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Posting Societies
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Moonlake's comment on 2013-04-29 11:52 PM
Thanks for voting and commenting on this sub. I understand what you mean but I'm not sure whether I will come back to work on this sub- it actually started out because of a Challenge in the forum requesting that the tips on writing for each category be populated for version 2 of the Citadel (remember the set of dotpoints you see in the submission input page back then?). Similarly, the suitable sections come about because back then you start from a standard template with particular section headers already put in for you for items and NPCs so I think I was trying to create the same template with standard headers for the Society category and the others. Go to Comment
Posting Societies
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Moonlake's comment on 2013-05-11 10:21 PM
The 3-Points-Timeline Method to Constructing a Society

One useful method for constructing a society is what I call the 3-Points-Timeline Method which sketches out the development of a society across time. Basically, it boils down to jotting down the past, the here and now and the future for a particular society. Below are some general notes about contents that could be covered under each time period:

The Past- Basically the founding story that can cover elements such as:
· The founder and his/her/its involvement with the underlying cause for the society 
· How the founder built up the society 
· Circumstances of the evolution/split for a society that is a tributary or descendant organisation from another one with a longer history

The here and now
· Current size and prosperity
· Activities, noting in particular any activities that deviate/branch out from the original cause 
· Organisation structure/key personnel

The Future
· Again, size and prosperity
· The circumstances of its splitting/destruction if it applies
· Other aspects about its evolution from the Here and Now

An illustrated example for this method: Tuner Mage

This really all started off from another sub and is some kind of filler information of one-sentence in length: “A group of mages that can alter the strength and properties of spells or enchanted items slightly but cannot cast a spell themselves”

Using the 3-Points-Timeline Method, I filled out the evolution of this group in the following way*: 
The Past -
· A story about the founder and how he discovered his unique talent (rounded out some details on the mage apprentice system and social ranking for the setting) 
· How and why he started up the society (brought in context about the background era)

The here and now
· Selection and initiation into the society
· Growth (being more accessible to public) and the evolution of activities undertaken (incorporating evolution of relationship with more traditional mages)

The Future
· Split off from this group- Geomancers {one particular school (of thought) amongst this magic system}

*whatever content in brackets can be ignored as far as illustration of the method goes. I’m just joting them down to show how this method helps me to round out my Dragon Empire setting (which is really some additional component that’s not strictly on-topic within this particular sub).

Also, a final note about this method is that it can be used for the basis of multiple related subs on a given society and its evolution if it suits. For example, I’ve dropped the Future part of my Tuner Mage one.

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Posting Societies
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Moonlake's comment on 2013-05-11 10:35 PM
Apparently, wonderlust makes me revisit this again and I've added an additional scroll on a particular method used to construct a society. Go to Comment
Posting Societies
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Moonlake's comment on 2013-06-19 08:51 PM
I disagree with you slightly. I think some of the issues you raised are there already but just not as fully spelt-out as they could be. On fitting a society in with the world, I didn't explicitly mention it in the straight informative part of this sub but in my illustrated example, you can see that in the Here and Now section, thinking abt the growth of Tuner Mages brings me to incorporate the evolution of relationships of these Tuner Mages with traditional mages, which is one aspect of what you call fitting a society in with the world. There could be other aspects to it but in general, I would think this is in general sufficient for tying a society into a world since not all societies are supposed to have earthshaking influences on a world. However, I do appreciate your comment. I'm not trying to be defensive/argumentative, just replying to comments on my sub that I thought needed replies as is my habit. Go to Comment
Posting Locations
Articles  (Resource)   (Gaming - In General)
Moonlake's comment on 2015-01-21 02:34 AM
Update: Put this out as Collaboration Requested simply because I have levelled up enough to earn more than 1 CRs even though current content is probably out of context Go to Comment
Bacon Elemental
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (City/ Ruin)
Moonlake's comment on 2009-03-01 05:58 PM
Amusing with a good and plausible backstory. Go to Comment
Lady Alice Carmont
NPCs  (Minor)   (Political)
Moonlake's comment on 2009-02-26 12:04 AM
A good expansion, well written Go to Comment
Lady Argent
NPCs  (Major)   (Political)
Moonlake's comment on 2009-02-26 06:34 PM
Compliments on the completeness of the expansion.
A bit of a loose end with respect to "the demon she absorbed" part as I see it but doesn't detract from the quality of this piece. In fact, I much prefer the current length. Go to Comment
Lady Argent
NPCs  (Major)   (Political)
Moonlake's comment on 2009-02-26 08:06 PM
Apology to the author for making the unsubstantiated comment on the demon part, I wasn't reading things probably. I thought the sentence read "Akhazareth the Blade (AB) tried to possess the duchy" so thought AB is a person. Didn't realise that until valadaar pointed it out. Go to Comment
The Leper King
NPCs  (Mythic/ Historical)   (Mystical)
Moonlake's comment on 2009-02-25 07:42 PM
Enjoyed the way this is written. Will be good as a back story. Actually was torn b/w a 4 and 4.5 Go to Comment
Items  (Materials)   (Non-Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2009-03-27 11:35 PM
Updated: I think it's high time that I get done with my Silks Codex so here's the last instalment of it although I can't really get enough creative spin into it to make it into a full sub and I'm very pedantic with the logic of my ideas so this would have to be just a stub. But I mentioned in the overall Codex, if a comemnt sets me off or if someone is so kind to give me some ideas to make it better, I will come back to this. Go to Comment
Items  (Materials)   (Non-Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2010-11-03 10:24 PM
Update: Added Common Uses. Promoted from Stub to Sub since this now feels complete to me. Go to Comment
Items  (Materials)   (Non-Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2010-11-04 01:57 AM
Wow, didn't expect so quick a response (to the towncrier)! Thanks for the comment. I quite like the Resonating Knot myself. Go to Comment
Items  (Materials)   (Non-Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2010-11-04 06:33 PM
Actually, the sub name genuinely doesn't have much to do with my username except that I've decided to attach some kind of natural element as a prefix to all 3 of my fantasy silks.
Thanks for the comment- I think it's quite fair. I also do not envision this as being more than a background item that just enhances the atmosphere of gameplay. I think that's why I originally put it as a stub in the first place- because it felt a bit mundane in comparision to the other 2 silks (and the length back then just happened to suit the stub format). Go to Comment
Holding Back the Night
Plots  (Mystical)   (Side-Quest)
Moonlake's comment on 2015-01-25 02:41 AM
Like others have said, a straightforward idea and that's the whole beauty of it. Go to Comment
The Lazy Goat
Locations  (Establishment)   (Plains)
Moonlake's comment on 2009-02-09 05:37 PM
Only voted Go to Comment
Cloak of Dusk
Items  (Clothes)   (Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2009-02-08 12:01 AM
Only voted Go to Comment
The Creepy Little Dead Girl
Lifeforms  (Constructed)   (City/ Ruin)
Moonlake's comment on 2009-02-07 10:03 PM
Reminds me of the little girl in Silent Hills. Description is well done- her history is quite creepy and a little sad.

