreds (thousands!?) of squirrel thieves descend on the town like locusts and steal anything they can carry.

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Masgolth's Fire
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Magical)
Murometz's comment on 2013-12-25 01:48 PM

The weapon reads like an artefact from Norse Mythology. Gloriously powerful yet dangerous to a fault. The tale behind it feels dwarven indeed.

Can't help but be reminded of Thor's in, no one can lift it, etc...

A truly epic weapon for PCs to harness. Can imagine various scenarios of course...jumping into the sea to do battle, as waters boil and steam all around, melting a snow-drowned mountain, as a PC scales it, to do battle with the mountain's demon, a fire-cult stealing the hammer and erecting it in their volcanic temple, melting the landscape as the PCs traverse a harsh wintery terrain, etc, etc etc...

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The Leviathan's Enemy
Lifeforms  (Unique)   (Plains)
Murometz's comment on 2013-12-26 03:24 PM
reminiscent of Jörmungandr!
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The Leviathan's Enemy
Lifeforms  (Unique)   (Plains)
Murometz's comment on 2013-12-26 06:51 PM
The idea is a great one, actually. The pseudo-biblical beast, immense beyond measure...

Welcome to the site, Jojokiwi! And great first comment too! Go to Comment
Office of the High Councillor Corvin
Locations  (Establishment)   (Any)
Murometz's comment on 2013-12-19 01:23 PM
Fixed the bolding for you, as this version came out all bolded.

That aside, I think this is better!! Now you're drilling down a bit more into the "atmospheric detail" of the room I guess, adding a tad more flavor. Go to Comment
Office of the High Councillor
Locations  (Establishment)   (Any)
Murometz's comment on 2013-12-18 01:12 PM
I kind of actually like the peculiar concept behind this piece. A location descriptor that is meant to conjure up a particular atmosphere for PCs is a nice thought. I do wish there was something more either going on here as Goss said, or some more on this Corvin fellow and/or some more stuff about the room itself. Go to Comment
Cessna and Piper Aldean
NPCs  (Minor)   (Travelers)
Murometz's comment on 2013-12-03 12:04 PM
Facilitator NPCs with some panache. I approve!! And I like your comment explanation. Go to Comment
Murometz's comment on 2013-11-28 02:33 AM
Not enough for a sub...sigh. Go to Comment
Murometz's comment on 2013-11-28 12:06 PM

sorry to disappoint lol

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Murometz's comment on 2013-11-28 12:58 PM
re-opened it as collab! Go, Moonlake, go! :) Go to Comment
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