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The Chalice Bearers
Society/ Organizations  (Religious)   (Area)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-06-12 12:24 AM
A nice piece for adding colour to a world
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The Cathedral of Haracon
Locations  (Establishment)   (Any)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-07-04 07:46 PM
The death of Munir was a nice unexpected twist for me. Overall, a solid and well-written sub. Go to Comment
Wind Chimes of Ocean Calm
Items  (Transports)   (Heroic)
Moonlake's comment on 2011-02-20 11:54 PM

My favourite part about this piece is the backlash of the storm to discordance created by two neighbouring chimes. Overall, a piece where all the components hang together well.

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Being of a Clerical or Holy Nature
Systems  (Divine/ Spirit)   (General)
Moonlake's comment on 2012-06-18 06:53 PM
Good idea for a Codex and good lead-in for the topic of divinity and related concepts. Go to Comment
Sextant of the Soul
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-06-22 07:33 PM
A sub that easily fits into my 4+ score range and plus I like the otherworldly feel of the Dream Realm so bonus marks. Go to Comment
War Forbici
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Non-Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-06-02 06:08 AM
The core idea, I don't love it nor hate it, unlike others before me. The write-up is good quality and has added realism and extra spice to an otherwise plain and (to me at least) quite boring write-up of a particular type of weapon (I know there's weapon enthusiasts on this site but I'm just not one of them). So a score of 3.5.
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Get a Plot
Articles  (Resource)   (Game Mastering)
Moonlake's comment on 2009-02-09 04:53 PM
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Articles  (Fiction)   (Game Mastering)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-05-04 01:44 AM
Déjà vu

One of the PCs had been dreaming of a strange decorating knot that is half red and half blue, an item he had never seen before that nevertheless is giving him a strong sense of déjà vu. What could it be- suppressed memories, visions, remembrances of previous reincarnations or something else?
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Ice Ghoul
Lifeforms  (Ethereal)   (Tundra/ Arctic)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-05-18 01:53 AM
The origin of these Ghouls are interesting and quite reasonable but you need to be careful with the write-up so that there's no mis-interpretation. At one point, I thought there's some logic conflict in what you wrote. In particular, you've said earlier that a Ice Ghoul is basically mad and tell its killer apart from an innocent person but then in the ways to lay them to rest section, you said you can present them with their killers and that will appease them and send them to the after-life, which I initially thought was two pieces of conflicting info. But then I paused to think abt it and I think you mean that you make them come to reason first with a fire spell and then you go find and bring their killers to them for them to settle the debt. Nothing majorly wrong with this sub overall, just thought I would point this particular bit out that's affecting the quality of the sub.
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Ice Ghoul
Lifeforms  (Ethereal)   (Tundra/ Arctic)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-05-18 01:59 AM
I find the underlying concept of how these ghouls arise interesting and logical but I just want to point out one point in your write-up which is prone to misinterpretation. At one point, I thought you provided conflicting info. b/c you said earlier that Ice Ghouls cannot tell their killers apart from innocent ppl but when you describe ways of laying them to rest, you say one of the ways is to bring their killers so that they can 'settle their debt'. Upon a re-think, I get it that you mean to say that they have to hit them with a fireball spell first to make them come to reason and then go off in pursuit of the murderer. Just need to be clear on this pt, otherwise, there's nothing majorly wrong with it. I personally have no quibbles with the power of these ghouls b/c I think their rarity compensates for their seemingly high powers.
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The Four Magi: A Children's Folk Tale of the North
Systems  (Societal/ Cultural)   (General)
Moonlake's comment on 2011-02-22 11:21 PM

A nice folk tale with good metaphor use that can be inserted into any world.

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The Hundred Journeys of Lai-Xeng
Systems  (Societal/ Cultural)   (General)
Moonlake's comment on 2009-06-21 06:23 PM
Definitely my kind of sub. Go to Comment
The Hundred Journeys of Lai-Xeng
Systems  (Societal/ Cultural)   (General)
Moonlake's comment on 2009-06-23 12:26 AM
Lai-Xeng and the two Shy Students

One day, as Lai-Xeng was walking pass a school, he overheard a conversation between two students.
“Should we ask the Master about that question?”
“But everyone else seems to understand perfectly. If we ask the Master, he will think we are dimwitted.”

Lai-Xeng cleared his throat at this point and said, “He who asks is a fool for five minutes, but he who does not ask remains a fool forever.”

And the two students bowed their heads, and left to seek out their Master.
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The Hundred Journeys of Lai-Xeng
Systems  (Societal/ Cultural)   (General)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-05-04 01:39 AM
Lai-Xeng and the Frustrated Scholar

One day, as Lai-Xeng was travelling on the road to the Imperial City, he met a *frustrated scholar who was coming from the opposite direction. Recognising Lai-Xeng, he asked, “O Lai-Xeng, O wise Sage, how is it that those of far less worth than myself have all advanced in life while I am still just a commoner? Is there no justice in the world?”

To this, Lai-Xeng replied: “A gem is not polished without rubbing, nor a man perfected without trials. 

And the scholar bowed his head, and left Lai-Xeng feeling wiser than before.

*frustrated scholar: In ancient China, scholars from all over China would travel to the Imperial City to attend the Imperial Examination. This is often a prerequisite to entering into civil service, with high scoring individuals being awarded various court positions. Individuals who fail the exams could often become very frustrated as they could be very talented but still fail repeatedly while those far less talented had all succeeded because they had the right connections.

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Crawling Ghosts
Lifeforms  (Ethereal)   (Any)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-06-29 10:00 PM
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Luzori Mushroom
Lifeforms  (Flora)   (Mountains)
Moonlake's comment on 2011-02-17 04:53 PM

A nice fantasy mushroom

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Moonlake's comment on 2010-12-19 11:21 PM

Voting 4 and the accompanying statements says it all for me.

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Funeral Gold and Grave Silver
Items  (Jewelry)   (Cursed)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-06-22 02:14 AM
A nice class of items to throw in a world of loot and plunder. Go to Comment
Godkiss Butterfly
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Desert)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-06-02 06:24 AM
One of the subs that I would describe as 'short and sweet'. Like Spark, loved the "never ask for a kiss from a god" bit 
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Grey District
Locations  (Neighborhoods)   (Any)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-06-28 05:42 AM
A quite refreshing semi-slum area. Go to Comment
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