Great job on this one. The words flow, the setting is rife with realism and sci-fi in equal measures. There was a movie not too long ago that reminds me of this place, but I can't remember the name of it.
Love the paranoia of the residents based on the "here you can die slowly of suffocation..." comparison
Great writing here! From the tag line on, makes me sit up and pay attention. Can't help but feel sorry for these guys. Good job in bringing out the emotional angle. Good voice in this piece! Here's hoping that someday they'll find their Paradiso, be it real or abstract.
Last thought. Strolen will probably hit me with a rolled-up newspaper for mentioning spelling but...
*because* this is a fun read and a great resource for pulling ideas for games, can you please go back and do a once-over on spelling? Things like holocost, beaurarcy, mongole, expairment, etc. the amount of typos is just a bit jarring. Go to Comment
Was recently reading about ASI, Artificial super intelligence and yeah...this is just a fascinating article and makes one (me anyway) ponder the cosmos and our legacy as a species. Comments are great too!
Silk Armor? The Mongols wore silk undergarments under layers of leather armor. Why? Because silk is very strong. If an arrow hit them and made it through their armor, it would usually not have enough energy to puncture the silk. It could still enter their body but, because the silk would not break, the arrow's barbs could not do their work and the arrow could easily be removed leaving a relatively clean wound considering normal arrow wounds.