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Queen Yocasta
NPCs  (Campaign)   (Political)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2005-12-14 02:05 PM
Ok, creepy. The thing that sticks into my mind the most is her dead daughters body. I really can not fathom that it is on display where everyone can see and smell, but.... its just odd. Adds to the creepy "Im and evil ruler." face but wow.. .definately over the top.

Over all its pretty good. Go to Comment
Mourngrymn
NPCs  (Major)   (Combative)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2005-01-24 09:53 AM
Updated with Plot Hooks and information on his tattoos. Go to Comment
Mourngrymn
NPCs  (Major)   (Combative)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2005-12-05 12:20 PM
Updated: Updated with more background Information Go to Comment
Mourngrymn
NPCs  (Major)   (Combative)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2006-02-08 09:53 AM
Updated: Updated some roleplaying information and grammer. Go to Comment
Mourngrymn
NPCs  (Major)   (Combative)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2006-04-05 03:44 PM
Wow! From the depths of hell he hath been resurrected. Go to Comment
Mourngrymn
NPCs  (Major)   (Combative)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2006-04-06 05:21 PM
I can see where you came up with that thought. However, all of his abilities, tattoos... are all limited and have draw backs to them. I always place conditionals on my magic in my system. But I will look at it again. Go to Comment
The Avenging Angel
Plots  (Duty)   (Single-Storyline)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2005-01-20 10:19 AM
I like it. It is simple in the beginning yet can be as complex as the players and the Dm wish it to be. The indepth outcomes that have ben provided supply a decent amount of room for ideas on how to get the players involved.

I don't like the musket's however, and the fact that a 14 year old is as skilled as she is and still commands a comapny of men. Even though they are neanderthals, my idea of neander thals were never high on a technological level and therefore couldn't comprehend how to use delicate weapons such as crossbows and swords. But that is just me.

Even still 4/5

I see possibilities for me to use this. Go to Comment
The Avenging Angel
Plots  (Duty)   (Single-Storyline)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2005-01-20 12:22 PM
I like Moonhunter's suggestion better than mine. Go to Comment
The Avenging Angel
Plots  (Duty)   (Single-Storyline)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2005-11-08 09:40 AM
I liked this when it was on the pre v2.0 site. And I still do. Once again I like the completness of it. It leaves little to the imagination and give you plenty to work with. Go to Comment
Petra
NPCs  (Minor)   (Travelers)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2005-01-14 11:36 AM
I like it.

How long has Eliam been gone? Long enough for his workshop to get dusty, but how long was he gone? Where did he go?

How did she come to life? Was it a gift from a remorseful Goddess of Lost Love? Go to Comment
Petra
NPCs  (Minor)   (Travelers)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2005-01-17 11:50 AM
You could also use the rebirth theory in that Eliam has long since died of old age, natural causes, whatever you choose yet his spirit/ soul was given to another.

Since she has this unyielding desire and need to find him, the person that she finds to hold that love may not be Eliam but his loving soul.

That could cause problems if the person who she is claiming to be Eliam or his soul is in fact a PC who is a woman/ married/ or otherwise disinclined to have a stone statue craving for his affections. Go to Comment
Petra
NPCs  (Minor)   (Travelers)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2005-01-17 02:30 PM
That sounds completely better, I like that. Go to Comment
Rath ley Mar Ruins
Locations  (Ruins)   (Any)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2005-01-21 02:06 PM
I hate having a mid rating with no one commenting on why. Go to Comment
Rath ley Mar Ruins
Locations  (Ruins)   (Any)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2005-01-21 09:57 PM
comment well taken... I will return to my hole now. Thanks again Capt. Go to Comment
Rath ley Mar Ruins
Locations  (Ruins)   (Any)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2005-10-28 02:56 PM
Updated: update Go to Comment
Rath ley Mar Ruins
Locations  (Ruins)   (Any)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2005-12-05 12:50 PM
Updated: Updated information on the present day situation of the ruins. Go to Comment
Binding Oath Ring
Items  (Jewelry)   (Magical)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2005-11-15 05:32 PM
I like it a lot. A ring designed to keep oath breakers or your retainers from breaking their oaths. Good for knights and stewards.

I would have given it a higher rating but the one paragraph was a little harsh to read and the few mispelled word. Otherwise a decent job. Go to Comment
Robe of the Viper
Items  (Clothes)   (Magical)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2004-12-30 02:49 PM
Sorry to give it a 4/5 because the tale was wonderful.

What I docked a point for, why were the snakes magical in nature and why were there sofew of them? If they wer ehunted to near extinction, then where was that information documented at? If Crowley fought and killed the leader, did the other members get involved and if not why? Did the blood have the effect that Croawley was hoping for, to extend magic properties etc?

It seems after he killed the snake his original goal was left out or fogotten. Go to Comment
Blackrose Academy
Locations  (City)   (Water)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2004-12-29 09:08 AM
No comments but two votes, is that good or bad? Go to Comment
Blackrose Academy
Locations  (City)   (Water)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2004-12-29 10:14 AM
Thanks Moonhunter. I was getting a little worried there. Go to Comment
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Dying God

       By: Ancient Gamer

The Church of the one true God guards a terrible secret: Their God is dying. He is kept within a tank, steamworks forever pumping to keep him alive, clockwork engines forcing his laboured breathing.

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