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The Bachta-Toad Amulet
Items  (Jewelry)   (Magical)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2007-02-16 03:03 PM
I actually took off .5 for the odd way it was written. One large paragraph. But otherwise it is a great myth and basis for creation. This can fit into quite a few tribal mythologies. I like it. Go to Comment
Band of the Revenant
Items  (Jewelry)   (Cursed)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2005-11-15 04:13 PM
I give very few of these out... 5/5 but this is worth it. Good job.

I never would have found this if I had passed up my urge to put all the rings into the codec. By doing so I found that some of these items are rather interesting. This one most of all.

I agree with Moon that this is a devistating change the campaign type of item and is perfect for those players who get a tad to big for their britches. I personally have kidnapped my players, stripped them of their hard won gear, set free al ltheir secrets, and made them escape a prison naked. This seems more devious.

Sure put that ring on... you are os much more powerful now.

I want to give it a 4.5/5 due to it being a close to the Ring of Power, but I just can't bring myself to lowering it .5 points. Go to Comment
Chainmail of the song
Items  (Armor)   (Magical)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2005-11-18 09:31 AM
I think he ment Catastrophic to the wearer not to the surrounding area.

This is a very sup par submission in my opinion. I gave it a 1.0 because it had some thought behind it, although it is very drab and does not flow. There is a partial backstory and purpose for the item. I also gave it a .5 for the attempt at making it a duality type item. It has benefits yet also has a side effect. I would have given more if it was fleshed out more and didn't read like it does. I had to read it three times to make sure I understood what it was saying. It's difficult to follow for me.

All in al la decent start, but it could be WAY better. Go to Comment
Map of Ithar
Items  (Other)   (Sentient)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2005-11-11 01:30 PM
I enjoy this item a lot. In many games I have run, or played in there have been sentient items that take certain pleasure in the characters well being, or their demise.

Wonderful concept, even if it is from Dora. I have failed to read this when I first saw it posted. At that time I would not have realized it was an offshoot of a Dora item. Now I do and I still like it. Go to Comment
Shards of the Storm
Items  (Other)   (Campaign Defining)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2006-10-11 08:13 AM
Now that the entire quest is over I revisited some of these subs and am left wanting. Left wanting the last thirteen shards that make up the total 26. Go to Comment
Demetria Silvereye
NPCs  (Minor)   (Combative)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2005-12-09 09:26 AM
An interesting take on a half born or half human half elven personality.

Is there any reason behind her features? Why her eyes are the way they are? Do elves in your world all have silver or grey eyes perhaps? A little more information on her would be nice.

What are her motives. She is adventuring but why? Why do the elves hate her and her mother? Do they have the same preducices as the humans and her father and mother were exceptions? Go to Comment
A Bag of Beautiful Coyns
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2005-05-24 09:58 AM
For some reason I failed to post here when I first read this a few months ago. Probably in my new stage of being here and anti-social behavior because of my newness.

I just want to say... wow. I want to use this for my game system now. I remember thinking that before... Go to Comment
A Bag of Beautiful Coyns
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2005-11-06 07:57 AM
Once again I realize I failed to vote on this when I had originally failed to vote on it.

Again good job Moon. Your submissions are always top notch. Everyone should strive for a piece of your quality. Go to Comment
The Valley of Undead
Locations  (Country/ State)   (Mountains)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2005-11-11 01:21 PM
Nice idea. Although it would be very creepy for an unsespecting group of adventurers to shamble into one of the towns not knowing the laws and destroy a group of undead.

What are the penalties of such an act? And can you exchange your life after death for more ammenities in life? Only ruling council are voted in if they have their undead card? Kind of like a donor card? You need money, you will agree to be raised for x amount years depending on how much you want/ need. Go to Comment
Kalahars' Gem
Items  (Wand/Staff/ Arcane)   (Magical)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2007-02-16 03:00 PM
Interesting idea. I realize this is a tad on the old side but if you look past all the grammer, spelling errors it has potential. I would like to know more about al lof these orbs instead of seeing that they exists and all of a sudden a master orb is created in a way that no one knows how. A bit to generic for me, but hopefully someone wil lsee this and expand on it. Go to Comment
The Prophet
NPCs  (Extras)   (Knowledge/Lore)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2012-07-15 03:27 PM
Only voted Go to Comment
Aurinellian's Wedding Bands
Items  (Jewelry)   (Magical)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2005-11-15 04:20 PM
I like the concept a lot. Interesting, captivating, and unique. Curious as to why the smith put all that effort into the rings to begin with and didn;t tell them. Sure he could have been fond of their love and affection, but why put in all the hidden powers if they didn't ask for it.

Also, why would the elven nation let the rings loose into the world? Would they not have wanted to keep the rings close, being they were made by the best elven smith and they were given a sort of Tragic History. I would think they would keep them clsoe by for historys sake. Go to Comment
The Dreamweaver Revisited
Plots  (Duty)   (Single-Storyline)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2007-02-16 02:58 PM
Generally it has merit and can be formed into something, but the entire thing waves me off with the preconcieved conversation between the PC's and Bob. One thing I am very picky on, especially myself, is forced conversations. Go to Comment
The Ruins of Aliet Manor
Plots  (Discovery)   (Single-Storyline)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2006-02-28 03:07 PM
Ok, why go from talking about how the rumors of the manor being haunted is true from, the bandits didn;t believe them.

Where did the bandits come from and why were they in the ruined manor to begin with? I will not repeat what Moon commented on, and perhaps this is just a very old thread that was transfered over from the old site. But this lacks anything.

It has a few, and I mean a very minor few, interesting plot associations with it but you have to work far to hard to get them to work or into the light for the lack of information. Go to Comment
The Ruins of Aliet Manor
Plots  (Discovery)   (Single-Storyline)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2006-02-28 04:11 PM
Why is the date saying march all of a sudden? Go to Comment
Ferian Fortholén
NPCs  (Minor)   (Mercantile)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2006-07-31 01:19 PM
This has promise but I feel it needs more. I also realize this was posted back in 2003 but I followed this by a random link and while it is interesting and somewhat entertaining I feel it needs more to be spectacular. Go to Comment
The Box That Cannot Be Opened
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2005-11-17 12:13 PM
Why is it that I seem to forget posting on all of these submissions. I read them often yet don't realize I forgot to post in them after the third time I read them.

A good bit of wonder there manfred. I like it and always have. Go to Comment
The Box That Cannot Be Opened
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2013-05-13 11:16 PM
I don't remember if I voted on this all those years ago but I thought about it the other day and threw it at my players. It was an item left in an alchemical lab of a deceased sage. They found him dead along with a few other notable people in the city together.

The were searching his tower for information regarding a particular issue they were having when they came across his lab. Pocketing a few items, the thief of the group tossed the box in his satchel hoping it contained riches or items of magic. He has broken four of his lock picking tool kits and is attempting to find more. He swears that the fact I am not letting him, open it means there is something in it I don't want him to have. It's fun.

Thank you for creating this pleasurable tool of torture. Go to Comment
Canteen Stones
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2007-09-16 09:29 AM
I too like this and think it's a diamond in the rough. It tells what needs to be able to be used and function. I of course want to know who/why/ and how personally. Who made the first ones, why, and how were they made. Other than that, I think this speaks volumes. Go to Comment
Cowl of False Reputation
Items  (Clothes)   (Combat)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2006-08-17 12:59 PM
I agree with Manfred, long have I missed this. It is far to simple to rate much higher than I have but I gave it a +.5 for being original, somewhat. Good job. Go to Comment
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