Nice. You should make a whole codex of these! Crawling Mountains?! Must know more! Makes me wonder if they actually have crawling mountains, or if this is an embellished, re-interpretation written by someone who has never seen or met one of these desert dwarves. So again, i get that medieval (clueless but evocative) guide to the world's hidden corners vibe. Go to Comment
I'm picturing huge, gray-brown, nomadic tents that look "rocky", embellished a thousand-fold by some Marco Polo type, who never quite made it to this part of the Burning Lands, but was close, and wrote down legends he heard, from those that have seen the "crawling mountains". :) Go to Comment
This is a bit different. I like it because it reminds me of those bizarre, medieval guides on the exotic creatures and inhabitants of the world's unknown corners. Like the dog-headed people, or the folk with heads in their torsos, bees being born in ox carcasses, antelopes identified as unicorns, and all that. The drinking their own urine part did it. Go to Comment
This is probably the best described and presented wealth-religion idea I've ever seen. From the Divine Broker to the Ordinance to the High Exchange in Qurai to the Bursar's Houses, and everything in between. Splendid, rich, evocative! Go to Comment
Reminds me of Jedi. I can see axle's point in replacing age ranges with something more character-oriented, but I kind of like that approach...
Besides, if GoT has taught us anything its that kids are dangerous :) So much so in fact that I wouldn't mind playing a puberty-experiencing, angst-ridden, wide-eyed, adventure-hungry 13-14 year old Weilder prodigy, or use one as an NPC, who the PCs will most likely underestimate.
I'm curious as to the spellings. Weilder and Waren are spelled this way purposely, yes?
And since I think this is your first sub, let me give you my patented, "Welcome, Chaoticwaffle!". Good first sub! Go to Comment
The Corpsemaker's "cry" adds a nice shiver and the worm is suitably gruesome for my tastes. I couldn't help but to also think of the vile and disturbing movie, "Centipede" as I read the creature's description.
I agree with Shadoweagle and Strolen, the tale is interesting and full of dwarven psychology and a "can-do" bearded spirit and is the meat of the sub. However, I do find the idea of a dwarven subway and magnetism, stimulating to ponder as well!
The fact that this is not "slanted" toward an automatic steampunk-ish vibe, instead sticking to "fantasy", is also quite interesting!
There was an ooold Dungeon Magazine(tm) adventure involving something similar (dwarven train system) with a load of dwarven politics thrown in. This reminds me of that in a good way!! Go to Comment
Well, I think this is a really detailed description of a crown/ring/staff/*item*/etc of undead control. The voice of the misery-stricken narrator certainly adds to the pervasively gruesome atmosphere.
The most interesting part is the ambiguous 'soul-binding' between the undead and the sacrificed child. This 'unknown and untested' link is fascinating because it can potentially be used to "interfere" with the control by the main-crown wearer.
Imagine an undead almost completely controlled by a necromancer, yet at the same time, invaded by the thoughts and intelligence(?) of a child.
In this sentence, you need to add, "to believe" after "leads me"...
<i>The fact that he has given me these items and they are far from perfect
leads me that these crowns will be for a dark and nefarious purpose
hence the need for them to be vile</i> Go to Comment
Hi, I'm Muro, and I love vile and disturbing undead thingies.
Group: Hi Muro. Don't be afraid to share your feelings here...tell us of your recent progress.
Me: Well, I've been trying hard. Real hard. Yesterday i almost wrote out a bile-dripping, brain-sucking, amniotic fluid-producing creature. Then I caught myself, and read a book on Unicorns and the fairy elves who ride them instead. Every day is a battle.
As I started reading this, I kept thinking, well, its your basic illusion spell, but then it veers towards greatness and uniqueness! Really weird and really cool idea. Will use this somehow...somewhere. Go to Comment
The tale does draw you in, well written, making her quite memorable. Zombirth, as Forganthus calls it....this is a new concept for me as far as undead begetting, and I Iove it. Deliciously gruesome! Go to Comment