Two minor typos and things I noticed in the Additional Info section:
1. Shouldn't it be her "bite mark" covered by... rather than "her bite" as the latter means she bit someone?
2. last paragraph- missing word: "the meat she is so happily eating/chewing on etc. is in fact human flesh"

btw, do you like the name Amber that much? I remember you are also the author of Amber, the Queen of Whore though I realise she was also a character from an earlier work.

Also, I've moved the Ice Maiden post to In work to properly expand on it using Manfred's and your ideas. Thanks so much. Go to Comment
Ice Maidens
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Other)
Moonlake's comment on 2009-02-07 04:02 PM
What I had in mind is that these Snow Sprites, being spiritual beings, will use the dead bodies as hosts (much like possession of bodies by typical ghosts). But I thought the word possess has the connotation that these bodies are forcefully taken over so I somehow used the word infuse which I see now gave you the impression that someone helps to put the snow sprites into the dead bodies. Maybe I should change the sentence? But I don't know how to phrase it better? Alternatively, I could update the history and say that a mage, taking pities on the Snow Sprites, helped them with the transformation. Other ppl's thoughts on this? Go to Comment
Ice Maidens
Lifeforms  (Intelligent Species)   (Other)
Moonlake's comment on 2009-02-07 08:04 PM
Re: Cheka Man's comment:
To be honest, I haven't thought about this part as the Ice Maidens came to me due to my other post Icesilk, for which I was going to write up a long entry on how the Ice Maidens are discovered and how trade opens up on this commodity etc. And then it occurs to me that I need to explain the Ice Maidens so I put up this current post to not clutter up the other post. My initial thoughts are that I will not be fleshing this idea out, hence the link to the Minor Race Codex which I understand to be for such ideas.

Anyway, to answer your question, I think one of the half-formed snippets I have in my mind on the Ice Maidens is that they have basically procured any bodies of elvan females (buried else the families would surely know) that they chance upon and walked off with them. So I would say currently, the familes do not know. Your question, though, gave me another half-formed snippet on the Ice Maidens- that later the families will find out but I don't know their reactions yet.

Re: Manfred:
What you wrote is certainly an interesting idea that goes well with the Ice Maidens. Thanks for suggesting it. However, as I've mentioned before, I don't know whether I will be expanding on this entry. Currently, I've already got quite a few posts in the In Work section (both hidden and public) and sometimes when I try to progress on one, it turns out that I'm not in the mood for it and I will write something else. Eg. I was really trying to expand on my Icesilk post when I started thinking abt the Ice Maidens and out this post pops. So we wil wait and see whether one day my mind tells me to come back to this. Go to Comment
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