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Khasikarana Island
Locations  (Area)   (Water)
Morningstar's comment on 2015-07-31 02:37 PM
As far as bits 2 & 3 goes, thanks; I'll put those in.

As far as the first? How do you figure that cutting out someone's HEART is ever so much less naughty than sacrificing a sailor's genitals? Why NOT that? What makes THAT body part uniquely off-limits? And hell if I know whether there's a "mythological precedent" for a junk-loving god. Does there need to be? That's the creating your own idea bit, I figure. Go to Comment
Infestation
Articles  (Fiction)   (Gaming - In General)
Morningstar's comment on 2015-07-28 11:24 PM
Not bad. A little short. Go to Comment
A Grave Problem
Plots  (Discovery)   (Encounter)
Morningstar's comment on 2015-07-31 02:47 PM
Not a bad hook. I like the bit where it's a student prank.

I might also throw in that about a half day later, locals discover that the tomb's been opened (maybe someone coming by to pay respects), and as the buried person was a beloved pillar of the community, they freak out and start all manner of hue and cry. Go to Comment
The Cattle Raid
Plots  (Hired)   (Mini-Campaign)
Morningstar's comment on 2015-07-31 02:50 PM
Only voted Go to Comment
Swamps 101
Articles  (Regional)   (Swamp)
Morningstar's comment on 2015-07-30 12:15 AM
Good stuff, a lot of detail. One big thing you left out: the folk who LIVE in a swamp. There are always folks who make a living there, fishing and maybe gathering the rare plants that only grow there ... criminals hiding out where they know the law will never find them ... rebels who know every channel and matted island. Go to Comment
A Summers Freeze
Plots  (Crisis)   (Side-Quest)
Morningstar's comment on 2015-07-31 03:03 PM
Yeah, it sure does have the Old School feel, but not in a good way: typos, bad grammar, jarring modern names (Agent William S Donovan, really?) and dialog that sounds like Nebraska 1895 instead of anything fantastic. If you were GOING for a mediocre sub, and it looks like you might have been, that's another thing, but OSR/Retro shouldn't have to mean clunky. Go to Comment
30 Judges
NPCs  (Scenario Based)   (Political)
Morningstar's comment on 2015-07-27 01:11 AM
Sorry, I think it's incomplete. #30 isn't a judge at all, and a couple others towards the end is about what they are or what their backstory is, not about how they act on the bench. Go to Comment
30 Items You Need
Items  (Equipment Listing)   (Non-Magical)
Morningstar's comment on 2015-07-27 01:41 AM
Ouch. Did you realize that you've got a SIXTY-FIVE POUND packload there, about, and that's using modern materials for some of those things? (The modern weight of Manila rope, or 5/16" steel cable, for instance.)

No bedroll. No hatchet. No belt knife. No waterskin. No bug netting. No RATIONS. Hell, you've left out a BACKPACK. 20 lbs extra right there.

If you're going to be serious about camping, you need such things. (And for those yahoos who say "It's fantasy, I don't give a damn," you sure as hell don't need Dutch ovens or changes of clothing.) Certainly I've seen the result of young pups at combat LARPing events who think they can just wrap themselves in a cloak and rest overnight in the grass, instead of having a proper bedroll or camp bed -- they're achy and not up to snuff the next day. Go to Comment
30 Items You Need
Items  (Equipment Listing)   (Non-Magical)
Morningstar's comment on 2015-07-28 07:43 PM
Ouch. Did you realize that you've got a SIXTY-FIVE POUND packload there, about, and that's using modern materials for some of those things? (The modern weight of Manila rope, or 5/16" steel cable, for instance.)

No bedroll. No hatchet. No belt knife. No waterskin. No bug netting. No RATIONS. Hell, you've left out a BACKPACK. 20 lbs extra right there.

If you're going to be serious about camping, you need such things. (And for those yahoos who say "It's fantasy, I don't give a damn," you sure as hell don't need Dutch ovens or changes of clothing.) Certainly I've seen the result of young pups at combat LARPing events who think they can just wrap themselves in a cloak and rest overnight in the grass, instead of having a proper bedroll or camp bed -- they're achy and not up to snuff the next day. Go to Comment
Janice Spencer
NPCs  (Minor)   (Combative)
Morningstar's comment on 2015-07-28 11:30 PM
It's sure a lot of background material, and that much is good. What this DOESN'T have is numbers. Sure, this is all system-agnostic, but what can she do? How good is she at it? Is she a good shot? How smart is she? Strong? Obviously she's survived a good bit of battle, but is she good or just lucky? We don't know. Go to Comment
Old Drozhenen
Locations  (City)   (Tundra/ Arctic)
Morningstar's comment on 2015-07-30 10:35 PM
It's a nice start, but what do we take from it, evocative though the prose is? That the city's cold, it's religious, the locals are insular, and there are a lot of freaking bells. (I'm also kinda puzzled at how a 70 year old could be an "urchin.") Go to Comment
Ashala Neritha
NPCs  (Minor)   (Domestic/ Craft)
Morningstar's comment on 2015-07-30 12:11 AM
Good stuff. I like how she's in a bit of a box as what she might do next. Go to Comment
One Hundered Twenty Three Islands!
Locations  (Area)   (Water)
Morningstar's comment on 2015-07-30 10:38 PM
Hell of a group effort. Go to Comment
Beacon's Hill
Locations  (Neighborhoods)   (Any)
Morningstar's comment on 2015-07-27 12:47 AM
You're not. It's an extremely thinly veiled set of locations in Boston. Go to Comment
Beacon's Hill
Locations  (Neighborhoods)   (Any)
Morningstar's comment on 2015-07-27 12:49 AM
Not particularly original, most of the details belong to the same neighborhoods in Boston. Go to Comment
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