At first it almost seems to unrealistic and over powered. The ability to create zombies at will by piecing them together like a child's play toy.
That being said. I gruesomely love it. On first reading I said a loud this needed to be under the undead freetext and lo and behold it is. And a Cult quest at that. I'm failing at my own mastery of my Cult of the Dead.
Aside from my minor gripe, I would tend to use it as the corpses would pull free from its body when enough parts amassed together in a single spot spilling forth undead to protect it solely for no other purpose.
A great and creepy monster indeed. I personally wouldn't make it as impossible to destroy as it sounds as an end boss but still creepy and memorable when one brings one of these out.
Fixed and fixed... the anadem is a crown also detailed as garland or a wreath worn around the "crown" of the head... So it is a band worn on the head. And the voice of said narrator may be seen in the future for another item/NPC etc. Go to Comment
Kind of difficult to read, which I assume was on purpose. The idea, or at least what I think of the idea, is a sound one and decently realistic to be morbid and a tad scary.
A few plot hooks and a short list of what the banks use your information for would be great. I realize putting those in are outside the transmission part of the sub but put it in for us knowledge freaks. Otherwise I like it. Go to Comment
I like it, but something just doesn't seem to sit well with me. He definitely seems a being, creature, entity or what have you, of evil and death. The concept of reducing what we know to be a being of pure light and goodness (some settings anyway) into its antithesis is awesome and you have done that. I just cant put my finger on it. Withholding my vote right now until I read it a few more times.
Current vote would be a 3/5 but wanting it to be higher. Go to Comment
I have an image to go with it. I'll try to link it tonight. I thought of the questions you asked about but due to time and the formatting messing up on me I forgot to add them. I'll fix it tonight. Go to Comment
Updated with a small bit of information per Dosstas' suggestions. And here is a link to an image that inspired said thought. Although the skull in the image rests on what seems to be a golden goblet, the Moira Chalice of Kormak rests on a similar base although it is made of blackened bone.
The third son of a candle-maker, and secretly a spy, Tsiao Fong Wei betrayed his family, clan, and town to the merciless Qongg Dynasty, causing the deaths of his own family members. He survived to an old age hiding out in the country side and keeping a low profile. One day however, the “Paper Knife” finally found Tsiao Fong Wei , and exacted his revenge on behalf of the folk, dead and tortured.
After a furious struggle, the “Paper Knife” plunged twin burning candles into the eyes of the traitorous old man and laughed, as Tsiao Fong Wei howled in dismay and pain. Some say Tsiao Fong Wei died that day. Others say that the old man somehow escaped despite his sudden anguish and utter blindness.
The truth is lost to time.
But to this day the children of the Red-Ridge County towns and villages are told by their parents to always beware twin lights in the darkness and to never venture into the woods at night, and to keep an ear open for the Groaning Ghost, for somewhere out there Tsiao Fong Wei the Traitor, now a vengeful spirit, stumbles about the darkness moaning and wailing, candles still sticking forth from out of his otherwise empty eye sockets. And though the candles plunged into his eyes all those years ago were a’flame going in, now the wax protuberances are somehow lit from within and burn without, and two flickering lights in the darkness, always portend his coming.