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The Shade of You
NPCs  (Minor)   (Mystical)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2016-03-27 10:02 PM
I am only voting because I'm not sure why I wouldn't. And I somehow find that I like this. It has given me an idea for a short side plotline in my story. A visceral idea of an oracle or wayward traveler speaking to a party member on a darkened rainy road. Go to Comment
The Xan-Axe
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Magical)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2016-03-27 09:44 PM
I really have little to add or say about this that either hasn't been voiced or said already. I am finding I am voting a little higher because this sent me to another sub which spawned a few ideas so for that I am grateful. Go to Comment
Vestments of the Blessed
Items  (Clothes)   (Magical)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2016-03-27 10:28 PM
I was hoping for much much more when I read the title. As it is this is a solid and simple item. Not over over-done and not under developed and it can definitely be tweaked to any use as per needed. Go to Comment
Infernal Forge
Locations  (Other)   (Underground)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2016-03-27 09:41 PM
While I wish this was more fleshed out I realize that it is a great fluff piece of added to a larger whole. I like it and brings images of dark sooty weapon masters being enslaved and forced to work this hell forge for some evil villain. Wonderful.

I had originally had a lower vote but it just sparked a few ideas in me so I voted higher for the inspiration it gave me. Go to Comment
The Cursed Cup of Immortality
Items  (Potion)   (Cursed)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2016-03-27 09:57 PM
I think this as a whole is fine. I echo Moonlake only in that it has been done, but the thing I found most enjoyable is the fact it is written as you would find it in a source book of information. It gives perfect detail on what the players would find or know about said item on how well they either researched it or however the system or game your playing determines information checks.

I like it. And the fact it is simply a trap used by villains is a point winner for me. Go to Comment
The Guest Star Portends
Dungeons  (Desert)   (Puzzles)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2016-03-27 10:06 PM
This made my head hurt... but damn is it detailed and complete. golf clap and kudos on this one. Go to Comment
30 More Necromancers
NPCs  (Scenario Based)   (Mystical)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2016-03-27 10:12 PM
I wasn't as thrilled with this one in the beginning as I am now. I honestly didn't think it would pan out as well as it did, similar to val. But I was surprised at the addition of the undead in the list. As I first read it and was disappointed I then realized that some necromancers turn to themselves as beings of Undead eventually. Not all stay living and that i s when I went and reread this and enjoyed it more. Good job Cheka... Go to Comment
Dwarfs of Damor
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Mountains)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2015-03-12 09:02 PM
I like this idea, and as previously been said, I think if it was worked on for a little bit more it could have been so much more. Commenting on Goss, nowhere in the sub does it state that they require sex of any kind so I don't see where and why its necessary to have organs of such. It is fantasy after all, hell even Sci-Fi could argue races with homogeneous origins are evident all the time in books and movies. I see little issue with it and it definitely doesn't detract from sub, I honestly didn't even think about it. Go to Comment
Castle Kaukenn
Dungeons  (Other)   (Rooms/ Halls)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2012-03-10 06:40 PM


 



I echo Strolen in saying I like Haukagaron the most out of it and learn little to almost nothing about him, which is fine because it is about the castle not him. But the castle seems to bland. Nothing about it jumps out at me. Ok, so this noble becomes a lich, you've mentioned it now so tell me how? Sure the marble it is made from is cool, the elemental torches are really niffty (I wil luse that) but nothing screams at me that it is outrageous. Its like there are at least three to four subs linked together and all are incomplete.


 


Im not saying it isnt a good sub but I would have described how the castle was pulled down into the abyss. I think that is an intergal part of the castle itself. Which sounds like if fleshed out it could make it into a different form of Hell or whatever that sub was.


 


I would have described how the castle is now affected by the abyss, how has it changed, has it affected the surrounding creatures any? You said, "If there is a god in this realm, Haukagaron has not met him. Perhaps a liche registers no more here than any of the other dead." Perhaps make it to where the denziens see Haukagaron as a deity and they flock to the castle.

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When The Hail Came
Articles  (Fiction)   (Gaming - Genre)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2015-01-30 12:15 PM
This is a cool apocalyptic setting and can be approached in many many ways. I love how it is executed in a journal tell all but in the end I was hoping for an explanation on the Mars incident, who are Vyrtax and why they want to destroy the entire planet. It says one of their ships fell to Mars and that is what destroyed it but how big was their ship to do that and why were they there to begin with.

