Some heady myth-making here. Good stuff! Evocative imagery of a crimson-stained obsidian wolf! Some nice prose.
I'm curious regarding the paragraph that begins..."Rather than possessing intelligence and sentience, Vauraki is elemental in nature. It is a primal, bestial force...."
The Ozquin Dremorix gave birth to the Vauraki based on faith-and-belief "projection". If enough believe strongly...it comes to be. So far so good. When the occasional "upstart" Ouzquin Dremorix attempts to summon/control Vauraki, do they understand that it is a "primal, uncaring, elemental entity", or do they have some idea that they themselves created it, and thus *can* potentially worship/control it?
If that question doesn't make sense, fair enough, we'll move on :p
I'll close with...yet another great addition to the world of Ouzquin Dremorix! Go to Comment
I will make no quips about the white-space (though a few come to mind). This would be an amazing sub some day when we have thousands of names here!! Will add my rogues gallery!! Good idea, val! Go to Comment
You know, I actually don't mind this format for a character. It does tell you everything you need to know to "use" him in whatever fashion.Since this is a character in a story you're writing, i can also understand how this format helps you plan your tale. Its just that we tend to love prose and your take on the character's history, mind-set, dynamic within story (or game), etc, as opposed to just the basic structure. Does that make sense?
Fair enough. I guess my question then is...in your Forum intro you mentioned that you don't role-play but like to write. So I find myself curious as to why you seem focused on a "character sheet" to begin with, instead of free-style writing? Again, just curious. Go to Comment
This is a pretty cool write-up with some flair. I like the demonic feel of the piece throughout, like all the names, and enjoyed the background "voice". The Wall is indeed a gruesome encounter. Good campaign fiber here. Go to Comment
I'm a big fan of seemingly incongruous locations in an otherwise wasteland. It has that sinister arctic flavor hidden behind a veil of the commonplace. I can see a Cthulhu mythos short-story starting out this way... Go to Comment