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Zufa, god of Misplaced Things
Systems  (Divine/ Spirit)   (Defining)
Moonlake's comment on 2009-02-26 07:27 PM
Seems at long last I have some outside entities to blame for my forgetfulness Go to Comment
Port Reliance
Locations  (City)   (Water)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-05-18 01:32 AM
The slang talk is nice and gives the sub a fitting atmosphere. But I agree with this being somewhat "under-completed" in the sense that as it is, a title of "Notably locations at Port Reliance" seems more appropriate.
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Pathkeepers of the Eternal Pattern
Systems  (Divine/ Spirit)   (Defining)
Moonlake's comment on 2011-02-22 11:00 PM

Good creation story and the excerpt of each path-keeper is masterfully done.

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The Altar of the Sun
Dungeons  (Underground)   (Rooms/ Halls)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-05-18 02:05 AM
I don't think this is so badly written but like others said, it's just some alone and not linked to anything. If that was the intended purpose (to make it be able to be plomped in any dungeon whatsoever), I would make this a Stub rather than a normal sub.
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The Mad Prophet Aldiel
NPCs  (Minor)   (Religious)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-06-28 05:32 AM
Only voted Go to Comment
Outsiders Inn
Locations  (Establishment)   (Any)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-06-11 11:50 PM
Good location sub with high potential in terms of utility.
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Lifeforms  (Unique)   (Water)
Moonlake's comment on 2009-11-12 07:52 PM
I like the logic of how a Slurran came to be and its nature.
Interestingly, this reminds me of a Japanese movie called Another heaven where the villain is also a liquid "thing" that seeps into victims' ears and turn them into homicidal killers. Go to Comment
Pegoran Doors
Dungeons  (Any)   (Doors)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-06-18 12:13 AM
A nice addition to dungeons.
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Australian Mythology
Society/ Organizations  (Religious)   (Regional)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-05-15 09:45 PM
Actually, I remember I was eagerly awaiting one of the suggested companion subs to this that was planned, Chinese Mythology. Go to Comment
What Makes a Weapon Magic?
Articles  (Humor/ Editorial)   (Game Mastering)
Moonlake's comment on 2012-06-19 08:21 PM
A useful guide on how to make magic weapons that breaks away from the stereotype Go to Comment
One Hundered Twenty Three Islands!
Locations  (Area)   (Water)
Moonlake's comment on 2009-04-30 01:33 AM
93. Eagles Beak
A location marking roughly half the distance between the Western and Eastern continents of a world, this island derives its name from the fact that the North-Eastern portion of the island looks like an eagles head in profile. In particular, the Eagles eye is a dormant volcano, which is the source of the hot springs that liberally dot this uninhabited island.

While the hot springs have minor restorative properties for small injuries and in general relieves tiredness, there is a hidden danger in soaking in them. A species of tiny crabs reside in these hot springs and their legs exude a substance that paralyses human nerves within seconds once in contact with skin. Go to Comment
One Hundered Twenty Three Islands!
Locations  (Area)   (Water)
Moonlake's comment on 2009-04-30 01:34 AM
94. Island of the Lake of Mirror
As its name indicates, the prominent landmark on this island is a lake at its centre by the name of Lake of Mirror. This island has a tropical climate and is lush with greenery and teeming with wildlife. Tribes of primitive human live here in peace.

The natives of the island believe that gazing into the lake on a cloudless sunny day allows one to gaze into ones souls. The shamans of the native tribes often gather on such days on the shores of the lake to meditate and exchange lures with each other as well a undergoing the ritual of cleansing ones soul of impurities. In addition, the youths of the tribes come to consult the lake for their *true names on their 14th birthdays.

* The children of the tribes are all named at birth by their parents. But once a child reaches adulthood, which for the tribes is the age of 14, this childhood name is not in use anymore. Instead, the adult has to find his/her true name. According to tribal custom, an adults true name is discerned via consultation with the Lake of Mirror. Go to Comment
One Hundered Twenty Three Islands!
Locations  (Area)   (Water)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-05-18 02:28 AM
A great insanely long scoll.
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The creatures of Thanethia.
Lifeforms  (Fauna)   (Other)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-06-11 11:37 PM
Some of the creatures on this scroll are a bit mundane to me personally but overall, I still think this a solid scroll and I esp. like the bit abt the Darkbears' yearly custom. Go to Comment
The Chalice Bearers
Society/ Organizations  (Religious)   (Area)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-06-12 12:24 AM
A nice piece for adding colour to a world
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The Cathedral of Haracon
Locations  (Establishment)   (Any)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-07-04 07:46 PM
The death of Munir was a nice unexpected twist for me. Overall, a solid and well-written sub. Go to Comment
Wind Chimes of Ocean Calm
Items  (Transports)   (Heroic)
Moonlake's comment on 2011-02-20 11:54 PM

My favourite part about this piece is the backlash of the storm to discordance created by two neighbouring chimes. Overall, a piece where all the components hang together well.

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Being of a Clerical or Holy Nature
Systems  (Divine/ Spirit)   (General)
Moonlake's comment on 2012-06-18 06:53 PM
Good idea for a Codex and good lead-in for the topic of divinity and related concepts. Go to Comment
Sextant of the Soul
Items  (Other)   (Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-06-22 07:33 PM
A sub that easily fits into my 4+ score range and plus I like the otherworldly feel of the Dream Realm so bonus marks. Go to Comment
War Forbici
Items  (Melee Weapons)   (Non-Magical)
Moonlake's comment on 2013-06-02 06:08 AM
The core idea, I don't love it nor hate it, unlike others before me. The write-up is good quality and has added realism and extra spice to an otherwise plain and (to me at least) quite boring write-up of a particular type of weapon (I know there's weapon enthusiasts on this site but I'm just not one of them). So a score of 3.5.
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