I realize that this information is not really part of what the sub is about but I would like to know more about the who, the why, and the how come. Otherwise this is a great way to begin a Supers campaign and the setting seems feasible to have normal citizens turn into heroes or villains. Go to Comment
The Last Mind Flayer
Plots  (Crisis)   (Single-Storyline)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2016-03-27 10:34 PM
So true.The only books I can recall reading about the Mind Flayer are the Forgotten Realms books. More than one of them have mention of them but they are never really the Main Main Antagonists. Go to Comment
The Last Mind Flayer
Plots  (Crisis)   (Single-Storyline)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2016-03-27 10:37 PM
This has a very huge retro feel as has been said and I love it. It is definitely early DnD modules of the Keep on the Borderlands path. I love it. And as a side note... Mind Flayers, Illithids... whatever you wish to call them can all burn in hell. I hate them. Go to Comment
31 years IRL(33 ish!) of my Mysantia Campaign
Articles  (Campaign)   (Game Mastering)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2015-01-03 02:40 AM
I would think this would be better in the forums. This doesn't seem like a sub but more like a conversation piece. I really can't put to words what I want to say about this really. Go to Comment
The Dwarven Beard Explained
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Mountains)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2015-01-03 02:43 AM
Only voted Go to Comment
27/30 Bad Things about Treasure
Articles  (Humor/ Editorial)   (Gaming - In General)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2015-01-03 09:35 AM
A great sub Checka. I did something similar to my son recently and he put on one of the items I created in y necro subs. Needless to say it didn't end well. Go to Comment
The Lord of Blood, Dracula
NPCs  (Major)   (Combative)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2014-12-03 10:11 PM
A nice take on an old legend. However some parts were a little too vague for me seeing as there was more than enough specific information regarding everything else.

How did he "acquire" his Immunity to Sunlight? That seems like a very important (to me anyway) aspect as it is commonly unusual a thing for any vampire to be Immune to Sunlight.

The Supernatural Evil that he had a feud with that eventually tore him apart. Who or what was it? How did they begin to feud and why? Is that being still alive? If so, interesting plot information on how it could be used against him. As a GM I would love to know that. Seeing how impossible it seems like mere mortals could kill him. The enemy of my enemy is my friend.

I'm assuming Marcus is a player. How did he find Dracula/ wake him up (bring him back to life - kinda vague to me) and what did he learn from him? And what was "done" to him?

I realize a lot of this could be up to interpretation but like I said with so much specific detail I'm just wishing for a bit more. Go to Comment
Heraldry of the Underworld
Articles  (Resource)   (Gaming - Genre)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2014-08-13 09:48 PM
This is one of those that is so simple it should have been done much sooner. The thought of underworld tattoo's as a symbol of heraldic stature is wonderful and something i will use in the future for my Hellgate Prison run. Go to Comment
The Falling Castle
Locations  (Fortification)   (Other)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2014-06-02 09:57 PM
It is simple and to the point. The information is given sparsely to tune it to ones own group or campaign with ease. I rather like it. I found myself thinking of Hellgate and how this is almost a like minded prison/ forgotten realm of similar torture. I wished for more information but realized it was very bare bones and didn't really need much more regarding information I couldn't fill out myself.

I like it val. Go to Comment
The Dagger of Danbir
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Campaign Defining)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2014-01-03 05:34 PM


I found this very difficult to read. I will not be the first to piece this apart, I will however say that I love the imagery of the names, The Being Of Greater Spaces and the City of Two Halves. Just the names themselves to me hold my imagination.



One of the issues I had with this, and I will leave it at this, is the shear abilities and power of this item are of a Legendary sort and not one that would seem to come in to the players hands as it would greatly unbalance the game. It seems a bit to munchkin for me.



But, expand on those two titles please... I do want to hear more about them.

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The Dagger of Danbir
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Campaign Defining)
Mourngrymn's comment on 2014-01-09 11:11 PM
I rarely get involved with a member, especially new members, as creative angst usually causes issues. However, I would like to say that you sir have the PERFECT attitude to be here at this site. A willingness to take criticism, which even I have had issues with in the past, and a complete jovial learning mentality. I love it. I realize my comment was not very specific or helpful but it was in fear of a retaliatory remark and you leaving the site. I hope you are here to stay. I may not be the best writer here, and am infrequent at times which I am trying to fix, but if you need advice, help, or someone to throw ideas at please do not hesitate to ask me. Ill gladly help. Go to Comment
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