I agree with Axle on the main. Still, I like the twist to this item (which originally I thought was missing cos not explicitly singled out under a separate header) but really on second thought I like the twist a lot. Go to Comment
A fairly original concept, to interpret vampires in terms of psionics. Write up is also solid. One nitpick with it, however, is that halfway thru the "What is a Psionovariate?" section (having forgotten the title) I really wondered abt why the exclusive focus on the Alucardian Psionovariates as I was expeceting a brief description of each Psionovariate type. Maybe change the section heading or regroup content in the opening paragraph and the What is a Psionovariate section (I mean, currently it just seems a bit confusing to me because the starting paragraphs talk abt Alucardian Psionovariates specifically. Then the "What is a...?" section starts from a general overview on the Psionvariates and then w/o warning it goes back to focusing specifically on the Alucardians.) Go to Comment
The concept of these missile fishes is quite nice by itself and I really wish that Tundra's comment to Scras' clarification question had been incorporated into the sub itself as the info. included there was fascinating. The bit about their hunted by the Akaat surely brought the creatures to life. Go to Comment
The forests, the swamps, the lands lost to wilderness, fang, and willow. These lands are home to the creatures of wiing, tooth and claw. Some far more capable of fending off the hominids, others still, are less fortunate, falling prey to spears, arrows, and dogs. As the hominids encroach upon the sacred woodlands and miry bogs there are times that the thorns and vines are animated by the spirit of the land in order to fight. In this way the mysterious guardians are formed. In the shapes of wolves, bears, and many other greater and more terrible beasts, each with eyes of glowing emerald. Fiercely defending creatures of burrow and glade.