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Towers of Volturn
Locations  (Ruins)   (Any)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-06-11 11:58 PM
A high quality piece that effectively serves its purpose. Good write-up.
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Selyn DeJaod
NPCs  (Minor)   (Combative)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-06-11 10:01 PM
A solid 3
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Crystallised Dragon Blood
Items  (Jewelry)   (Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-06-16 09:46 PM
Interesting take on the mana battery idea. Go to Comment
The Road
Locations  (TransWorld)   (Any)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-07-05 11:25 PM
Quite nice concept, simple but having great utility uses. Go to Comment
Fungus Spear
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Non-Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-06-21 01:38 AM
I'm with d_d on his pt of having more symptoms for the fungus, otherwise, this is a solid sub Go to Comment
Coldfire Urn
Items  (Other)   (Campaign Defining)
Moonlake's comment on 2009-02-19 11:57 PM
Only voted Go to Comment
The Mask of the White Witch
Items  (Clothes)   (Cursed)
Moonlake's comment on 2011-02-20 10:58 PM


A well written piece. I especially like the coherence of this item's magical effects to the backstory.


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The Green Sword
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-06-21 12:01 AM
I'm with Echo on this, a 3 it is. This has potential but I don't vote on potentials, only how it is. Go to Comment
The Wheezing Dragon
Plots  (Discovery)   (Side-Quest)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-06-18 12:05 AM
I like the simpleness of this plot but personally, I do not like the bit abt the evil black dragon much nor the implied thing abt the PCs have to help out or else.
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Foolblade
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Cursed)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-06-02 06:28 AM
After reading thru the comments and all, I think this is an okay idea. However, in the actual reading, I was misled into thinking into someone blackmailed a mage into making a Foolblade with its current curse set in which confused me. It wasn't until I read the comments, I realised that what happened was the mage was blackmailed into making a weapon and she put in the curse to pay the person back. Therefore, 0.5 points deducted, making this 2.5.
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City of Venerability
Locations  (Other)   (City)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-06-02 05:32 AM
The core idea of this place being a rumor is okay and there's nothing flawed abt it in terms of content but the structure of this piece is just all over the place and that's where this is a 2.
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A man that needs a drink
Plots  (Duty)   (Side-Quest)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-06-02 05:30 AM
The core idea of a plot that largely serves to confuse players is okay but I think the bit abt the drunken staying in the same bar for 3 years and starting a barfight with anyone attempting to steal the note from him a bit of a logical flaw as it implies that somehow he has the note very securely kept around his person OR he's somehow the best fighter in terms of a bar-fight which I find hard to believe.
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Book of Fury
Items  (Books and Scrolls)   (Heroic)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-06-19 09:21 PM
Short and sweet. Go to Comment
The Meerschaum Smoking Man
NPCs  (Major)   (Criminal/Espionage)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-06-11 10:18 PM
A good 'informant' type NPC with his own ulterior motives.
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Spark
NPCs  (Mythic/ Historical)   (Mystical)
Moonlake's comment on 2009-03-16 06:14 PM
I would have liked a bit more touch up on the presentation eg. maybe the first big chunk of text under Background could go into a blockquote or flufftext format (borrowing from Scras' terminology) aka italics.

But this certainly doesn't detract from the quality of the idea. Very usable in gameplay as well as just from a literary point of view. Go to Comment
Weaves of Caging
Items  (Home/ Personal)   (Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-06-04 05:56 AM
An item useful both as background material and for having more active role in a setting. Personally, I really like all types of mundane or utility items. Go to Comment
The Accursed Heirloom
Plots  (Discovery)   (Single-Storyline)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-06-02 08:23 PM
A good open-ended plot.
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Saber Rat
NPCs  (Scenario Based)   (Combative)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-05-18 01:38 AM
The fundamental idea is there (and as far as the bg goes, it's okay, but the way it's written makes things seem abrupt) but I can't give it a 3 because the amount of details given doesn't support such a score.
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The See-through Assassin
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2011-02-21 12:48 AM


A truly devious construct


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The Art of Healing
Items  (Art and Music)   (Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-06-20 07:23 PM
The myth is excellent and also, I just happen to like all utility item subs. Go to Comment
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