Nice. You should make a whole codex of these! Crawling Mountains?! Must know more! Makes me wonder if they actually have crawling mountains, or if this is an embellished, re-interpretation written by someone who has never seen or met one of these desert dwarves. So again, i get that medieval (clueless but evocative) guide to the world's hidden corners vibe. Go to Comment
I'm picturing huge, gray-brown, nomadic tents that look "rocky", embellished a thousand-fold by some Marco Polo type, who never quite made it to this part of the Burning Lands, but was close, and wrote down legends he heard, from those that have seen the "crawling mountains". :) Go to Comment
This is a bit different. I like it because it reminds me of those bizarre, medieval guides on the exotic creatures and inhabitants of the world's unknown corners. Like the dog-headed people, or the folk with heads in their torsos, bees being born in ox carcasses, antelopes identified as unicorns, and all that. The drinking their own urine part did it. Go to Comment
This is probably the best described and presented wealth-religion idea I've ever seen. From the Divine Broker to the Ordinance to the High Exchange in Qurai to the Bursar's Houses, and everything in between. Splendid, rich, evocative! Go to Comment
Reminds me of Jedi. I can see axle's point in replacing age ranges with something more character-oriented, but I kind of like that approach...
Besides, if GoT has taught us anything its that kids are dangerous :) So much so in fact that I wouldn't mind playing a puberty-experiencing, angst-ridden, wide-eyed, adventure-hungry 13-14 year old Weilder prodigy, or use one as an NPC, who the PCs will most likely underestimate.
I'm curious as to the spellings. Weilder and Waren are spelled this way purposely, yes?
And since I think this is your first sub, let me give you my patented, "Welcome, Chaoticwaffle!". Good first sub! Go to Comment
The Corpsemaker's "cry" adds a nice shiver and the worm is suitably gruesome for my tastes. I couldn't help but to also think of the vile and disturbing movie, "Centipede" as I read the creature's description.
I agree with Shadoweagle and Strolen, the tale is interesting and full of dwarven psychology and a "can-do" bearded spirit and is the meat of the sub. However, I do find the idea of a dwarven subway and magnetism, stimulating to ponder as well!
The fact that this is not "slanted" toward an automatic steampunk-ish vibe, instead sticking to "fantasy", is also quite interesting!
There was an ooold Dungeon Magazine(tm) adventure involving something similar (dwarven train system) with a load of dwarven politics thrown in. This reminds me of that in a good way!! Go to Comment