Oddly enough I read this two days ago and seemed to not have voted or commented on it at all. I like it, the backstory is quirky and detailed enough from a single perspective it reminds me of why I love backstory. Even though it might not be a story that the players will ever find out it is still a much needed bit of context to any sub I think. Kudos to you.
I have never been a huge fan of the 30 subs personally and there is little I can say that hasn't been said previously. However, and yes this is a blatant plug but linking one of my subs put a smile on my face and makes we want to revisit it as I said I would to flesh it out with more Travelers. Not how I would have expected possible contact of said Travelers would be but its an avenue I didn't think of when writing it originally.
Ok... I like it. It has been a while since I have read one of your subs Cheka, mainly form me just not being here. And I can see that you have improved wonderfully. The 5 room dungeon is a good choice for this idea and I give kudos for linking multiple subs within. I congratulate you even, something that is not done often enough.
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The dice rules kind of turned me off but only slightly and the mass amount of hugely epic items that are up for the taking at the end. Personally I could do without the mass storage of magic at the end but that is personal and nothing to take away form the sub. However, the Sword of Fear is marvelous. Its simple has no huge munchkin effect and has a decent amount of draw back that makes this a "I wish I would have thought of that before." item.
This is a grand idea. Yes it needs work, yes it sounds VERY similar to the Forsaken from WoW, and yes it is not publishable worthy. But it has SO much potential please, please rework this. If you need help ask anyone here. Hop into chat or PM someone and we will gladly help you. PM me I have so many helpful ideas for this and would love to assist you.
Frankenstein for the cosmos. I like the idea of an idea such as this but as you said yourself, it feels far to undone for my liking. I'm used to your submissions being far more entertainingly complete than this. All in all its a good NPC to throw at a group of players to see what they do.
Luxury shall spread across the land. Famine shall then return, and the inhabitants shall grieve for the desolation of their cities. In those days the wood of the forests shall burn, and acorns grow upon lime trees! The blue sea shall discharge itself through the seven mouths, and the river Isio shall burn for seven months! The waters life shall die in the heat thereof, and from them serpents will be born.
The Dragon with wings will overwhelm the Dragon without and He will climb on the back of one, holding a sword in His claws, cleaving the head in twain. The wingless Dragon will fall into shadow but be reborn and fly again to cause havoc on the lands.
Religion shall be destroyed for a second time and the Six of the Black's descendants shall hold the scepter after it and a shower of blood shall fall from the Heavens. And those who are left alive will abandon their native soil and will sow their seeds in the fields of others.
The seed of the White Dragon shall be red with the blood of mothers and the sixth shall throw down the walls of the Oppressive. Between her jaws there will be found a bit which was forged of wild boar teeth and then He shall climb over the mountain summit to the shadow of the Hallowed Man.